The only thing I have to say about this story is that the segments of Octavia's "probing" shouldn't have been broken up with the brief alien pony segments. They weren't all that funny and they were really, really distracting from the action going on with Octavia. If it had happened once, then it would've been fine, but it happens quite a few times and the back-and-forth breaks up the flow of the story.
Duuude I was just watching the South Park episode where the aliens probe cartman and I just thought of him next to Octavia thinking, "why the fuck is this pony enjoying being butt raped by a probe." I honestly have no idea why I was thinking that. XD
Really good for something you claim to have just tossed out in a hurry. Please write more, I think we would all like to see all the different ponies reactions to various probing. I personally would like to see : For Sexy; Celestia Luna Cadence and Shining at the same time. Fany Pants and Fluer Twilight Rarity
For Funny: Vinyl (getting her turn) Lyra and Bon Bon Pinkie Pie Blueblood
Just what I think should be first. Honestly I want see everypony, no matter how obscure. Please write more. Also, I imagine Ten and Twenty to have the voices of Kang and Kodos from The Simpsons, I don't Know why.
HA! Science IS weird lol. It is actually much better than you say it is. Also while being self critical isn't a bad thing it makes authors think their work is crap even if it is not.
Ten watched data flood his screen and sat back. He had no idea how this got the information they needed, all he knew is it was rather strange that you could fuck the knowledge out of the locals.
4063579 mr Mackey: I'm having the dream again....Mkayy.. Craig: what's....happening? Mr slave: oh Jesus! Jesus Christ! Can we try the big silver one again? OOoOooh!
4048568 Left Confused? Your name is Left Confused? After all this time... Does the name General Confusicus Confusion ring a bell?
"I just wrote no. I mean, I thought it was funny."
Don't worry Ten, it was. You prick.
Look, it's either butt or we have to cut them open and dissect them
Really? No in between? Just fuck or kill? No examining their diet by looking at their... droppings, or watching media, or anything? I bet your employer just sells the tapes when he is done for profit, the data is so incredibly revolutionary it's useless currently.
"Oh yeah...I forgot you could see that."
Ten. You prick.
"Yeah, it's supposed to taste like oranges."
Ten. You prick.
Ten. You prick. Wait, Ten didn't saying anything. Still, I like Ten.... ........ ........ ........ The prick.
Glorious. I don't know what exactly they looked or sounded like, probably just space ponies, but I imagined Ten and Twenty looking like Eyes from Nuclear Throne, but with six arms. And Twenty was red for some reason. And they both spoke really monotone... Yeah, I have a weird imagination.
4046100 I'm not drugged up and I need time to process this. It was certainly...different. Whether it was enjoyable or just plain weird I don't know yet.
This was...
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4046092
Yeah, I know. I got bored so you're really not going to hurt my feelings by calling this bad.
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I'm actually not sure what to feel. I need to mull it over for a while. Well, I did drug myself. That might have something to do with it.
4046100 You holding!?
4046107
Sure, I–
Zzzzzz......
That was something quite... interesting. Excuse me while I try and figure out why I have the weirdest boner right now.
The only thing I have to say about this story is that the segments of Octavia's "probing" shouldn't have been broken up with the brief alien pony segments. They weren't all that funny and they were really, really distracting from the action going on with Octavia. If it had happened once, then it would've been fine, but it happens quite a few times and the back-and-forth breaks up the flow of the story.
All in all, not bad.
4046125
As stated below. It was a stupid quick write I did because I was bored.
Duuude I was just watching the South Park episode where the aliens probe cartman and I just thought of him next to Octavia thinking, "why the fuck is this pony enjoying being butt raped by a probe." I honestly have no idea why I was thinking that. XD
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Ah, my apologies, I didn't see that comment.
4046141 Don't apologize. I'm just trying to make it clear that I know this is bad, I just did it to get out my stupid before going back to work.
BRILLIANT!
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Can't wait for another chapter. :)
i thought it was funny
This wouldn't happen to have been inspired by that one Kids in the Hall sketch, would it?
I didn't see that coming. Honestly I didn't XD
It's funny cuz I just watched pewdiepie play South Park stick of truth, and break off the anal probe, Lolz
This should go in the rape folder, but... I don't know where to put it. It doesn't have a "hilarious rape" tag.
Really good for something you claim to have just tossed out in a hurry.
Please write more, I think we would all like to see all the different ponies reactions to various probing.
I personally would like to see : For Sexy; Celestia
Luna
Cadence and Shining at the same time.
Fany Pants and Fluer
Twilight
Rarity
For Funny: Vinyl (getting her turn)
Lyra and Bon Bon
Pinkie Pie
Blueblood
Just what I think should be first.
Honestly I want see everypony, no matter how obscure.
Please write more.
Also, I imagine Ten and Twenty to have the voices of Kang and Kodos from The Simpsons, I don't Know why.
Octavia: "Do you want the aliens to probe your anus!?"
Vinyl: "Maybe"
HA! Science IS weird lol. It is actually much better than you say it is. Also while being self critical isn't a bad thing it makes authors think their work is crap even if it is not.
That was... um... interesting.
That's about the word I've got for it. Interesting. Not too long... not too short... crazy plot... followed by, uh... information extraction.
Ok. I'm left very confused, but... it did entertain me... so, um.
Upvote. Yeah.
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!
This reminds me of the game South Park: The stick of truth
Came here expecting very little. . . But. . .
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Do Lyra next.
.... I love you Hatty. I really do!
I don't even
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Science...end of discussion
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wat iz lyfe¿
I'd let these aliens probe me anytime
...I don't... I just...
Well. Ok then.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Don't you mean butt. In case you don't know, a plot is something entirely different
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"The probe found it's home"
-its
"free of it's impalement."
-its
As a fellow alien, I concur wholeheartedly.
HUEHUEHUEHUEHUEHUEHUEHUEHUEHUEHUEHUEHUE
BRBR
4046142
If this is you letting the stupid out, then you should do it more often. I like it.
I approve of this.
4053741 as a scientist, you can learn alot about something when they are banging, just by monertering their brain waves and such
Hahaha reminds me of the very first episode of South Park
4063579 DONT REMIND ME!
4063579 mr Mackey: I'm having the dream again....Mkayy..
Craig: what's....happening?
Mr slave: oh Jesus! Jesus Christ! Can we try the big silver one again? OOoOooh!
4048568 Left Confused? Your name is Left Confused? After all this time... Does the name General Confusicus Confusion ring a bell?
Don't worry Ten, it was. You prick.
Really? No in between? Just fuck or kill? No examining their diet by looking at their... droppings, or watching media, or anything? I bet your employer just sells the tapes when he is done for profit, the data is so incredibly revolutionary it's useless currently.
Ten. You prick.
Ten. You prick.
Ten. You prick. Wait, Ten didn't saying anything. Still, I like Ten....
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The prick.
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That was weirdly good, the funny-scientastical kind of good, another chapter! (Clicks 2)
Glorious. I don't know what exactly they looked or sounded like, probably just space ponies, but I imagined Ten and Twenty looking like Eyes from Nuclear Throne, but with six arms. And Twenty was red for some reason. And they both spoke really monotone... Yeah, I have a weird imagination.
When I think of the aliens I just picture Roger from American Dad.
That's a good thing.
Weird mind right now...Why it feel like something on youtube? oh yeh? game stick of a truth\
Lucky it a human, not alien green thing.
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exept without the bisexuality.
4046100
I'm not drugged up and I need time to process this. It was certainly...different. Whether it was enjoyable or just plain weird I don't know yet.
*Jaw opens*
*Jaw closes*
*Repeats for at least 5 times*
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*Raises Finger*
*Lowers Finger*
*Repeats*
*Gives up and goes onto the next chapter*