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When my little girl was taken from me, something seemed off. Everything was as though it hadn't happened... What is happening?

Alternate ending to My Little Dashie.
This is something that just came a few days ago, and I wrote it all in an hour or 2, not very long, and nowhere near as heart breaking as the original, but I had to get this idea out of my head.

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Noooooo.:fluttercry: it's so cruel!:fluttershbad: nooooooo!:fluttershbad:

Alternate ending to My Little Dashie.

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4419938 if you don't like them then don't read them, god. I'll write whatever I want. I got this idea, and I wanted to write it.

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You'll earn really quickly that making sequels and alternate endings to stories that nobody cares about anymore is a bad idea.

4420586 That doesn't change the fact that I had the idea for this and wanted to get it out of my head. Regardless of how good an idea it is, if I really want to write a story, it shall be written.

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So you willfully poisoned this website with yet another bad product, and you're proud of that.

10/10

4420604 dude. This website is supposed to be for everyone who wants to write pony, not just the people who are the best. He had an idea, he wrote it down, and decided to share it with the Internet. If you think it's bad, fine, downvote it, leave, and never worry about it again. But to say that he's poisoning the website with bad writing? That's why he's here. He's here to share his "bad writing", and have some people enjoy it, and maybe get better at writing. Your opinion is not absolute. Some people, like me, enjoyed it.

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Then you enjoy an objectively bad piece of fiction.

Frankly I don't care what your opinions are, but you just told me to keep my opinions to myself, then spouted your own.

Drown in your own hypocrisy.

4420604 It's amazing that out of all of the stories on this site, MINE is the only one that actually "poisoned" it.

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4421210 This doesn't change anything. My writing a story that follows the rules, evidently, is that a terrible thing, as the site is still up. Also, looking at the like/dislike ratio, some people liked it, so I do not regret my decision to post it. Good day to you sir.

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is that a terrible thing,

Yes.

4421225 First off, I for one enjoyed this. Secondly, just because it is a sequel doesn't make it poison, if anything it providestge reader another way of picturing the outcome. Third, you are a 22 year old man, don't you have something better to do? Like read another story? Fourth, if you don't like a story, boo hoo. Stop complaining and read something else. And lastly, you have one unpopular story, so don't go telling other people how to write or what they shouldn't write about. That is all.

First off, I for one enjoyed this. Secondly, just because it is a sequel doesn't make it poison, if anything it providestge reader another way of picturing the outcome. Third, you are a 22 year old man, don't you have something better to do? Like read another story? Fourth, if you don't like a story, boo hoo. Stop complaining and read something else. And lastly, you have one unpopular story, so don't go telling other people how to write or what they shouldn't write about. That is all.

I don't care that you enjoyed it.

You're right, it being a sequel doesn't make it bad; it being bad makes it bad.

>implying I didn't lie about my age

If I don't tell people they suck, they won't get better.

My unpopular story is currently more popular than this story.

4421693 Perhaps you don't care, but I do. Your unpopular story has been around much longer, keep that in mind. And if you can't provide a reason for it being "bad" then I don't think you should have commented in the first place. Telling them its bad and providing ways to fix it is one thing, but this is different. You aren't helping him, you are simply calling it bad because you felt like it.

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Your unpopular story has been around much longer, keep that in mind

Uh no, it hasn't.

And if you can't provide a reason for it being "bad" then I don't think you should have commented in the first place. Telling them its bad and providing ways to fix it is one thing, but this is different. You aren't helping him, you are simply calling it bad because you felt like it.

No, I'm pretty sure I explained to the author that this was the least original thing on the planet.

Not much I can do but say "stop trying to ride the coattails of the no longer relevant and come up with an original concept."

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In fact my story came out the day after this one.

You're just plain wrong on a factual level.

4428361 least original thing on the planet eh? The premise of the story is, but the story itself isn't. And coming up with an original concept, I have multiple ideas floating around, this one was just a relatively easy story to write and I wanted to write something regardless of how relevant the premise is. I don't care for anything else you have to say, so please kindly leave. No one else here but you wants you here, and I'm just going to further ignore you, so please do not respond, I'm in the middle of dealing with moving so this is just another annoyance.

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least original thing on the planet eh

You said it, not me.

4428656 Taking a quote out of the context to twist its meaning just to make another comment... Seriously? You said I was wrong on a factual level, and then you falsely quote something right afterwards. Listen, you really should just leave everyone else who enjoyed the story alone and stop talking bad about it. Of course its not original, its a sequel! Sequels aren't meant to be completely different from the previous story.

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Of course its not original, its a sequel! Sequels aren't meant to be completely different from the previous story.

"It's supposed to be like that," is not an argument.

I can take a giant shit on your floor and say "it's supposed to be like that."

That doesn't make it not a steaming shit on your floor.

4430515 Looks like somebody needs to buckle their pants.

Jesus H christ! I did like it. The fake-outs were priceless.

YOU KILLED BRIAN !!! BAD DOG...BAD...BAD...DOG!!!!!!!!!

After watching the reading of the original MLD I never cried to a fanfiction again.:fluttercry:
This is the first time in more than 1 year.
This is a great work, I can't say otherwise, but the end... why? just why?:raritycry:
I stoped crying now, but I'm shaking, I'm ending this comment now, I'll make this go on forever if I don't:raritydespair:
Goodbye, I just ruind my day reading this story:fluttershysad:

EDIT : second time reading the story : :raritycry: II : the feels train is coming back

EDIT II : third time reading the story : I'm not crying... I imunized myself to feels... No I think it's because it's not the first time I read the story.

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