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a man is sent to equestria via a ray gun made by his acquaintance in a secret government facility and ends up meeting the maine six
-first fic, so it wont be perfect-

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Sparkers16

Sparkers16 #1 · Apr 13th, 2014 · · · Chapter 2 ·

Reads description...lolnope

Sparkers16

Sparkers16 #2 · Apr 13th, 2014 · · · Chapter 2 ·

Okay, okay, sorry for my previous comment, this isn't that bad. It feels a bit rushed, you need to get in some details about the ponies, their reactions, and the area around them. Hm...what am I forgetting? Oh, right, the reason why a lot of people aren't going to like this. Dude, get a bucking proofreader. You need it badly. But otherwise, well, I've read worse.

Swaren

Swaren #3 · Apr 13th, 2014 · · · Chapter 2 ·

4226651 well i have no idea how to get a proof reader honestly. this is my first posted fic after all....

Sparkers16

Sparkers16 #4 · Apr 13th, 2014 · · · Chapter 2 ·

4227509 I can always do it for you

Swaren

Swaren #5 · Apr 14th, 2014 · · · Chapter 2 ·

4227703 that'd be nice i suppose i just dont know how to do it, like exchange email somewere and i send you it you read an comment on mistakes and whatnot. Right....?

Sparkers16