One-thousand years after her death, Luna is reincarnated into the body of a blind unicorn mare.
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Didn't even post it a minute ago and already it is featured XD
5153789 I know. The hell...?
5153791 Who knows it happens with popular writers. The moment we post we get featured. Even if the chapter is god awful. Though I have never read this story so I can't comment on its worth.
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I would comment, but I haven't read it yet because of Luna dying and being reborn without her memories and personality yet, and being blind...jeez can you handicap Luna anymore?
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I'm betting a big factor in the featured equation is time since latest chapter. Which would be a variable that resets with each new chapter. So since this story has a good like/dislike ratio and view count it will jump into the feature box with every new post.
That's my assumption anyway.
5153813 Paralyze her from the neck down?
Man, you write a lot of different stories! How'd I miss this one? Will read later tonight!
Eh. I don't buy it. Your Celestia is far too dark, especially considering that Luna claimed she'd return. And, even with this, this archduke dude is a total ass. He did something wrong, as far as I can tell, and he deserves to suffer for it. As best I can tell, he assumed that some ponies were gypsies, accused them of foalnapping (without proof) and then, without much of a search for the "package" (presumably he knew it was a foal), arrested her for intending to deceive the crown, imprisoned her secretly and had her executed.
Then he goes to Celestia because of Nightmares, lies about the circumstances, and hopes that the Princess will give him less work to do. The only thing he deserves is a fiery inferno and nasty end. He hardly mentioned that everything he described was based on an assumption of his with no proof. Obviously he doesn't want to lose his job for wantonly executing Celestia's ponies. Makes you wonder why she even bothered stopping Nightmare in the first place.
It's probably best that Celestia not find out about the filly in question, much less about the circumstances surrounding her. If she knew it all, the Archduke would probably be hanging from a rope and that could be considered merciful. I can't imagine that even as damaged as she is, she forgive him for it having really been his fault that the foal was in jeopardy.
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I swear to Luna if you ever do that...
5153833 No, no. I would never.
5153850 BOOO you suck, now get over here and give me some suger
5153850 Blindness and being deaf are some traits that aren't really too often used here, mostly because the writer would have to work around not being able to do certain things from the handicapped character's perspective. I am interested to see how you approach this.
5154036 Well, seeing as one of my other stories has the main character mute, I wanted to try something different.
5154119 Oh wow, really? Which one?
5154141 Your Human and You. Warning, though. It's a HiE story, and it's kinda hit or miss if you like it or not.
I think I like this Celestia. Poor girl. Mourning for over a thousand years? Very tragic. I also like how you're explaining Spark's role and expanding on his character. The Archduke is clearly glossing over a few things and Celestia is basically telling him to grow a pair and deal with it.
After a thousand years, she might have lost hope in ever getting her sister back.
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She was actually incredible fun to write, more so than any other Celestia I have written in the past.
Do you have a grudge against right eyes? First main character in YHaY and now Celestia in this one. You even took Selena's right eye along with her spare....
Loving the story btw. I've been hoping you'd update this.
Edit: You even took out Sweetie Belles right eye in YHaY
5154318 My right eye is next to useless in real life, soooooo... yeah.
Should be another negative here since nor is used exclusively in negative plurals.
Only mistake I noticed besides some repitition with the guard Spark met while taking a walk.
I was on the fence the last chapter, but this is too much. You start a rough average of 2 out of every 3 paragraphs with the first sentence having Black Spark in it, as if I'm going to forget who you are talking about the entire time. The name is used 84 times. What the hell.
5154510 I think that given the consistency of her double speak, that may be Darkfur's way of speaking. Perhaps a cultural thing for the thestrals in this universe?
5155645 Possibly, but on the off chance it is a mistake it's out there.
5154598 Oh boy! I get to have some fun!
The words "Black Spark" start a grand total of 34 paragraphs. There are roughly 142 paragraphs in the chapter. 3/13 is a little bit shy of 2/3.
Oh no! 168 words out of 5,313! The horror! And I only counted about 63-ish.
Seriously, if you're getting all upset and butthurt because of how often he uses the name Black Spark, you should probably just stop reading in general. If that is the biggest gripe you have, the thing that ruins the story for you, then I don't know what to tell you.
Personally, I prefer this over the constant use of 'the dark mare' or 'the large stallion' or 'the shy pegasus'.
5155867 It's intentional. It's also a reference, but I won't say to what.
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It's a Redwall reference, isn't it?
5156647 Aaaaaaaand 20 points to you!
5156652 Mattimeo, right?
Christ, I haven't read that book in probably ten years.
5156655 It might have been in that one, but I was basing it off of Mossflower.
5156656 Oh. I remember one of the books they meet a bat colony that has that same speech pattern.
5156777 Yup. Bat Mountpit. I liked them, and thought I would try something with them.
5156798 Odd, I never read Mossflower. They must have been in more than one book, but thanks for the nostalgia trip either way.
5156861 Yeah, now I'm gonna have to go read them all again.
5156865 Yeah, that was a solid series.
5157466 Fixed
This has been quite an enjoyable read so far. The groundwork is being laid for what feels like a very interesting tale.
What?
5157938 It was no mistake, but that's all I'm saying.
Been a while, I had to remind ourself about this story.
Stupid Black Spark, you can't get rid of guilt that easily!
+1 for Lullaby for a Princess!
Keep going! ;)
5158096 interesting things Wictionary has to say about that word.....
. There were rare few that bore signs of distress,
-> were a few
’ve overstep my bounds,”
-> overstepped
5158577 I know, right?
5160480 Thank you for the finds.
fere
[feer]
(dialectal or obsolete) A companion, comrade or friend.
(archaic) A spouse; an animal's mate.
5161504 It's correct. Bluebone, sire of Blueblood. Minor character.
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Is that a minor pun from bonehead?
5168130 Perhaps. It was more along the lines of the first name that popped into my head.