Twilight's appreciation for the beauty of the night sky has only increased with Luna's return, especially after they meet to discuss her latest addition. One meeting becomes two, becomes a regular outing, it's no wonder they would grow
It's like watching that scene in Batman where he's trying to get rid of the bomb, and the audience is on the edge of their seat wondering not if it will explode but when, and the only possible outcomes are all horrible and messy.
Poor Twilight. I just hope that she doesn't develop a crush on Celestia next and have her heart broken again. That would be all kinds of messed up and unfortunate.
Well, better in the sense she becomes excessively stalker-ish and it becomes an interesting point in the story... or hopefully through it she begins to mature and we can get ourselves a royal sandwich.
You know what I liked most about this chapter? How you took the classic "misunderstanding" scenario, crumpled it up into a ball and tossed it into the paper bin. Yes, Celestia misunderstood Luna's dream scene, but unlike nearly every romance story out there, she did not storm out and end the relationship, with Luna having to go through a story arc to get her back and tell her that it was all a misunderstanding. No, Celestia grabbed a tea set, sat down and talked about it, instantly. She cleared it up, learned the truth and they both immediately moved on with their relationship without any artificial breakup scenarios just because.
Bravo.
It would have driven me nuts to see something like that happening and I am so glad you gave a cliched romance trope a good kick in the ass and made it soar through the exit. Certainly, this development did not truly come as a surprise; you are, after all, an excellent author, as I have stated multiple times and in truth I have little fear of you resorting to romance cliches or stereotypes. You much rather strike me as an author who likes to bring new, fresh ideas and developments to the table and I greatly appreciate that.
It's also why I expect things to be alright with Twilight. A less skilled author would have Twilight drift into OC-territory because of this heartbreak, an even less skilled author would go full-blown OC with her to the point it's not Twilight in all but name. I'm not afraid of that with you, Landgrave. I don't know how you will resolve the situation Luna and Celestia face, but I do know you won't do it by having Twilight go on a killing spree of revenge or having her go Nightmare Twilight out of heartbreak who seals Luna and Celestia in the moon and sun and takes over Equestria.
Because that would be stupid. And this story is not stupid, nor is its author.
5541456 Damn it! Now I can't have the DBZ style fight scene with Celestia and Luna vs. Twilight and Cadance that destroys Equestria and yet, somehow, ends in an alicorn orgy where their collective orgasms kill all of them, but simultaneously spawns a new plant covered with all the life they just ended.
GAH!
It's like you don't share my deep, personal, not-obsessive-at-all love for Micheal Bay and all he's done for Hasbro and Transformers and TMNT.
What am I supposed to do now? Have everypony sit down and have a deep, meaningful conversation filled with emotions and ends with everyone just as happy as when it all started? That'll never work. This isn't a sit-com.
An excellent chapter for an excellent story. I like that you did not simply take the cliche "What was that dream, I don't love you" route. Everything about this story feels natural and not forced, which makes for a very enjoyable read.
5541456 Nightmare Twilight? Perhaps not. Stalker Twilight barging in on Lunestia in action and demanding 'in'? 'Or else it goes to the worldwide, and you know you cannot stop me, I have contingency planned out for things you wouldn't even imagine'? That sounds more realistic by the minute.
5541085 It was stated she already HAD had a crush on Celestia, in her earlier years I'd presume. It seemed to have died down by now, but you never know.
Also yeah, I do still see this ending with a threesome.
Keeper of Jericho really hit home about not needing to fear that this will end in some ridiculous OOC cop-out. Its like one of those physics puzzles that you watch someone solve that looks impossible, like there is no way all those pieces fit together, but then they do and you don't know how but its perfect
5541938 All teasing sarcasm aside, if you did do anything of the sort, I would be so upset that I would start making sock-puppet accounts to downvote your story until the number of upvotes has been reduced to 1% of the total votes so that all you will see is a big, red bar of disapproval. I'm not bluffing, either.
nnnnnnnnnngggg poor Twi Discord has to have an apperence PLEEEEEAAASE :DD he was not once in this whole story o.0 maybe even make him Twilihts Lover in the end O_O (that would be AMAZING Eeeeep)
Wow, every time you come out with a new chapter my heart strings are tugged. I love reading your work especially since its one of my favorite shippings. Poor Luna and Twilight though, talk about emotional on each side. Luna worried over both Celestia and her only friendship with Twilight, and Twilight finally letting some other pony in a romantic light just to get crushed.
Honestly, if this is Twilight we're talking about, Celestia's shootingher self in the hoof by hoofwaving the problem away and thinking that'd work (especially with how recent the Smarty Pants incident, and About Time - Time Stop attempt were. She's a good mare, but like with Luna, she should have schedualed a time for Luna and her to speak with Twilight. Since like a dog with a bone, when a problem faces Twilight, she doesn't let go until she has an answer / closure.
But I agree I wonder how This whole mess resolves itself, and I'm glad that this author strives to give a rather well written, non-cliched fic when it comes to romance.
That's right, this isn't a sit-com. Although most problems in MLP:FIM come about from misunderstandings / miscommunication, that ends with an important lessson (s1 -2, a little in S 4). But it'll be interesting, can Luna and Tia talk Twilight into being with them as well, knowing the visciousness of nobility / the view of LunEstia as a couple? While she's a kind hearted pony, if this isn't ever going to be TwiLunEstia (seriously hope that comes about) can she reconcile her world view of Celestia as a flesh and blood being with the wants and needs of a physical being (rather than the improper view that dieties are impersonal and perfect in everyway)? Or that two immortals would grow close together since every mortal they know would eventually die on them leaving only them behind (or before Cadance and Twilight)?
Can Luna get her sister to get her head out of her rump long enough to see that secrets like that to those they care about are harming those who care about them (being the ex-Element of Honesty we can see that keeping secrets like this are not going well for her)? Can Celestia finally up and trust those two Princesses who are closer to her than any mortal has gotten in centuries to tell them before the secrets and deceptions fall around her?
I'm vert interested to see what you come up with. Not only with you playingeverypony (strengths and weaknesses) straight, but in how you handle this series so far. Can't wait to see what you come up with.
Celestia pissed me off near the end of the chapter. Her worst line was about Twilight being Luna's closest friend, why the hell would Twilight care about that at this point?
5578211 No, actually you give it a pretty good one. This story just makes you feel sorry for everybody, it evokes feelings in the reader, feelings of regret, of loss. Its fresh, it has its own style, and it isn't drawn out into a needless rant. I have high hopes for it to go one way, and a dream crushed if it goes the other way. I'm happy to say its one of my favourites. Its going to be one heck of a ride to the finish, whatever happens.
oh and now the tense saga where Twilight will play detective to figure out the "who". This was a great chapter and I appreciate it all the more for the appropriate amount of drama it had.
"It haunts most of us for a time, but you are not so unlike Twilight. You have friends and loved ones who would be there to care for you. In time you would recover fully, able to look back with clear thoughts, and, perhaps one day, you might even wonder what it was that caused you so much pain."
I really like this one. Most romance stories end when the couple first comes together, but here we get so see a relationship actually lived in. All the day to day worries and distractions, the balance between love, job and friends. Chapter 10 especially; how Luna and Tia only have eyes for each other while being blind to Twilight right next to them, is beautifully done.
Although, one thing in this chapter that left me confused: Twilight has an alchemy table in her bedroom? That doesn't sound safe at all. Edit: maybe add some plushies instead?
Poor Twi
Eager to read more
Well, she's lost it.
It's like watching that scene in Batman where he's trying to get rid of the bomb, and the audience is on the edge of their seat wondering not if it will explode but when, and the only possible outcomes are all horrible and messy.
Poor Twilight. I just hope that she doesn't develop a crush on Celestia next and have her heart broken again. That would be all kinds of messed up and unfortunate.
This just keeps getting better and better!
Keep up the fantastic work!
Poor Twi my ass. She's gone straight up stalker mode. Creepy.
She should ask the Royal Phoenix Keeper about Philomena.
His name is 'Phoenix Keeper' and his cutie mark is a phoenix.
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It gets better. (I'll leave you to decide exactly what I mean by that.)
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That is something that I promise will not happen. I am not that evil.
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Thank you all.
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Well, better in the sense she becomes excessively stalker-ish and it becomes an interesting point in the story... or hopefully through it she begins to mature and we can get ourselves a royal sandwich.
I can't tell which yet! Continue on!
You know what I liked most about this chapter? How you took the classic "misunderstanding" scenario, crumpled it up into a ball and tossed it into the paper bin. Yes, Celestia misunderstood Luna's dream scene, but unlike nearly every romance story out there, she did not storm out and end the relationship, with Luna having to go through a story arc to get her back and tell her that it was all a misunderstanding. No, Celestia grabbed a tea set, sat down and talked about it, instantly. She cleared it up, learned the truth and they both immediately moved on with their relationship without any artificial breakup scenarios just because.
Bravo.
It would have driven me nuts to see something like that happening and I am so glad you gave a cliched romance trope a good kick in the ass and made it soar through the exit. Certainly, this development did not truly come as a surprise; you are, after all, an excellent author, as I have stated multiple times and in truth I have little fear of you resorting to romance cliches or stereotypes. You much rather strike me as an author who likes to bring new, fresh ideas and developments to the table and I greatly appreciate that.
It's also why I expect things to be alright with Twilight. A less skilled author would have Twilight drift into OC-territory because of this heartbreak, an even less skilled author would go full-blown OC with her to the point it's not Twilight in all but name. I'm not afraid of that with you, Landgrave. I don't know how you will resolve the situation Luna and Celestia face, but I do know you won't do it by having Twilight go on a killing spree of revenge or having her go Nightmare Twilight out of heartbreak who seals Luna and Celestia in the moon and sun and takes over Equestria.
Because that would be stupid. And this story is not stupid, nor is its author.
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Damn it! Now I can't have the DBZ style fight scene with Celestia and Luna vs. Twilight and Cadance that destroys Equestria and yet, somehow, ends in an alicorn orgy where their collective orgasms kill all of them, but simultaneously spawns a new plant covered with all the life they just ended.
GAH!
It's like you don't share my deep, personal, not-obsessive-at-all love for Micheal Bay and all he's done for Hasbro and Transformers and TMNT.
What am I supposed to do now? Have everypony sit down and have a deep, meaningful conversation filled with emotions and ends with everyone just as happy as when it all started? That'll never work. This isn't a sit-com.
*Le Sigh*
Back to the drawing board.
An excellent chapter for an excellent story. I like that you did not simply take the cliche "What was that dream, I don't love you" route. Everything about this story feels natural and not forced, which makes for a very enjoyable read.
Being shoved into thy he friend zone is balls. Poor twilight. Hopefully things will work out. Maybe a three way?
5541456 Nightmare Twilight? Perhaps not. Stalker Twilight barging in on Lunestia in action and demanding 'in'? 'Or else it goes to the worldwide, and you know you cannot stop me, I have contingency planned out for things you wouldn't even imagine'? That sounds more realistic by the minute.
5541085 It was stated she already HAD had a crush on Celestia, in her earlier years I'd presume. It seemed to have died down by now, but you never know.
Also yeah, I do still see this ending with a threesome.
Keeper of Jericho really hit home about not needing to fear that this will end in some ridiculous OOC cop-out. Its like one of those physics puzzles that you watch someone solve that looks impossible, like there is no way all those pieces fit together, but then they do and you don't know how but its perfect
5541938
All teasing sarcasm aside, if you did do anything of the sort, I would be so upset that I would start making sock-puppet accounts to downvote your story until the number of upvotes has been reduced to 1% of the total votes so that all you will see is a big, red bar of disapproval. I'm not bluffing, either.
... what do you mean I'm crazy?
5541938 Would definitely enjoy seeing that ending instead of Jericho's kiss ass'ing semidemand version
nnnnnnnnnngggg
poor Twi
Discord has to have an apperence PLEEEEEAAASE :DD
he was not once in this whole story o.0
maybe even make him Twilihts Lover in the end O_O
(that would be AMAZING Eeeeep)
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And so.... Their reveal shall slowly but surely, unveil itself to twilight......
Wow, every time you come out with a new chapter my heart strings are tugged. I love reading your work especially since its one of my favorite shippings. Poor Luna and Twilight though, talk about emotional on each side. Luna worried over both Celestia and her only friendship with Twilight, and Twilight finally letting some other pony in a romantic light just to get crushed.
I cant wait for the next chapter please hurry!!!
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Wait, so we're not ending on an orgy? Well I guess I'll go make my own fanfic with plot development and alicorn bucking. In fact you can forget the plot development.
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Cloudsdale
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Honestly, if this is Twilight we're talking about, Celestia's shootingher self in the hoof by hoofwaving the problem away and thinking that'd work (especially with how recent the Smarty Pants incident, and About Time - Time Stop attempt were. She's a good mare, but like with Luna, she should have schedualed a time for Luna and her to speak with Twilight. Since like a dog with a bone, when a problem faces Twilight, she doesn't let go until she has an answer / closure.
But I agree I wonder how This whole mess resolves itself, and I'm glad that this author strives to give a rather well written, non-cliched fic when it comes to romance.
5541938
That's right, this isn't a sit-com. Although most problems in MLP:FIM come about from misunderstandings / miscommunication, that ends with an important lessson (s1 -2, a little in S 4). But it'll be interesting, can Luna and Tia talk Twilight into being with them as well, knowing the visciousness of nobility / the view of LunEstia as a couple? While she's a kind hearted pony, if this isn't ever going to be TwiLunEstia (seriously hope that comes about) can she reconcile her world view of Celestia as a flesh and blood being with the wants and needs of a physical being (rather than the improper view that dieties are impersonal and perfect in everyway)? Or that two immortals would grow close together since every mortal they know would eventually die on them leaving only them behind (or before Cadance and Twilight)?
Can Luna get her sister to get her head out of her rump long enough to see that secrets like that to those they care about are harming those who care about them (being the ex-Element of Honesty we can see that keeping secrets like this are not going well for her)? Can Celestia finally up and trust those two Princesses who are closer to her than any mortal has gotten in centuries to tell them before the secrets and deceptions fall around her?
I'm vert interested to see what you come up with. Not only with you playingeverypony (strengths and weaknesses) straight, but in how you handle this series so far. Can't wait to see what you come up with.
Well. This was unexpected. I have to congratulate you sir, I normally can't stand incest stories but the writing here is just too good to pass up.
So.. yeah. You've made me like a story that revolves around something I greatly dislike. Bravo.
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See, that just makes me curious as to why you started reading in the first place.
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Honestly? Hopes of eventual twiluna. But like I said, I'm enjoying reading it no matter which way you decide to go.
Celestia pissed me off near the end of the chapter. Her worst line was about Twilight being Luna's closest friend, why the hell would Twilight care about that at this point?
Every time I read a new chapter it just shoots me right in the feels. Every time.
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Do I give love a bad name?
5578211 No, actually you give it a pretty good one. This story just makes you feel sorry for everybody, it evokes feelings in the reader, feelings of regret, of loss. Its fresh, it has its own style, and it isn't drawn out into a needless rant. I have high hopes for it to go one way, and a dream crushed if it goes the other way. I'm happy to say its one of my favourites. Its going to be one heck of a ride to the finish, whatever happens.
oh and now the tense saga where Twilight will play detective to figure out the "who".
This was a great chapter and I appreciate it all the more for the appropriate amount of drama it had.
Wrong species of "bare".
Poor Twilight. I want to be mad at the diarchs, but it would be unfair as there's nobody at fault.
Your writing is superb, TheLandgrave.
Thank you.
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I really like this one. Most romance stories end when the couple first comes together, but here we get so see a relationship actually lived in. All the day to day worries and distractions, the balance between love, job and friends. Chapter 10 especially; how Luna and Tia only have eyes for each other while being blind to Twilight right next to them, is beautifully done.
Although, one thing in this chapter that left me confused: Twilight has an alchemy table in her bedroom? That doesn't sound safe at all. Edit: maybe add some plushies instead?
5999217 All I am going to say is...it's Twilight...what did you expect honestly?
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Alchemy tables are very important. Especially for Stempacks.
Fallout is what I'm referring to if you don't know.