A bit about me.. I'm addicted when it comes to reading and writing. When I feel inspired I tend to write whatever is on my mind. It's very fun for me!
Kainen, a mysterious baby changeling, suddenly falls into the hooves of Cadence when she least expects it. She knows it's far too risky for a princess to take care of such a creature but what happens when her motherly instincts kick in? How will Equestria react? What if the key to ending the war with the changelings lies within this very soul? Rated T for Blood/Violence.
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I hope in this story Chrysalis is Kainen's mom. And then later she will bitch slap Cadence for taking her baby.
I've got a few helpful hints for you. Every time you've used the word "feint" so far, you should've used the word "faint". "Feint" is when you trick someone using your movements, also known as a "fake out".
"Coped" should be "cooped" and "awhile" should be "a while". "Awhile" means "for a while". Thus, what you have written here means "for quite for a while now". Alternatively, you could get rid of the "for" and keep "awhile" in there.
You also forgot to capitalize the "s" in Spike's name on numerous occasions, and I've seen a few other typos as well.
Don't get me wrong—this is a great story, and I can look past the spelling mistakes. However, there is something I don't like and can't look past: the slow pacing. Unlike most of the times I criticize the pace of a story, this dislike is entirely my own opinion. I feel it's taking too long for the plot to get rolling. I've attempted to read famous novels that have the same issue. This is a good story, but it's simply not for me.
Can't wait for the next one
When are you posting the next? I can't wait to read it.
4062278 Forgive me for the long update, I will try to post the next one soon!
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It's ok, looking forward for it.
I'm pretty sure that Kainen's mom is a different changeling. She even said that not all changelings serve Chrysalis. I think I'm starting to like changeling fics.