Your story is coming along great. I see a couple of gramatical errors. Other than that its amazing.

It is a good story, I personally think that you should continue, but I really hope for something like story and not just sex every chapter like some fics do

I would suggest not labeling it foalcon if you already gone and aged them up, that's false advertising. which is a shame cause I've yet to see anyone actually just go ahead do a proper luna/pip foalcon fic.

4334895 It is foalcon in the 2nd Chapter and will get more Foalcon in the third, which i currently work on.

4312210 Next Chapter will have Story.

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Sweet, I cannot wait!

4334895 basically it's still foalcon cause he was in a dream and dreaming of being an adult

4682063 doesn't count in my book

4683072 Whatever floats your boat,dude.

4691321 Yes, clearly, captain obvious. (see, i can use emotes to!)

Just wanting to keep you update: Duo to some problems( Aka Blog Termination, Graphic tablet breaking, my apartment nearly burning down whatsoever) I didn't had time nor the head to write further. Updates are planned.

Its well written, but I feel cheated,,,