When Spike and Rarity are planning their Hearts and Hooves day date,they are interrupted by a letter from Twilight, who needs Spike's help with something... something that will soon lead to an old foe of theirs becoming their best friend.
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Dude, you seriously need an editor.
Yes, please find an editor, there are many excellent people on this site who will help you.
I really tried to read this but the spelling, grammar and punctuation errors just were too much for me. Every time I started to get into the story they would hit like a slap in the face.
There is nothing in your profile to indicate your age or if English is not your native language. If you are in school perhaps your English teacher could help.
Good luck to you and don't stop trying.
I agree with the other two. I'm not that great with grammar myself but this was just painful to read.
why did trixie have to be a part of this? and seriously... they're trusting her after her THIRD TIME ATTACKING THEM!? psychopaths are often excellent at faking apologies and emotions for manipulation... just saying
I like the general idea and direction looks to be going, but you really do need an editor or proofreader.