Fluttershy's First day of school

by Mr_Allusive

First day of school

It's such a beautiful morning in ponyville as Celestia's sun was rising over the horizon, the birds where chirping signaling it was morning. Everypony was going to work while other do there morning choirs. Yes it was a beautiful morning. Everypony thought so , everypony except one. This certain pony was a very young filly , she was 12 years old and not the most socialist pony out of all. She has always been alone , never having parents and all , and she lives in a forest isolated from everypony else. Not that she was crazy or anything she just wasn't very social with others. This pony's name was Fluttershy , like I said earlier she was a very shy pony. Now , what made this beautiful morning the worst for fluttershy was that soon she was going to face a problem every young filly has to go through ... School.
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Fluttershy got up from her bed but , she noticed that she dragged half of the blanket with her , when she notice that she was dragging the blanket she made sure it was back on the bed and it was properly made so she didn't have to do it later. The first thing she did when she got out of her room was she went to the bathroom to take a shower , she turned on the shower and took a long and warm shower , which actually woke her up slightly more. After what seemed like 15 minutes or so, she got out of the shower and dried herself so she wasn't dripping water after. Fluttershy went in to the kitchen wondering what is there to eat , seeing the time Fluttershy had about 5 minutes 'till she needed to go to school , she looked around nearly starving. She saw a bright , shiny , juicy apple sitting on the table. Fluttershy walked towards the apple , noticing that it still looked fresh. She took a giant bit from it and continued to eat it , after a while Fluttershy saw the time and noticed that she was going to have to leave if she didn't want to be late. After she left from her cottage she looked back and said :

"I'm off to school , bye." she said as if somepony was listing to her or as if somepony was even there.
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Fluttershy was making her way to her new school , where she was going to begin the very first day of school but , she was very nervous. Fluttershy was walking down the street passing by the stores and houses peacefully. She got to the point where she saw a group of Pegasus(I think that's how you spell it) huddled up in a giant group. She went to go investigate and see what the whole commotion was about. It saw an odd looking Pegasus. Her body color was a light tone color of blue(or sky blue)and her tail and mane was even more bizarre , this certain Pegasus's mane and tail was rainbow colored. What ever , Fluttershy didn't really care much about her appearance , knowing everypony has a problem , including herself, and nopony can't really help it or make it simply go away. Fluttershy approached the light blue Pegasus carefully and quietly , and with all the courage she had fluttershy tried to say hello but she just couldn't. Fluttershy slowly walked away and felt disappointed at herself for not gaining the courage to even start a conversation. The light blue Pegasus turned around finally noticing Fluttershy.

"Oh , hey , didn't see you there."the light blue Pegasus stated."I'm Rainbow Dash the fastest Pegasus you'll ever meet , What's your name?" She said.

Fluttershy didn't know what to do except give rainbow dash her name , so she did , well she at least tried that is.

"My name is Fluttershy" She said lowering the tone of her voice.

"Sorry I didn't quite catch that?" rainbow stated with a confused look.

"My name is Fluttershy." rainbow dash was able to understand Fluttershy a bit more clearly than last time.

"Ohhh ok , nice to meet ya Fluttershy , Is this your first day in the flying academy." Rainbow dash said as fluttershy was trying to stretch out her wings because every time she nervous her wings jam up.

"Ummm.... Yes" Fluttershy said looking nervous and frightened.

"Cool , just stick with me and We'll be best friends." Rainbow stated as she made her a new friend and she didn't get to show off her skills.

Fluttershy and Rainbow dash were walking to the crowed but, Fluttershy didn't really mined about the group of ponies , the only thing that was stuck in her mind was that she made a best friend , she had never heard of such a thing. Fluttershy got closer to rainbow , looking at her, in a confused way.

"What's the difference between Rainbow dash and a best friend?" Fluttershy uttered to herself.

Fluttershy was honestly confused. After a couple of minutes of thinking Fluttershy was interrupted by a Pegasus , which was much older than her, and stated out loud :

"If your here for Cloudsdale's flying academy please wait in a straight line." He stated out loud to announce what was is going on.

Fluttershy finally notice that this was a flying academy , instead of an actual school were you get to learn and meet other ponies and become friends. Fluttershy was curious why she was entering a flying academy instead of a actual school. Fluttershy wanted to get some answers ,but she didn't know who to ask or who to look for to be specific. After a moment of thinking she knew who to look for to get some answer, Rainbow Dash. Fluttershy looked every where , Rainbow dash was nowhere to be seen , what made this situation even worse was that everypony was moving around, all following orders given to them. Fluttershy was scared , she didn't know it but she was actually scared that the only pony she acquainted with was gone. From near by Fluttershy heard a very distinctive voice that she never thought she would hear :

"We'll might as well get in the line , I don't like being last " rainbow dash stated as if that was something to remember.

Fluttershy was shocked noticing that rainbow dash hadn't left , she was still in the same place she was , waiting for what? As Fluttershy was walking side by side with rainbow dash. She was thinking why rainbow dash stayed with a pony like her. Fluttershy knew she wasn't the most sociable pony around ,but rainbow dash still stayed with her and nopony else. By the time Fluttershy got to the line rainbow dash was already in front of three other ponies. Fluttershy went to the back, waiting for the line to start moving. Fluttershy was just waiting , peacefully until she heard rainbow dash's voice and she said:

"Hey Fluttershy what are you doing, come up here" rainbow said allowing Fluttershy to cut in front of her.

"But there are others pony in front of me. Cutting them just wouldn't seem right" Fluttershy said refusing her offer.

"I'm petty sure they won't mined" rainbow stated as she glanced at other Pegasus's.

"Well if you think it's ok... then I guess it won't hurt any pony" fluttershy said

As Fluttershy was cutting the other three ponies, they got very furious at her because they were obviously in front of her and they were not going to take this type of rudeness especially because they where waiting in line longer that she has. Finally the three ponies agreed that they were going to set fluttershy straight and uttered out loud:

"HEY"

Everything suddenly got so quite as they all looked at the yelling pony and Fluttershy as she turned around as if she was caught doing something she was not allowed to do. She looked at the three ponies and said:

"Ummm... are you talking to me?" fluttershy said confused not know what she did wrong.

"Yeah i'm talking to you , what do you think your doing." the pony said out loud , very furious at Fluttershy.

"Well you see my friend her allowed me to get in front of her." Fluttershy tried to explain why she cut the ponies.

"HEY , stop messing with her!" Rainbow dash said out loud trying to help Fluttershy.

"Rainbow dash , is that you?" The pony asked rainbow dash

"Well that depends who's asking?"

"Ahhh…don't tell me you for got about your good old friend" the pony stated.

"I don't remember you" rainbow dash stated " The only friend I have is my pal, fluttershy."

"Don't tell me you honestly forgot about your greatest friend in the whole world , Jessie"

"Jessie hmmm all I remember is that she was a bucking loser and had no friends" rainbow said remembering a friend she ditched along time ago.

Fluttershy knew something was going to happen when she said that but , she didn't know what to do with so many people watching , after all she was shy remember. She wanted to help her friend and get her back , especially since rainbow dash was doing that for her. Fluttershy build up all the courage to step up and say something and end all the trouble that was happening. Fluttershy was walking toward rainbow dash and that horrible Jessie. As she was walking towards them, she stepped on a pebble and tripped , looking very clumsy and hit the dirt floor with a giant, loud thud.

"Hey look Clumsyshy fell" a random pony cried out to tell ponies what happens.

Everyone laughed at 'Clumsyshy' as she was lying on the floor on her stomach . She was looking around noticing that all the attention was no long on rainbow dash and Jessie but know it was all on her. This is the most attention she ever made , everyone was laughing at her she had never been put in the spotlight before , Fluttershy began to shed tears out of her eyes but , either though she was crying the other ponies kept on laughing. To Fluttershy it felt like this will never end , that she will be a loser forever.

"STOP LAUGHING AT HER." rainbow dash cried out loud having enough of all this , as she yelled out loud she got eveyponies attention . " So what if she fell and embarrassed herself , everyone embarrasses themselves once in a while." She said. "…the saddest part is when she starts crying no one even stops , you'll just keep on laughing huh saddest thing I've ever seen."

Rainbow dash walked toward Fluttershy , wiping a teardrop from her face. Fluttershy asked " why , why are you helping me ."

Rainbow dash stated " because …” Fluttershy widened her eyes as she heard the words that came out of Rainbow Dash's mouth so clearly

… I'M YOUR FRIEND.

Comments

[Loganberry]

Aww, that's cute. You've got some nice ideas here, in particular the one about Fluttershy not really understanding what friendship was before she met Rainbow Dash. That's probably the part of your story that I think you could do the most with. It's a really interesting idea, since after all we don't know a lot from the show about Fluttershy's fillyhood. So you have plenty of space to explore that in fics.

The story itself could do with some proof-reading, though: for example, ponies' names need to have initial capitals every time and there should be no spaces before commas. I'd advise losing the narrator intrusion near the start ("like I said") because it's distracting. You want your readers to get drawn into the story, and that pulls them out again. Another suggestion: instead of writing things like "a random pony", try giving them names and/or a brief description. So instead of this:

"Hey look Clumsyshy fell" a random pony cried out to tell ponies what happens.

you could have something like this:

"Hey, look: Clumsyshy fell!" came the mocking voice of red-maned Nimbus Swirl, his voice shaking with amusement.

It just helps to make the whole place feel more real in the reader's mind. Anyway, this is getting rather long, so I'll stop babbling on now! I like reading stories about filly Fluttershy, so thank you for writing this one.

[Mr_Allusive]

Thanks for the liking my story. I'm going to talk to my proofreader about this , give him some advice about this suggestions. Overall thanks I need as much a feedback as possible to make better stories.