*insert epic you just found something melody here* Well, its done.
"Oh boy, I love incest!"

all the commenters so far have twilight in their name conspiracy

I tucking support this!!!!!!!!!!!

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Hello there. I'm from High Quality Fictions and I'll be doing a review of your story. This comment will be copied to this thread.
I apologize beforehand if this sounds too angry/aggressive. This is just my method of reviewing; nothing personal.

I honestly find it very unrealistic that Luna would chose to forfeit her own life in order to save Shining Armor. True, he is an excellent guard (captain, whatever), but Luna herself is much, much more valuable to the ponies than he is. He is a meek mortal -- granted, with powerful magic -- but still, Alicorns are still known to be the most powerful beings in Equestria. I also didn't like how Celestia's interest for Cadance was introduced to the reader. It is shown like "she always had this thing for her" and "she had some traits of Twilight and some from Luna as well". Shouldn't it be the opposite, since Cadance is older than Twilight? It should be Twilight having some traits from Cadance, but I digress. The story quickly changes from a nice gloomy setting to full blown Molestia whom craves (not loves, for she blatantly states that she "wants her body") Cadance.

A cute face, unmarried, (via technicality) and her flanks look delicious.

The bold part in the quoted text is present in the original story.
And, to top it off, we have Cadance getting all moody because Shining Armor died and then she goes to the Statue Garden to pleasure herself... wat?
And Cadance is masturbating whilst thinking of Celestia... I have no problem with this, were it not for the fact that she was sad a couple of minutes ago because of her deceased husband. Not even people with Manic-Depressive Psychosis have such volatile mood.
Sorry, I am not even going to try my hand at chapter 2, against my previous statement. It could be the epitome of brilliance, but it would do nothing to save this fanfic if the first chapter is present.
No.

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I asked you to review this? Or you did it on your own accord?
Either way thanks I guess, your review made me laugh.

711750 It was up to be reviewed. I'm not sure if you asked it or not. Might be a fan, IDK.
And I'm glad it made you laugh. Even if it's out of spite- you were happy for a moment, which is always something good.

is this luna X celestia shipping? and if so to what extent or amount is versus other shipping?