Life had just begun to look good. I had a girlfriend again, and was focusing on the positive. I even had a huge date planned with Jazyline, my new girlfriend. It was still early in the day, and things seemed to be going great. Sadly, that's when my bad luck likes to strike me the most. As I'll later find out, my being in Equestria is all thanks to Twilight dabbling with a spell she was warned to evade, for there is much unknown about it.
So yeah, another HiE. I have read at the bare minimum one of them. Hopefully you enjoy reading this. Rated T for vulgar language.
Chapters (9)
ehh, i like the story but not where you shorten a lot of things
4710987 Yeah, I rushed parts of this chapter. I'm trying not to do that in the next one.
4711156 oh good.
great story btw
4711235 Thanks, glad your enjoying it.
Fun story so far.
4724233 Thanks! I've been trying to work on the next chapter, but I'm putting a lot more effort into it than this one.
Fair warning, I slightly rushed the ending on Chapter Four: Unexpected Guest... I got caught up in typing it. Sorry 'bout that. Also, it is starting to get late at night, so... I may come back and revise it, but that's for later.
i hope you knw that the whole thing about us ony using 10% of our brain is complete bull shit.
4908048 I kinda figured that much. Though I'm not the character, am I?
Edit: Also, if you think about it, you can tell that Ajil is doubting that 10% "fact" as well. Though most of his focus will have to be elsewhere for quite some time, because of Enar and all this other shit he has to deal with.
A new library
I'm sorry, but the first chapter almost hurts to read. I get enough attention jumping IRL and I don't need more in a story I'm reading... I'll try this story again later and hopefully then I'll be able to read it without being yanked out of the story.
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I'll start looking for that now, and thanks. I've been busy lately, so it may take a while for me to get to these things. Thanks again!
EDIT: I fixed what I could find in the Prologue chapter, but I'm warning you, I probably missed stuff. I know the next chapters have problems, and I'll get around to them as soon as I can, though another problem is that I keep using the wrong tense, so if you read ahead, you've been warned. If you can get past that nuisance (hopefully I can fix it), then hopefully you'll be able to enjoy the story. Thanks for the heads up, because there were other grammatical errors in there, not just spelling and tensing. So thanks, I really appreciate the help.