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NoLongerAnon

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NoLongerAnon Joined 21st Mar, 2012 · Offline

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This is a psychological story of Star Shine, a mare of unknown origin in the human realm. She appears to a high school graduate who has nothing left in this world. They soon grow close and become friends.
Chapters (5)
Complete Published: Mar 22nd, 2012 Download
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Hivemind
Hivemind #1 · Mar 22nd, 2012 · · · Chapter 3 ·
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>>The chapters will get happier and happier until the very end where I will drop a bomb of man tears upon you.


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Reaper
Reaper #2 · Mar 22nd, 2012 · · · Chapter 3 ·
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First of all, you use I in pretty much every sentence. Second, it goes from Star Beam to Star Shine (make up your mind!).

Steampunk Starlight
Steampunk Starlight #3 · Mar 22nd, 2012 · · · Chapter 3 ·
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I think the romance aspect moved a bit too fast.

NoLongerAnon
NoLongerAnon #6 · Mar 23rd, 2012 · · · Chapter 5 ·
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355750
I did rush it. im sorry :(

Craterfist
Craterfist #7 · Mar 23rd, 2012 · · · Chapter 5 ·
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Wow. That was deep. I hope she comes back someday, and I will force myself to cry manly tears if that is what it takes for her to come back. :raritycry::fluttercry::applecry:

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