Chapter Four
Blink Part 2
“*Ahem* What did thee say thy names were?” Luna asked, seeing their dinner companions.
“These two are Roaring Thunder, and Amethyst Petal” the brown earth pony stallion said, pointing to the pegasus and unicorn. The earth pony’s chocolate brown coat and mane- combined with his blue eyes contrasted with the yellow and green pegasus and the pale orange unicorn
“And who art thou?” she continued.
“I’m the Doctor” he replied.
“Just...the doctor?” she furrowed her brow.
“Yes." he nodded
“But-” she was cut off.
“Don’t worry about it- he won’t tell us his name either” The pegasus mare said.
“I believe you have yet to tell us the purpose of your visit” the queen said.
“Ah! Yes- we’re on a hunt, of sorts” the Doctor said.
“What are you hunting?” The queen asked.
“Weeping Pegasi” he affirmed
“Weeping what?”
“Weeping Pegasi- nasty creatures; they feed on temporal disruption- they’ve been tailing the TARDIS for a while now…”
“What exactly are they?”
“Quantum locking ponyoids- they turn themselves to stone if they think they’re being watched; able to move quick as lightning, disrupting time to feed themselves”
Luna felt her blood freeze.
“Wh-wh-what?” Luna stuttered
“Yes, statues of pegasi- although...they’re not exactly statues…they’ve been known to recruit every now and again...”
“What?” she asked' intrigued.
“If they’re too few in numbers- they tend to turn other statues into Weeping Pegasi”
“You said ‘temporal disruption’ earlier, what does that mean?”
“Ah, let’s see- how can I explain this...er, well...ponies assume that time is a strict progression of cause to effect, but actually from a non-linear, non-subjective point of view- it’s more like a big ball of wibbly wobbly time-y wimey...stuff”
“Oh…”
“So what does this have to do with anything?”
“The Pegasi feed on energy time disruptions 'cause-"
“But how does-”
Celestia was interrupted as the sound of breaking vases filled the air- originating from the upper floors of the castle
“Good heavens, what in the world was that?"
“That...would be our expected, unexpected guests” the Doctor grinned “Your highness, I recommend you and the princesses stay here”
“Agreed”
“You two, follow me” he said, running through the doors with the mare and the other stallion
“Captain- assemble a platoon of your best guards; provide help and protection, if need be”
“Yes, your highness” Captain Stronghold saluted
The group was soon formed, and they trotted after them.
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‘It’s unusually quiet tonight’ I thought, standing at my ‘post’ on the balcony ‘I wonder what Luna’s doing now...’
*Crash*
“What in the world?"
I walked through the room and cautiously opened the door, no guards were stationed outside.
‘That’s odd...there’s usually at least one guard out here’ I thought.
I scanned the area, and carefully tip-toed out the door- at the end of the hall, I found three statues of pegasi, all covering their eyes with a hoof
{Close your eyes, you fool! We can’t turn to stone now!} A voice shouted in my head.
{Yeah! We’re too close to stop now!}
‘What?’
{There’s a big energy source right here in the castle! Glorious food...}
‘What are all of you talking about?’
{We don’t have time for this! He’ll be here soon, we need to go!}
I uncovered my eyes, and the three statues were gone.
“That was weird...they’re just like me- only in...pony form…”
I followed them down the hall, making sure to at least partially cover my eyes. What I found- was one of the pegasi locked into a kiss with another statue, the statue he was kissing was a mare in guard’s armor. The pegasus backed away from the statue, and went down the hall with the other two
I walked to the frozen guardpony.
{H-h-help me...I don’t know what happened...I- I- I can’t move!}
‘It’s going to be okay...’
{Who are you? What are you? What’s going on?}
‘I can’t tell you...are you going to be okay?’
{I- I think so- what were those things?}
‘I don’t know myself, but if they did this to you- they can’t be anything good; will you be okay here by yourself?’
{I- I-think so…}
I left the poor guard, and gave chase to the pegasi
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“Alright, a few things you need to know about Pegasi- no pun intended, of course- whatever you do, don’t turn your back on them, and don’t blink- you blink and you’re dead; they are fast, faster than you can believe, I can’t stress enough, DON’T BLINK”
“What exactly are these things?” a guard in the rear asked.
“Creatures from another world- able to survive because they have the perfect defense system; they’re quantum-locked, meaning whenever any living creature looks at them- they literally turn to stone”
*Crash*
*Crash*
“Remember your training, gentlecolts”
Each of the guards raised their spears, ready for what lay beyond. The Doctor, Thunder, Amethyst, and the guards were approaching the upper floors of the castle when sounds of a struggle filled the air. Nothing could have prepared them for what they saw. In the courtyard- was a tall, bipedal statue; its pointed teeth barred and its claws wrapped around the neck of a frightened Weeping Pegasus, the other two laying on the ground- seemingly unconscious. The taller statue’s eyes were closed as all four remained in the current position
"I never thought I’d see the day…” The Doctor muttered.
“S-s-see wh-what?”
He remained silent as he trotted up to the taller of the two.
“You’re not supposed to be here!” he shouted.
He felt his eyes twitch, and blinked as fast as he could- he expected the worst when he did, instead, he was greeted by a look of genuine surprise from the statue.
IT HAS BEEN UPDATED!
You may read, to your hearts content.
yesss I was starting to wonder when the doc would show after all where there are weepers the doctor is sure to not be far behind
also thank you for updating im glad this wasn't a hit and miss story
Is this Doctor Timelord turned pony Doctor (From the human dimension), or just the pony version of a Timelord? (Timecharger)
I was hoping for the Doctor to appear.
I love it
This. Is. AWESOME!
3765355 hearts plural I have two hearts see
You should have the human Weeping Angel get into a big fight with some kind of bad guy while protecting Luna and the others. Changelings, Griffons, other weeping pegasi. Take your pick. Have her win but be gravely wounded. Luna tries to save her and seemingly fails as the human weeping Angel disintegrates to dust. Now fast forward to present Mane Six time and have human weeping angel come back in some way with a reunion between her and Luna. Work it how you see fit. This is just an idea that I think would jump the story up a few more notches.
...Did everyone present blink at the same time as the Doctor? I'm just wondering because I am confused as to why the Angel was able to change her expression when a whole platoon of guards, Amy, Rory, and the Doctor was watching her.
All the same, really enjoying this.
Is it weird that I read the Doctor's lines using Tennant's voice instead of Smith's voice?
3765554 thats a lot batter idea i think what you just said to do would put this story on the front page of fimfiction!
I like who you chose to be Rory and Amy, and you're doing great with this story. Good plot, good timing, and REALLY good character development. I congratulate you.
dun dun dun!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Still LOVE the story though. Hope for more updates soon.
This is pretty great so far.
I'll look forward to seeing The Doctors brain struggling with comprehending what he is currently experiencing.
ICWATUDIDTHAR!
ROAR(y)ing thunder and AM(y)emthest. Hehehehehe....
Though I'm not quite certain you got the Docter 100%, it's still close enough for me not to get upset over it. He is a rather impossible character to pin down.
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this is what the doctor must be thinking : thats not something even i see every day
(Fake) prize to whoever guesses why the Weeping Pegasus was kissing the other statue
good chapter, I can't what for the next one and good cliff hanger it is big but something is different about it I don't no what but there is something different about it.
NOOO I NEED MORE NOW!
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to turn it into one as well
Hehehehe...this story is great.
The good guy becomes the bad guy. A normal person takes the bad guy's form.
I can't wait to see how this turns out.
NOOOOOOOOO COME ON IT'S GETTING GOOD!
Chapters always seem to end when it gets good whether intended or not it always happens
*right at the beginning, sees this, must comment*
OMIGOD IT'S AMY AND RORY!!!!!!!!!!!!
: MOAR!!
That was fantastic! media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m92q929JTP1rnsfq2.gif I can't wait for the next chapter.
oh you fantastical bastard you.
Eh, middle of the road fanfic. There are some things holding it back from being all that it can be, which includes some messed up facts. First, weeping angels look like they are made of stone even when they are moving. second, they don't "turn to stone," not really anyways. They appear to be stone, but they, as you said, quantum lock when they are being observed. This has the effect of making them unbreakable... as long as they are healthy. This brings us to the third mistake, you have made it so they apparently choose (as you had the Doctor say) to freeze, when in fact it is their biology to do so, they have no choice in the matter. This also includes being observed by other angels, which is why they cover their eyes all the time. You had X (Which you should change for an actual name) observing and being observed by other angels without freezing. Lastly, the feeding of the manticore was off, they "kill you kindly" as the doctor explained it; sending people back in time to feed on the temporal disturbance. They don't suck the time out of you as far as I know.
Other than that, the main character is a bit odd in the fact that you have yet to explain why she thinks it's a good idea not to reveal herself to other ponies. I can think of reasons, but the fact remains she was quite adamant on the idea from her first introduction to ponies with no internal monologue for why. She literally leaped back into place that first night to avoid being discovered and you didn't say why. What was she thinking? Why does she believe it is in her best interest to hide? These are some important questions that should have been answered in chapter 1.
CLIFFHANGERS, FOR DAAAAAAYYYYYSSSSS!
Though, in all seriousness, you can expect a new chapter, Monday. Maybe Tuesday, if we are delayed.
3770304 I thank you for your observations and your opinion- it will help to make this story better; but I kindly remind you that this is fanfiction, you can make anything you want happen, I consider myself a casual whovian- I'm sorry if some of the information is incorrect
and yes, I have read the wiki page- thank you for your input
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Ah, yes, it is fanfiction... but their is a difference between good fanfiction and bad. When dealing with a well established franchise like Doctor Who (one that probably has the largest and most obsessive fan base next to mlp) you should go above and beyond to make sure it stays faithful to the source material.
Let's face it, the bulk of this story's appeal comes from your use of one of Doctor Who's most loved and iconic creations as the main character, and as such, you shouldn't muck that creation up. If your going to change well established facts for convenience, you should just write a completely original story instead.
hm, while not strictly dr who cannon (this is a crossover, so it doesn't really apply) , I actually quite like this, and am looking forward to another update.
It has come me and sketchie's attention that some people think that our representation of the weeping angel is incorrect. You are right.
What we are trying to do is create a character like a weeping angel. not one exactly....
You'll see later, hopefully you will understand what I am saying...
(A spoiler without actually spoiling anything.)
Dude... just got finished reading the whole thing. This is pure genius! I salute you!
found this sight a few days ago and found your story, wish it was on fanfiction but anyway its awesome hope u update on Monday before I leave to the philipines
Roaring Thunder...
Amythest Petal...
Amy...
Rory...
Nice.
Love the story. love the concept.
J-just...
YES.
The story may be flawed, but it's to where I do not care, and it is epic!
~Grr
This entire story is poorly written.
I'll stick around to see if you stop "Telling" and start "Showing" soon.
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And on top of that, sketch and I just want to make a story likeable by whovians and non-whovians alike. As Bumble said, he dosen't what a weeping angel is nor cares. He just likes the premise of it. That, is a perfect example of what we are trying to do. We like the constructive criticism, and we might change some of the details in the future to fit some whovian's needs, but, for now this story is not gonna change much...
3766047 And that is why he can be played by many different actors! Each have their own little quirks that make them unique so trying to copy a doctor you might be either the right or wrong thing depending on the story.
I wish to thank all of those who have given support to this story, it means alot that this story has gained momentum from all of you out there- thank you!
Such a cliff hanger!
This can only mean one thing...
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3765554 Some want, some not want. Both are present. I like the idea of a battle. and a reforming.... but not so.... childishly cliche.
As if creating baby angels in your brain wasn't a scary enough ability, you had to go and give them the ability to turn YOU into one of them too....
God! I love what you did there