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5718351 Sorry google docs auto correct failure its fixed now
I would like to take a look at the Human x shy x Gilda chapter
you know dude, if you dont tell them the truth then gilda is gonna get punished, not the ponies.
5718555 Its not a matter of telling them, its a matter of if they believe him or not.
And dropped, sorry but I hate it when a character is a doormat.
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i feel it would be rather hard to hide the truth from a being that can enter my head while i sleep.
5718661 Hmm sorry care to explain. I don't quite follow? If your confusing a bit of slap stick and common scene for a person coping in an alien world without citizenship then yes he is a doormat, if you have to be so crude about it.
Lying to beings that have lived for thousands of years and might as well be gods, not his brightest moment I must say.
5718721 I was talking about his hesitance to tell Gilda the truth and to forget that his black eye ever happened.
5718694 Ah, but it was never established that she is omnipresent in the dream-scape. Also dreams are not always what happened today or the other day. Many times they are meaningless or purely symbolic, meant for you and you alone. A flower blooming could to you mean something like fertility or want for a child, but without context could be meaningless even to someone who observes your dreams.
5718768 The hesitance was because he didn't want to create a scene. I'm sorry if that was not obvious I suppose i as the writer am able to see the future of the story but i do have that explained in the next chapter. As for the shiner it was simply a problem of being outnumbered and that, again if you were to think about it even in the context of our own world concerning the plight of the slaves in pre-civil war america. If a person without civil libertys or rights was attacked nothing could be done, but if he attacked back then he could be charged to the fullest extent of the law. I'm simply tying to add some realism in the story.
Ah Luna drawing the wrong conclusions without being fully informed. This could be tragic as Celestia may have inadvertently come to the same erroneous conclusion.
This guy is acting like a total doormat, if your the only one of your existence and pretty much all princesses know of this, your an 'endangered' species, even though he is capable of being intelligent he somewhat lacks it. Trying to lie to both Celestia and Luna is a recipe for disaster, trying to lie to Gilda about how he got the black eye is an even bigger recipe, seriously is this guy carrying an idiot ball or what?
He needs to stop lying. It's just getting him in a deeper hole.
5718965 Well i wanted to save this but i fear you are a bit impatient so i will try to outline it quickly. have you ever heard of character progression? or do you just demand the end of a movie the moment you start watching it.
5718991 Yes but like away's, hes only human and unfortunately we lie to protect the ones we care about. Even if it puts us into deeper holes.
I'd love too read that new story for you ^_^
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Well Gilda won't stand for it. She's gonna force the issue one way or another.
With violence, probably.
5718965 sorry that was a bit insulting, I didn't mean to undermine your intelligence like that. Under a bit of stress right now please dont take it to seriously.
5719084 haha yes your probably right.
5718993 He was a partial doormat in the first story, and a doormat now, if there is anything to go by when you are the only one of your kind you have to put up a strong front to create an image of self-confidence/ strength to ensure those that prey on the weak can't get a good crack at you, this guy though is like a screen door. Easy to push around and go through unless it gets patched up and possibly replaced.
And also about the movie thing, that only happens when I know that the problem could have been solved in the first few minutes of the movie if the problem is painfully obvious, like Chappie, don't make a robot police force that oppresses the hell out of the people and just maybe a group of people with an out-of-place genius steal an empty McGuffin and program it to free them all.
And also that thing about 'we lie to protect others' no, if you lie to me to try and cover your own ass and I find out, I am throwing either to the wolves or under the bus.
Was a good chapter. It's not surprising Luna thinks he is an abusive relationship. Interested to see where this goes.
5718555 You are right, but at the time, it was just an issue between him a Gilda. He didn't realize not telling them would lead to that. He probably will explain when it's brought up again and I'm sure they can prove it.
damn it now i really want to know what happens, personally i would be pissed at luna i understand the concern for a friend but those are big accusations. also what kind of friend doesn't call you by your name just human friend
stayclassy
Commence read.
Part two.
And even more karmic backlash, or something, to befall upon their house.
And on the move.
I would like to take a look at that shy fic.
Wow, talk about jumping to conclusions Luna.
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Many would.
Imagine if you saw a door open fast with an "angry enough to kill" mad griffon on the other side, and you saw the other on the floor, with a black eye, and then see a kitchen with the table flipped, chairs fallen over, and a few shards of plates and glasses left around?
I would think the same thing too, especially if the injured is keeping the teasing, threats, and attacks from residents of ponyville secret...
Who would be blamed?
The "kind and gentle" ponies?
Or the ill-tempered griffon, who is pregnant (but few even know)?
Also add Luna's low level of patience...
5722641 I stand corrected, those are all very fair Points.
Oh boy, looks like things might be hitting the fan soon.
Also, I'd like to see that fluttershy story you were talking about :)
Okay, the jump into conclusions thing happened anyway whether he didn't want to cause a scene or not, but unfortunately that put Gilda under the radar instead of him. Man, if only he had enough to time cope with what happened today, if only the girls would've gotten off his back until he calms down. Now it looks like nothing sort of Phoenix Wright could help him with the truth now, but maybe Rarity or even Twilight could fill that role in the picnic when the princesses catch up. Or maybe he might explode at the princess about how unfair his entire situation is and that no matter how he sees, it will always end badly for him and Gilda and maybe the princesses will then understand how much fear they've given him and be sorry -and possibly emotionally hurt- about that. If only the girls given him more time to calm down.
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Indeed, what is the whole point of him lying to everyone about the assault again? It's been a while so maybe I forgot but yeah you're in good with the *goddamn rulers of the land*. Maybe you should swallow your pride and fess the fuck up dude.
It's not hard to say ,"No I'm not a victim of domestic abuse I was assaulted by some dipshits and oh yeah my griffon girlfriend is preggers with my baby."
Seriously the miscommunication for drama crap is, as Gilda would say, "lame and dweebish".
I hope the issue of the abusive townsfolk is addressed quickly and not just brushed right by again, though this time it looks like it is actually leading up to just that point. I just think that if it isn't addressed this time, the idiot factor of the characters reaches the point of... well, I don't know how to describe it, but it changes the tone of the story for me too far away from the romance and Gilda romantic complications. I recognize that the main characters mistreatment by the town is a major subplot, but it is one that is far past a point of characterization and minor tension and has become an almost overriding theme. I would go so far as to say that both within in the context of the story and as a reader's focus, the issue of his physical and mental abuse is actually more important than the whole Gilda being pregnant thing, which I think is... bad. I mean, this is supposed to be a story ABOUT a human's troubled romance with Gilda right? Not just another HIE fic where one of annon's problems happens to be a romance with Gilda as he addresses the larger (generic) problem of being a HIE. Furthermore, it doesn't help that the characters just seem a little too oblivious to his plight, even if he is trying (poorly) to hide it from them. I could overlook it to this point, but any further just discredits the other characters (Especially the ones who are supposed to be perceptive to things like this, like Applejack, Rarity, and CELESTIA).
Basically, if the jerk with the rock gets a stern talking to from Celestia* within the next few chapters, then this comment is totally unnecessary, but I would really like to caution the story from focusing too much on this sub-plot for too much longer.
Just my writers two cents.
*The only character who seems viable for laying the smack-down in a conclusive way at this point, but I suppose that Twilight (in the presence of her mentor) could give a stirring speech that could bring about the same end.**
**Unless we're taking the "rock-guy actually thought the protagonist was non-sentient" route, in which case Protagonist could resolve this himself.
P.S. I was thinking about it and decided I am in the camp hoping the baby is a sphinx <3
5724004 Dont worry it will be addressed in the very near future, I'd like to think that i am
egotisticalcompetent enough to be able to balance both sub-plots (romance and embedded fear of the townsfolk) within the story and can create a chapter that leaves everyone satisfied with the conclusion of that story arch. But then I would say that wouldn't I? hahaPs. yes a spinx is pretty cool isnt it?
5723442 Wait are we reading the same story? Just how is a bi-monthly inspection from your sovereign rulers to see if you haven't misbehaved the same as being
One fawns over him like a child caring for a sick puppy and the other as established more than once in the story does not trust him and vice-versa.
Its not needless lying for nothing if you believe that withholding information until you can coordinate an alibi with Gilda would help save her and the character.
I find his behavior idiotic. He's abused by the town ponies, but he's covering for them. Why? THAT'S the real Stockholm Syndrome.
5725386 Quote from someone in the comments that seems to have the ideas of were I'm coming from without me spoiling anything.
5725444 Dog can't explain himself, he can. Still an idiot.
Making oneself into punching bag and a scape goat isn't helping him to be viewed as non threatening, it makes him look pathetic.
There is a difference between not being aggressive, and being human sacrifice. He's the later.
It's like with kids. You ought to be nice, but not too submissive, and let them hit you like it's nothing, because it'll end with them gouging your eye out with a fork, because you had nothing against their other actions.
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A dog cant explain itself, but its owner can and so can the context of why it bite someone. It still gets put down.
He can explain himself, but who would the over protective authority figure believe? An Alien she has for some reason a reason not to trust or her ponys. Lying is his only way to get out of the situation, so that he can get his find somewhere not incredibly tense and hectic to sort out just whats going on (This has all happened in the same day, nobody especially this character would be quite so level headed as to pick the rational idea bare the context in mind). Not telling Gilda was so that she doesn't start something that would end with more violence its not the answer after all. Not to protect the other pony.
Not explaining Gilda's misunderstanding to Luna was so that as mentioned before he could sort out the correct story because honestly from this scene an outsider would obviously think it was her that hit him. Theres no evidence he could give that could say otherwise, and even if he tried convincing Luna she would convince herself that it was part of the syndrome, Lying to protect the abusive husband because for some reason she still loves him that sort of thing.
I know its not the right thing, but its in the heat of the moment and part of the characters flaw. Not everyone acts the same in a scenario.
5725635 I don't know how it's there where you live, but here, in Poland, if dog bites someone with a reason (protecting someone, himself, property), he only goes for few days, for behavioral evaluation, and only if this bite left severe wound.
I don't know, maybe the one who's looking like he was beaten to a pulp?
As I remember, this been going on for much longer than a single day, so that's down.
Besides, as I said before, you don't have to be violent to not let other get on your head. Assertiveness is enough.
Face it, he has Stockholm syndrome towards town ponies. He acts like an abused wife, and that's how you wrote him, no matter if you like it, or not.
If he had spine, it wouldn't come to this.
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Look the dogs just an Analogy and in what i said it depends on the context again. Many videos of police men simply shooting a dog for barking or growling at them at a crime scene.
I was actually referring to the troubles that have escalated in the same day eg the walk into town, hospital news, scootaloo and the result their in.
He has not seen an evidence to suggest that being assertive will not lead to violence. Again your judging his actions based on the heat of the moment, and a rash decision.
Some people don't like to start trouble if it can be avoided again its not the right thing sometimes but i does happen.
I didn't want the character to be that assertive. To many times do I read a story were the character is strong willed and assertive which is fine but its not this character. it makes up 90% of HIE. This character has faults, hes not going to act like someone like you or I possibly would. I understand its annoying to see a character get pushed around but then again someone can only get pushed around so many times before they push back.
That's all I'm going to say on the matter, I don't want to go too deep in case i start spoiling anything. Honestly (and please don't take this personally) I think if you don't like how this story is going it probably in your best interest to either wait for the next chapter to see how it played out or to stop reading it. It seems to be aggravating or maybe simply annoying you and you don't like the progression the story's going taking and honestly there are far better story to read and comment about than mine, though I do enjoy the debate rarely get to debate character motivations in my real life i'll say haha.
5725784 Can't say I like most of his traits, but I would make much less fuss about them, if this story wasn't first person. I'm not particularly fond of those type of stories so it's double whammy for me. Still, it's a quite good story, and there's not much humanxgriffon stories around, that result in children (not much humanxgriffon stories at all), so I'll stick with it.
PS. I'm sorry for the dogs in your country.
5725849 I'll agree with you on the first person element that did come back to bite me somewhat, but making it a sequel to screaming eagles i didn't really have a choice unfortunately.
Oh I was actually referring to America in regards to the dogs. Not sure if it really happens in merry old England police don't carry guns here so I hope not.
5726076 Yeah, American cops are assholes.
As for the story, I've seen some of them that changed perspective in sequels. Can't tell you title, because I have few hundred of them on my 'read' list, but there was at least one that change from second person (Like this one. Mistake on my part in previous post.) to first, and few that changed from third to second, and other way around.
5726104 Haha. Yeah I was thinking about it, but in the end at the time I thought i wasn't going to deviate to much, but it's very hard keeping it neutral all the time as i found out. Even finding out ways for the characters to not say his name is tricky in and of itself. Thank god for nicknames (I know i could go with 'Anon' but for some reason i just think that's lazy, I mean if your going to make it a 'you' story and still give the character a name even 'anon' whats the point, you immediately isolated the reader then and their.) sorry person pet peeve of mine I'm just rambling now.
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The moment they start to call him "Anon", I'm leaving this story (don't take it as an encouragement ).
I'm not sure if there's something I hate more than "Anons" in my stories. Anons should stay on 4chin and nowhere else.
NEED MORE NOW! WTF!!!! SO MANY QUESTIONS BUT DONT WANT TO SPOIL! RAWWWRRGGGGHHHPFFFFFF (foaming at the mouth on the floor)
I'm really enjoying this story so thumbs up from me.
I think what a lot of readers don't realize (those calling him a pushover or doormat) is both him and Gilda are foreign immigrants in a country that are at best suspicious and at worst hostile.
In their situation they have very little power and a lot to lose. Being passive is less about being a doormat and more about survival.
It doesn't help when he has one ruler being suspicious of him in her protectiveness of her people and the other being all "social justice" on him for his own good.
Where a character standing up for himself in any other situation may just have to deal with disagreements, in this situation his entire family, including his unborn child, is at stake.
Once again I applaud the writing of this fic and am looking forward to more.
But Luna is kinda right here. Most injuries he received from Gilda then others. And herds, matriarchy - I see a harem coming!