I am just some random pony liker, that has way to many unused charactors. So now I'll see how many fanfics and all that jazz I can write before I explode! Woohoo! I like potatoes. So many charactors..
Chrysalis has never been what most would call an 'ideal mother' to her only living daughter, the sickly Crown Princess Pupa. However, after a dreadful incident, the Changeling Queen is forced to confront her missteps as both a mother and a ruler.
A human appears in Equestria, seemingly under the control of Queen Chrysalis. Can he break her grip on him before he is forced to stain his own soul with evil?
The past should not be forgotten, note should it blind us to what the future may hold. With the new change in statuesque between ponies and their new channeling neighbors, the past may be the answer to help set an understanding.
The young prince stumbles upon the world outside of the hive, and when his curiosity gets the better of him, he decides to ignore his mother's warnings and tries to discover everything he can about the brightly lit day and the soft glow of the n
The Grox. They are a species of red aliens with cybernetic implants, they have made an empire of planets and feel only hate. Well, that, and laughter. Actually, laughter is their emperor, or 'empress' as you might say.
A changeling defect escapes into Equestria as another pony, having to face the life of a normal filly. Meanwhile, she writes in a small journal she finds. This is what she's written.
Skyrim. A land in war, with dragons attacking from every side. It is a land in need of a hero, a strong man with knowing of the thu'um. Thats not exactly what they get.
After Dinky Hooves moves to Ponyville to work on an assignment, she meets some mares and discovers she and her friends are the next holders of a powerful magic, while meeting a strange draconequus.
Celestia, and Luna. They have saved a world called Equestria, they are the royal alicorn sisters. There are not twins though, but triplets. They have a hated, unknown sister.
~~~~~ Written by: Me Being Proofread By: Crab Spy Story by: Me Everything else besides the title by: Me
That's fine, I suppose. However, I do feel that you could've at least combined chapter 1 and 2 together. It kinda breaks the flow of the story, having to load up the next chapter page. But what do I know? I'm an idiot.
By the way, just noticed this now. Chapter 2 isn't, well, titled as Chapter 2...
I also noticed several grammatical errors scattered about. If you need a proofreader, It'd be an honor to assist in the production of this story.
This is an amazing concept, I love it! A few grammar mistakes, but other than that it's cool!
Oh, and this part:
The ten changelings transformed into four became unicorns, two being pegasi.
It doesn't really make sense at first. Maybe you could make it like, "The ten changelings transformed into ponies. For became unicorns, and two were pegasi." Just that part, that's all. But the story is really awesome, continue it when you can!
New headcanon, yay!
The chapters, I feel, are way too short. Hopefully you can stretch 'em out for future chapters.
Regardless, I'll be following this closely.
3793218 I'm bad at making chapters :P At least I'm something different fromthe average 5000 word chapter XD
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That's fine, I suppose. However, I do feel that you could've at least combined chapter 1 and 2 together. It kinda breaks the flow of the story, having to load up the next chapter page. But what do I know? I'm an idiot.
By the way, just noticed this now. Chapter 2 isn't, well, titled as Chapter 2...
I also noticed several grammatical errors scattered about. If you need a proofreader, It'd be an honor to assist in the production of this story.
3793293 I'll merge those chapters together, and I'd need a proofreader XD I'm bad at finding errors and I make lots of em'
This story is great please continue!
lol wut
3793354 DARNIT
3793354 i am sadness
3793360 like how does that even happen, that was literally posted like 30 minutes ago
This is an amazing concept, I love it! A few grammar mistakes, but other than that it's cool!
Oh, and this part:
It doesn't really make sense at first. Maybe you could make it like, "The ten changelings transformed into ponies. For became unicorns, and two were pegasi." Just that part, that's all. But the story is really awesome, continue it when you can!
3793385 I just fixed that :P Oh and I have another tab up making the next chapter
3793399 Yay!
intresting point of view
A very awesome story so far keep it up.
i feel like tears now, thanks good author
i am going to go cry now, from just reading the intro.
Or maybe continue on with tears of sad?
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Don't we all?
will sell my soul for the ability to help in getting the next chapter out, will sell food to help... uh, need more ideas...
WILL SELL ALL THE PONIESpoor Chrysalis i bet she just wanted a hug should sell some hugs, that might work
LOVE DE STORY
i gots you some mustaches
hmm ill give this one a shot. But I personally don't see Luna being the mean one of the two, but hey.. its your call :p
FIRST and
the ffreik
3853849 I have no idea what you just typed :D
3853866 sry
it says the frick
my bad
okay, i was even more excited, buuuut... yeah, this wasnt as long enough to satisfy my taste. More!
Why do people like this?!
The fanfics I enjoy writing and fun with get to ignored, and this little crapfest is getting too much attention
I hate writing this in every way and it is no longer my headcanon at all...
4496177 You could take it down and edit it until it stops making you ashamed to live.
That's what I did
I was just got a deep feels citadel...
canceled nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!