• Member Since 11th Jun, 2013
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Max Caulfield


Let's head to the mosh pit, Shaka brah!

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A woman has turned into a weeping angel. How will she cope? Everypony thinks she is an ugly statue! She cannot speak, and cannot move when anyone is watching her. How will she interact with anypony?

This story is about her coping with her changes and making new friends with pony royalty. Watch as her life is turned upside-down in more ways than one.

(This story is set in the past, when Celestia and Luna are kids.)

Thanks to:

sketchboy for writing majority of this wonderful story! Check him out!

DiscordedWhovian for the awesome coverart, you rock!

Chapters (12)
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Comments ( 414 )

interesting concept. I like it. :pinkiehappy:

3751618

Thanks, it was sketchboy's idea!

Anyways, Chapter 3 coming tomorrow, 4ish.

WEEPING ANGELS!!! OH YESH!!!
I think I will like this story...carry on.

~Weeping Angel

This is a ridiculously unique idea. I love it.

Oh, guys. I was going to say....


If you feel like disliking then tell me why. I write so you guys can have something to do on the toilet, when your DS dies. I don't really care if you are spewing hate in that comment I am asking you to write, like someone slit your throat.

It's the principle.

(I am not so clear on the principle myself, so let's just pretend everyone does and walk away from it.)

(edit: The principle is that I write for your enjoyment, if don't like it, I can fix it.)

3751978

But nobody's disliked you, save for one person. Also, I take it you didn't get your art.

It's a unique premise, and certainly enough to catch my eye, although the writing itself is a little weak and unpaced. Try giving more details as you write, and show the protagonist's thought processes in the narration. The differences between:

He killed the pony. (simple)

He mercilessly killed the pony, eviscerating her entrails and giving her no chance to survive. (detailed)

and

He sighted in on his prey, his mind forcing him to visualize what he was about to do. It made him sick, thinking on it, but he knew it was for the better. The mare could not be left alive, not after the atrocities she committed. At least, that's the argument he used to justify the belief to himself. He dropped down from his hiding spot and sprinted foreward, gunning for his target. A moment later, he mercilessly killed the pony, eviscerating her entrails and giving her no chance to survive. The fact it was a quick death gave little solace to our hero, though. (Detailed and thought proccesses)

I'm not saying you're doing a really bad job, just that you have a bit of room for improvement. Otherwise, keep going!

3752039

Wow. That comment's sheer detailing stunned me for a few seconds. That's why it took so long for me to reply...

3752094
*tips hat*

I hope it helped at least.

3751999

Eenope.

And that comment was a just a little warning or foresight to any other future dislikers. THIS STORY IS UNDER MY PROTECTION.

Sorry, rewatching a looott of Eleventh and some his speeches are still in my head.

A woman turning into a Weeping Angel?:pinkiegasp: My Whovian side says, "HECK YES!":pinkiehappy:

3752039 Just gotta say I really like the detail you put in that comment.:twilightsmile::pinkiehappy:

3752099

Oh nonononono we aren't starting *this* buisness again!

3752130
*winks knowingly*
Are you so sure about that?

i want to know what the main character will be feeding on. being a weeping angel and all.

GGRRrr
[This story has caught my interest.]
GGRRrr
[I might even make my own fic based off of this stories idea.]

oh potential I see in this story :pinkiehappy:

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*laughs maniacally while petting hairless cat*

And this is only the beginning....mwah ha ha ha ha

An interesting and original concept to be sure, you can greatly improve the quality by adding detail and adjusting your pacing.
I look forward to more.

:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart: WEEPING ANGEL WHO ISN'T A WHOVIAN

Priceless :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Yay a fan fiction about me, finally! :derpytongue2:
Good story! :twilightsmile:

Guuuuysss... Should I release the next chapter, now?

As a little present when you wake up.

I might forget, that's what I'm saying.

So... What'd ya think?

3752690
Wait, what do you mean fanfiction about y-
YOU'VE DOOMED US ALL! That which contains the image of an Angel becomes itself an Angel!
Don'tblinkdon'tblinkdon'tblinkdon'tblinkdon'tblinkdon'tblinkdon'tblinkdon'tblinkdon'tblinkdon'tblink....

YESYESYESYESYESYESYESSSSSSS
New chapter!

.... That's not how weeping angels work

They teleport them in time and suck the time energy it makes.

GGRRrr
[Hey Planyx. If you are going to have her "feed." At least edit the chapter so that she unintentionally used her weeping angel powers to send the manticore to the past and eat the energy that it provides.]
GGRRrr
[You don't have to do this since you are the author, and that I can't force you to change it. But it would be appreciated if it was changed so it would be accurate to how weeping angels eat.]

3752943 don't worry, the picture is dormant.

I would have said "I am here to punish you for stealing cookies from the cookie jar."

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3753443

I know guys, but, me and sketch wanted to make it more like what happen to Rory in the present.

When they just went into the next room, and he was aged.

Like just show the basics of what an angel can do, for everyone.

3754522
GGRRrr
[I think I know what episode you are referring to, but not sure.]
GGRRrr
[While Amy was looking for Rory, she saw was possibly an illusion or real Rory that was old, and then dead with blood on the walls, then Rory comes in behind her all fine and asks whats wrong.]
GGRRrr
[If this description fits in what episode you are referring to, then that episode had nothing to do with weeping angels.]
GGRRrr
[If I am wrong, can you give me a link on wiki on what episode you are talking about? You don't have to if you don't want to.]

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The Angels Take Manhatten

The part when Rory ages (seemingly) rapidly in the apartment's next room that Amy and The Doctor go in.

GGRRrr
[Thanks for the link. Gonna watch and find out if this happened to Rory or not because I haven't seen the episode yet.]

3754621


My gaawd, I hate this episode. You'll find out why.

3754630
I know, that ending was CHEAP AS BALLS!!!!!!!!!!!!


Plus, they completely ruined the creepiness of the Angels. In Blink and The Time of the Angels and it's sibling episode, the angels were done well, creepy and scary and mixed with just the right amount of impossible to stop. I didn't like the whole bit where amy was blind just becuase it makes the quantum locking appear voluntary, but other than that it was good.

But in the angels take manhattan? It was crap. Especially when the Statue of Libery became an angel. At that point, it's stopped being creepy and has become absurd. Laughable. Ugghhh...

I can see it now. The angels take manehatten. Also, this story needs more editing. Just saying, is all.:pinkiecrazy::pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy::pinkiesad2::pinkiesick::pinkiesmile::twilightangry2::twilightblush::twilightoops::twilightsheepish::twilightsmile::facehoof::fluttercry::flutterrage::fluttershbad::fluttershyouch::fluttershysad:

3754607 that doesn't explain why the time paradox killed off most of the angels

3755394

I think it's because most of them were probably starved and that was there only way to survive...?

He's gonna be cold in the gardens tonight.

I think Angels can also feed off of normal electricity as well as potential events. I recall they were consuming electricity from a space ship in one episode.

3756055 yeah, they do, in one episode they drain lights and equiptment so they can move around again to get more energy

Human Tag maybe

3757831

Yeaaaahh... You are kinda right...

3756055 Bring out the lightning!

You, good sir, just earned a like and favorite!

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