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And yet more lesbian pairings ruining a perfectly good story.
NOT the cliff hanger. Whyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
6027071 I'm a right royal bastard aren't I?
hmmm, so what; the ponies plans were to injure the human on the day he was expected to talk to the royal sisters on applejacks farm who is an element of harmony?
seems legit
6027157 But remember this guy is a doormat, he will just say he fell down a flight of stairs or something to not get anyone in trouble.
6027214 I imagine a ladder given the circumstances.
not the cliffhanger, not the cliffhanger
6027214 Funny, that doormat knocked out a bunch of ponies. Must have been one of those new weaponized doormats that Gilda was probably swinging around with reckless abandon. Amazing how dangerous these doormats can be these days let me tell ya'.
I DIDN'T remember Applejack and Rarity being together. Now I have ONE question.
If Applejack and Rarity are together. WHAT IS GOING TO HAPPEN TO SPIKE!?!?!?
6027157 Wait, I don't understand, I wrote that they were secretive about the meeting in the previous chapter i'm sure
God damn bigots...They always make me hate perfectly lovable stories.
6027279 To be fair the only pony explicitly said to be 'knocked out' was the one hit with an empty bucket ....and perhaps the pony hit with the rake. All others were 'stunned' or fell off an ambiguously-tall ladder. But that is beside the point.
I think the real concern is what happens afterward.
Presuming the others on the farm or the princesses discover the scene (and considering the amount of noise and "bunch of knocked out ponies" there is zero reason why they wouldn't notice this immediately) , will our protagonist stick to form and
A) Proceed to lie and claim it was all a misunderstanding or
B) Take the blame
Since either of those options are even possible, it may be understandable when some readers refer to our protagonist as a 'doormat'.
Wouldn't the Apples notice such a ruckus?
well when the royal sisters show up they will not be amused
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......these god damn cliffhangers
stayclassy
goddamned ponies,the lot of them
Commence read.
Hm. Plenty of shenanigans.
First off while I myself can't see applejack and rarity's relationship lasting for very long due to their jobs and hobbies being so different and raritys anbishious dreams of growing her buisness I can at least see the something that is there that gives people the idea that they would make a good couple and can move passed it (unlike some couples that make me want to double facepalm at the stupidity of) and second HOLY CRACKERS BATMAN! That is one major cliffhanger.
God damn it. There better not be another month between updates. Shit. This is too good to wait a year for the ending...
6028052 normally I would say good things take time and would be happy whenever it was done but with a cliffhanger like that and how good the story is overall I have to agree with you
6027323 he'll find someone his own age?
Ah the good old-fashioned pony racism. I bet the princesses will be amused.
6027436 I think the lot of them are still atleast 20 - 30 minutes away at the field party.
To Tartarus with all bigots!
6030101
It's entirely up to the author.
They were walking for "at least 20 minutes", so round-about 1 mile give or take depending on if Gilda's 'condition' made for a slower pace. Of course, the only concrete measure of distance given was one field, which is completely arbitrary.
It was made a point that sound "ricochets off the many hills" which implies that loud noises (i.e. childish laughter, falling barrels, or ponies/gryphons screaming) can be reasonably heard from some distance.
The bottom line is that if the author doesn't want the party (or the princesses for that matter) to hear the frakus going on, they simply won't. But It's certainly reasonable that, as written, they'd be able to hear *something* out of the norm going on and be able to get there quickly. While not as fast as Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy wouldn't take 20 min to get there. Even at the slowest (the male gryphon or Gilda reaching the party before they head back) they should be able to catch up before the half-a-mob kidnaps/kills Doc, collects their unconscious/disabled members and make their getaway across open terrain.
On a completely separate point, how did the mob know they'd be there at that moment? Even if they knew the protagonist would be at the party, they couldn't know he'd wander over to *that* barn at *that* time.
The way I'm reading it:
1) They organized a mob.
2) They knew he was heading to Sweet Apple Acres.
3) They waited in the hopes he'd wander back by himself...unless you are trying to convince me that the mob would confront him in the presence of the Elements.
4) They were close enough to the barn to notice him enter and get there within a minute or two of their arrival. But *not* close enough to notice a bronze-armored griffon fly in right after them.
The series of events and timing is just....odd. They either were able to setup this ambush in a short period of time in addition to watching him while remaining unseen themselves....
....or it's a giant collection of coincidences.
Umm, I wasn't expecting THAT.
I'm not a fan of lesbian shipping.
I seriously don't like lesbian shipping of any of the Main 6.
I fucking hate lesbian shipping BETWEEN Main 6.
I'm not sorry about dropping this story... you made me do it. Everybody puts a ship in their fics, true, but wast majority does it without intention to cause shitstorm.
PS. Seriously? Rarity and Applejack? It's the level of fujoshi. Shipping everyone, even if it's the most ridiculous ship ever, just to see some gay grinding.
6030420 Well to not go into any major spoilers, they will/do indeed hear or notice something was wrong. However the timing of the fight would be in my mind something around 10 to 15mins give or take by the end of the chapter exactly (leaving a three to five minute or so gap between them and the event by chapters end). This was why i wrote it in a rushed and streamlined form, perhaps not as well as i could have (as i mentioned in the authors notes) but the point was that this was a very quick frantic escape.
As for the sequence of events it is a mixture of coincidence and planning. The problem with writing it chapter by chapter is that i know already how I'm going to explain this in the story, I did pick up on these issues myself at the time. However at this current time its unwritten, if you seem where I'm coming from. So all i can say is that the inconsistencies and questions are answered in subsequent chapters, just not right now. Also lastly, its because (not to sound redundant or demeaning) its a first person perspective you can only really know what the character knows at the time until its made evident to him, so though it could be a series of unfortunate events to him, from a different perspective the possibility will be more plausible from another.
If that made any scene what so ever.
6030461 Fair enough, personally it was only added as more of a lighthearted counter balance given that the subsequent chapters had been a tad darker in my opinion than I had wanted for this story, I saw no damage in adding it, plus I saw some humorous possible couples scenarios in future chapters after the major arch was over. Though I do understand to a degree your personal rational, its your prerogative regardless.
Have a good one man.
-Madness
Wow. This is fucked up!
I'm pissed at the stupid ponies and the Doctor for not saying anything about the ponies in town.
You better not make us wait long!
Good riddance. We don't need bigots around here. Good stuff, but that cliff hanger.
6031057 If you wanted funny/fun romance, you could use RarxMac, instead you went for the ridiculous one.
Why this fandom is full of lesbian lovers? It's like I'm in some weird, reversed version of fujoshi world, where every male is gay, where here, every female is lesbian.
6031725 Ill take that as a jab at me. You know, that if I'm a bigot, that you're a bigot as well. I don't like lesbians, you don't like people who don't like lesbians. We're the same, but on different sides of the argument.
OMG I hope ge is going to be ok .!!!this was a funny and sweet capter intel that I hope she goes and gets help for him .
God motherfucking damnit!!!
wait why didn't i get a notification this was updated!? months ago too well at least I wont have to wait too long for the next update at least.... hopefully.
Weird how personal that Pegasus that hits him at the end is taking this even the protagonist apparently does not even know him.
Cliff hanger! my old nemesis we meet again!
Man I can't wait for the next chapter
This shit is good real good can't wait for next chapter
No,no,noNO, it's just got to a totally intense moment and fight scene (a part me wants me to either break some wings or snap some unicorn horns) and now i have to wait!
Dang it how come I didn't know about this update until later? I probably should've known that this what the blog update was about but didn't read it well enough to know that this chapter is new.
Anyway, I was honestly expecting Celestia and Luna to crash the party not these... ponies. This is really weird and I'm betting that this will not really end well with for him unless the other griffon owns up or maybe he accidently gave the griffon what it wanted: Gilda. And now Anon will be alone.
But I'm hoping that the other griffon is the one they're looking for but since they mentioned Scootaloo, I guess not.
I really hope we get updates. This was great. Keep up the good work sir!
Not RariJack.
Come on now, give me some respectable ship.
(Didn't actually find anything but you asked for it)
Wow look at that tiny word that didn't really matter anyway is misspelt! Hurtful remarks about your weight/mother/intelligence/sexuality!!!!!!