When Luna gets fed up with history documentaries getting things all wrong she steps in to do something about it. Will the help of a Camera Pony by the name of Film Reel be able to help her see her vision?
When Luna gets fed up with history documentaries getting things all wrong she steps in to do something about it. Will the help of a Camera Pony by the name of Film Reel be able to help her see her vision?
This. I will follow this. I want more of it.
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Nighttime is one word.
Why would you use or even twice?
I think you're missing punctuation, since it comes off as being too fast. Try adding a comma between the rapidly and picking.
I think you're meaning, The sight of Luna's excitement warmed Celestia's heart.
You replace the comma with an "and".
Perspective would've been a better word than eyes.
After the first chunk, put a Comma.
door COMMA causing
uh... MAKING would be better.
FROM AFTER. Delete the From.
You've double spaced, and you're missing a The.
Why an IF there? There's no condition afterwards.
Delete the UP there, it's unnecessary.
He continued FULL STOP Perhaps blah blah blah
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