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Wing-Kompis!?
Are griffons Swedish or something!?
baked goods
wrong type of bite
Keep writing.
Wow! As an editor I feel your pain.
Great story.
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I thinks griffon society is similar to any mainland European country (that excludes the UK) but the language is made up of eastern European languages Ex: German, Swedish, Dutch, Russian ect.
bout damn time celestia accepted what was actually going on, damn shes dumb!
Staying in the hospital, all banged up like that, would bug the crap out of me. I wouldn't be able to relax, knowing I had to pay a bill after getting mauled by bigots.
Keep on truck in.
Shit is hitting the fan
Alrighty then, now all they need to do is to arrange a official execution for those buckers that caused all this.
That was fun, may I have another? Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
Wow, this chapter has a lot of things to talk about and to consider. My favorite part is Celestia's fact about the ponies' ignorance and the reason about why there are so few other species in Equestria. Though I think it's because most species want to stick with their kind but I think racism and ignorance do need to change and it'll be something that will be slowly happening.
Another thing that I like about that chapter is that we kinda found out why the protagonist is so apprehensive of Celestia but this time we see it through angry eyes instead of fearful ones. But I like how I was able to see through that angry explanation why would he be afraid also and I'm glad that they're finally addressing the issue. Man, Celestia really did drag this conversation for a quite a while, then again, it might be the only time she has to talk to our hero and figuring out that she has big shoes to fulfill to gain his favor.
Last but not least, I really like the part where he had to convince Gilda to stay in the town even if the logical reason is to run away. However to run away is to lose and to run away is to let THEM win and I refused to let THEM get the satisfaction of running our heroes out of town. I'm glad that he did and I really think that stay is the best answer, especially since they have friends there that will them out. The only time running away would be a good option is if EVERYONE hates you and you HAVE NO FRIENDS in that town. But that is certainly not the case and it's worth fighting for to get a good family life going.
Now for the aftermath.
Wonder what's to become of the aggressors...
the voice
need a period
ponies
brings on
after all this time?
more often than not or most often meant something bad
that the two of you were
gauged not gaged
you don't need the "of" in this sentence
mannerisms
bout, he didn't buy anything in the past
her form not here form
their
to this myself sounds better in my opinion
in a long, long while
you need "one of" in here or turn "mares" into "mare"
"do lights count" sounds better to me
sound not should
your plight
were not was
were not we're
remove from
this is a run-on sentence, you could turn this into at least three sentences
I have no idea what you are trying to say
painfully bad idea and "from such a strenuous action"
Capitalization
Also need a bit of spit shine on how you use commas, more of a statement than a criticism. I don't think I have a right to say anything more about comma usage, it's fucking hard!
I enjoyed the story outright and hope you find a new editor, one that will stick with you in the long run!
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What part of my comment are you replying too?
Im happy that Tia and Lulu are slowly being forgivin .
6614849 Take it or leave it mate.
Commence read.
Looks like errors have been caught by others.
Now to see what happens with reporters and the world.
6615148 Is it Griffonia, Gryphonia, or Griffinstone? What do you call the Gilda's home country?
Okay, now this is completely unfair. They didn’t know about his relationship with Gilda, they didn’t know why he avoided town, they didn’t know they where expecting a child, and they didn’t know why his place was a wreck. It was the very definition of an accident. A well meaning accident. You can’t be mad about this.
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I disagree, I would be pissed too. It not JUST cause they misread the situation it was also the fact that they wouldn’t let HIM explain it for himself. They jumped to conclusions instead of asking their so called friend. So yeah i think its more than fair to be mad at two people who say they are your friends while treating you more like a child/pet that doesn’t know any better.