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MysticStoryThePegasus


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Two fillies, a pegasus and a unicorn, move into Ponyville when Aura Sparkstar, younger sister of Celestia and Luna, and older sister of Crystle Diamonds, starts to get strange headaches from time to time. Galaxy, the older filly and unicorn sister of Milkyway, says it should go away soon. Milkyway is the younger sister, and is a pegasus with a flowing, starry mane.
But nopony knows where they lived before they moved. Galaxy keeps scribbling into a red notebook with a tree on the cover, but the tree isn't a regular tree. Oh, no. Not a magic tree.
This tree has silver leaves.
And what is she writing?
Where are they from?
Why are they hiding it?
Who are they?
Why am I asking these questions?

Oh, and now re-rated Teen, for pony-swears and out-of-nowhere pony-butt whooping. Yep..
....Oh, and when they open the watches, their height grows to about teenagers. Truly, Galaxy is around 300 and Milkyway is around 200.
~ Story is based off of a roleplay that me and my friend started after I made an OC.
Milkyway belongs to http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Crystle+Diamonds .
<3 Yay!

Chapters (11)
Comments ( 31 )

YES! Finally, a story where I can make the characters way more serious than I intend them not to be.
Oh. And I'm making Derpy not as...Derpy. :derpyderp2::rainbowhuh::derpytongue2::duck:
She's still a bit clumsy, and the eyes and all that other details...But yeah..... :applejackunsure:
Don't expect me to make something overly amazing... :twilightoops:

So far good, but 500 word chapters? Not many people are gonna like that part.

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...I suppose so... :applejackunsure:
But their going to be longer soon, I promise. :twilightsmile:

I like this story so far. Keep writing more chapters.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

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:twilightsmile: Right on it. Just wrote a new chapter. Coincidence? :pinkiegasp:

There's a few errors mostly just missed spaces after commas and periods.
The story itself is nice so far although a few decisions in the writing really cut down on the size of it. If you had gone with the slightly more realistic path of the class actually caring about her mane and a new classmate then you could have made it a bit longer. The pacing is good, most of the brevity comes from you just not addressing details and backstory which would be nice but aren't vital. Might not finish as crossovers aren't really my cup of tea.:duck:

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1.) Okay, I don't have anyone to edit it for me, and it is really tiring to write chapters at 12:00 A.M at night.....Let alone edit them.... :applejackunsure:

2.) ...Wat? :trollestia::rainbowlaugh::rainbowhuh::derpyderp1::applejackconfused:

Oh, and Crystle Diamonds, if you'd like to help write in your character, It'd be awesome. :rainbowdetermined2:

3950322 ya know she doesn't need someone to edit her stories for her right? Also it's gonna be another thing on her plate to add 1+ ponies to speak and to get the personalities right...

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Oh, and there are going to be flashbacks in her dreams. Backstories will be up to your imagination of putting the dreams together. :derpytongue2:
I've been running out of ideas, but I recently came up with some more. :pinkiehappy:

Uhh, Applebloom. :trollestia:
UPDATE PLEEEEEEASE!!!

4340050
Okay, It's been tomorrow for an hour and twenty-four minutes.
Time to get updating. :rainbowdetermined2:
:rainbowlaugh:

Just Noticed:
Where'd that Pinkie tag come from?
:rainbowhuh:
And the CMC aren't even involved in this... :twilightoops:
Edit: Fixed tags.

4341220 Hooray! Also, because the CMC and Pinkie rule.

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Put the CMC back in. I realized they HAD been involved earlier and stuff. :rainbowlaugh:
Derp. :derpytongue2:

Yay! More updates that I only now noticed! :pinkiehappy:

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I'm working on a new chapter as we speak...live...breathe?
Idk... :rainbowlaugh::derpytongue2:

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Lol! I went back to this. Thought it needed more....
Chapters.
:rainbowlaugh:

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