you had something you wanted to talk to me about something

Got a repeated word here; fix please! Other than that, this is the beginning of an excellent story. When Celestia finds out who the "mystery mare" is, I can just imagine poor Twilight and Luna fleeing through Ponyville from Celestia's wrath to this tune...

i love how it going so far can't waite to read more.

This going above normal.

Head into Knight Templar level of OVERPROTECTIVE

Know THE ALEX MERCER KIND...

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As Luna stated, she kind of went a bit overzelous with the whole saving herself thing, also she may have had a thing for fairy tails when she was younger, which lead to her little dream.

As for the whole mate dying thing, lets just say she has that covered.

Happening Now.
Celestia: Someone Is sleeping with my sister, UNACCEPTABLE! DUNGEON!!!! MILLION YEARS DUNGEON!!!!!!!!!

interesting way of playing out....

Seperately finds out Twilight is 'bedding' another pony
Celestia: Someone is sleeping with my faithful student, UNACCEPTABLE! DUNGEON!!!! MILLION YEARS DUNGEON!!!!!!!!!

Finds out their with each other...
Celestia: ... Well Shlt! what now?

You know, when I read fics, I sometimes get jumpy leg in my right leg when something's about to go down. It was going crazy (and is still twitching after this:

“Whoever you are my little pony,” thought Celestia as she let her fiery gaze fall on the town, “I can promise you one thing for daring to touch my sister. You. Will. BURN!"

Tracked and liking where this is going so far. Hope to see more of this story!

4100077 You and that emoticon...no...just...

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oh ewe not in that way god.

Oh that was it, dam responsibility, dam her royal composure,

Dams are purposely built river/waterway blockers (or in animal terms, the mother), while Damn is what you meant, to curse or condemn.

I think in the previous chapter you had something like 'Does thou', which i think should be 'Dost thou', to be correct, in (only partially jokingly) ye olde speake. Unless 'Dost' is the formal variation of 'Do' in that instance... Someone with better literature history knowledge than my own, which is frankly very limited, would know.

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Something like this maybe....

Celestia: Seperation!!!! Million year seperation!!!!!Twilight, you get to live on the other half of the world, Luna you're with me.

BOOO TWILUNA! FUCK THEM ALL GO FUCK YOURSELF BOOOOOOOOOOOO

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Enjoy the pic. TwiLestia FTW OTP.

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Hey that's my OTP as well, I just like to experiment outside my favorite ship, but if it is Twilestia you are looking for, and if you haven't checked it out yet, why not take a gander at Teacher No More, it has some tie in's to some of my other stories, but it is still an enjoyable story.

I was interested in this until you wrote Celestia as an overprotective maniac to manufacture some kind of conflict.

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No, I did not make her like that to manufacture conflict, I made her like this to give Luna a reason to hide it from her till she was ready. Besides that, I have another bit of conflict planned that does not involve Celestia's overprotective habits, even though by overprotective sibling standards Celestia could have done worse.

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In a pocket demention next to Twist.

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On the contrary. That's the thing that made me favorite the story. Clopfics and romances in general have a huge problem with keeping things interesting. Sex alone simply can't cut it for a multi-chapter story and most of the time the conflict that is generated is rather stale and boring (oh no, Luna has to return to Canterlot! Whatever is Twilight going to do?). This keeps things interesting, and provides for some decent comedy as well. Sure it's a little over the top and OOC, but that's what the [AU] tag's there for.

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you know no matter how many times I look at your profile pick, it still gives me the willies every time I see you comment.

Not bad, not bad at all!

only thing worse than an over protective sibling is an overprotective ARMED father. Just ask my 13 yr old daughter.

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for some reason I think in the end of it all, Tia will be approve of twilight being with her sister....
also I think it be funny if Tia was just as protective of twilight as she is with luna....

Twilight, two things.
One, you are a unicorn (boy did that feel odd to write), so you can teleport with ease.
Two, BOB, WEAVE, AND SERPENTINE FOR YOUR LIFE!

At this question, Luna blushed, getting really embarrassed and clearing her throat before speaking. “Well my Twilight you see, our sister um…is…well, she is very protective of us, and when it comes to ponies who…who try and woo us, she can be a little too protective.”

“Like how protective,” Twilight asked, fearing the answer as she noted the nervous smile on Luna’s face.

“Well…let us just say this, the last suitor who ever sought our hoof got confronted by Tia, and we found him years later in the Saddle Arabian desert speaking in tongues, which he continued to do for the rest of his life.”

that why the princess keep send twilight on those danger mission, she try to off twilight but make it look like an accident......

Not sure why, but I can see celistia doing everything shy of killing to break them up. When she find out.
I can also see celistia be just as overprotective over twilight and somehow learns she seeing someone but not put two and two together, or think they both seeeing same mare

“Whoever you are my little pony,” thought Celestia as she let her fiery gaze fall on the town, “I can promise you one thing for daring to touch my sister. You. Will. BURN!"

Was expecting a Taken reference here, oh well. Twilight's fucked in more ways than one now.

Damn it Celestia ya Bitch your gonna ruin your sisters life