It opens up explaining what happened between the previous story and this one. The two mares enter a town and it follows mainly from Sen's viewpoint on how Sen meets a wonderful stallion and they fall in love... But her travelling partner seems to be a little worried about this.
Oh, Sen, Zen and Luv are not my own OCs but I have permission to use them from the creators.
I think people might stare away from the giant wall of text.
Spacing is a key to the ease of the reader,
but overall...pretty good