A heartbroken Spike goes through the magic mirror to find love and acceptance in the EG universe.
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LIK IF U CRI EVRYTIM!
4264674 i.chzbgr.com/maxW500/5018521856/hCE693B11/
4264698 Y U MEEN 2 ME? I JUS ASK 4 LIK!
Drunk Shy is best Shy!
I saw tequila, and then healthy dose, and then I thought, Fluttershy is going to be passed out within minutes. I also was wondering how one gets drunk within two minutes. Anyway, the chapter was hilarious! Looking forward to the next one!
poor shy, still not much interaction between AJ and Sunset :(
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1). Fluttershy is a VERY cheap drunk.
2). She chugged the drink
3). Tequila messes everyone up.
4264706 You get a lick instead.
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4264882 Have patience my dear, sweet SilverRSpooN. There will be plenty of Sunnyjack in the next chapter. i453.photobucket.com/albums/qq260/spacewings/EmoteApplejackWet_zps7c07ac53.png
4264957 yay
drunken shy is best shy ? haha nice chapter ! wonder what spike is up to at the festival with rarity ...
oh and AJ and SsS
The second I read that Flutters planned to get drunk, I somehow knew it was based off that picture; Well, then again, the key elements were pretty obvious...
Drunken Flutters...
Karaoke...
Apple Family Member...
Tequila...
Yeh, that about sums it up.
4264972 The festival hasn't happened yet. All of the characters are currently in the Tavern. The festival is set to occur in the next chapter.
Saw "healthy dose of tequila" and I just couldn't help but think, "Oh no. Here we go..."
Still, a great short chapter that was very funny on the interaction between Fluttershy and Braeburn.
So many shippings everywhere. First Sparity, then MaicnDash, then SunJack, and now BraeShy. I now expect to see Pinkie paired with Cheese next.
OMG! You really made a good scene of flutterdrunk
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Yeah, she might want to stay away from alcohol. That, or there needs to be a fic where she's constantly drunk due to something.... Actually, that might be quite funny! ...But she gets drunk way too easily, as you said.
Still trying to wrap my head around that Cherry Jubilee is related to Applejack.
You want to shed some light on this universes version of that incident.
Eh, it's 5 o'clock somewhere.
Should have figured that Fluttershy was a lightweight and what's with drunks wanting to sing karaoke?
Wow.
Oh dear, poor Fluttershy, she's going to be mortified in the morning. Poor thing probably won't even go to the festival cause she'll be back in her room curled up in a ball in bed, either out of embarrassment or a hangover or both.
Is there going to be a chapter were we see twilight point of view after spike left or something? Just curious.
This chapter has a LOT of problems:
Braeburn's dialogue in his first appearance. A country boy isn't going to say "gentleman" or "maiden" in the context used here. Or at all actually. He'd be more apt to use "fella" and "filly", respectively. (The latter would also make for a nice touch of irony.)
Fun fact: this usage of "myriad" is incorrect. People do this all the time because they think "myriad" is directly interchangeable with "plethora", "great number", "variety", etc. It isn't. So, two things: first, "variety" would be more appropriate here. Second, myriad stands alone in usage. "a myriad of" is grammatically incorrect. So please don't do it.
"Hewn from" or "paneled in"? Because expensive, lacquered wood is only used for interior accents. Plus, "hewn" isn't a good verb choice here in any case. It suggests rough, crude, and unfinished construction.
Uhh...didn't the chapter begin with how unbearably HOT it is in Appleloosa? So why the hell would the tavern have a FIRE going?
Places like this usually have barmaids, because the barkeep shouldn't be leaving the bar. Just a nitpick.
I honestly fail to see how that would even have happened in the human world. Or anything analogous to it.
Oh, and...Rarity and Fluttershy should really be having their discussion about Braeburn in the ladies' room, which is what girls actually do when they want to talk about guys who are sitting right at the table with them. I mean, seriously! Did you just completely forget that they're all sitting at the same table? Because two girls cannot have a "whispered conversation" about boys (who are at the table WITH THEM) without drawing attention to themselves. It isn't possible.
There's a simple solution to this problem. Change this bit:
To this:
And then edit the rest of the next part so that they're in the ladies' room instead of at the table. It wouldn't take much more than two or three additional sentences.
See how much more sense that makes? They can have their entire conversaton about Braeburn (and Spike) without actually having it in front of the two guys.
This comic?
I love the chapter and I love this story
4266848 Ok, you do have some valid points. The dialogue between Shy and Rarity...I will probably fix that up a bit. It was an oversight on my part and it will be relatively simple to fix.
4266861 Yes, that very same one.
4266573 Yes, there will be but don't expect it to come out very soon. I have to develop certain parts of the story first before I add Twilight into the mix.
4265169 Macdash might not happen for a while dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/eenope.png
As for Pinkie *sigh* A lot of people are gonna hate me for this. fc08.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2014/014/e/1/meaniepie_by_comeha-d7259oq.png
I don't really like shipping anyone with Pinkie. She is, by far, my least favorite character to write for. I just...have a hard time taking her seriously and by extension, her romantic interests. I didn't have any plans for her in this story, other than to be a side character. I'll take suggestions...I suppose. But that doesn't mean I'll implement any of them.
Huh... It seems my mind has melted... Hmm I should get that checked.
Now what would happen next? I am a state of shock on what I have just read so I'll just say This: Huh... Make more.
... It's dangerous to drink from a pewter mug. Pewter is made from various metals that aren't allowed in serving implements and is usually used for decorations nowadays. That place would be shut down if they tried to serve anything in or on pewter.
Sorry, little tangent there.
Man I can totally imagine fluttershy singing that song and it sounds adorable.please keep them chapter comin'
Wow, this many chapter without any clop, I'm surprised I've stayed around this long. But I can't argue, I'm enjoying every word!
Ah, it's always the Shy ones who become the craziest drunks!
This is one of the first BraeShy ships I've seen, and I LOVE IT! Keep it on!
Manly tears has been shed...
4264957 Promise?
4333094 110% Guaranteed fc06.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2013/277/6/8/more_sunset_shimmer_by_bakki-d6p7t1o.jpg
4333121 Yay. I can only sit and wait for it... For now.
4333217 Sorry, but you'll have to wait at least a few days for it. With three active stories, it's hard to keep everything updated consistently but I try. Unlike some authors on here...who wait almost an ENTIRE YEAR to post a single, measly chapter.
4333121 *pulls sunglasses down with a shocked/mezmorized look*....................ddddddddddddaaaaaaaaaaaaaammmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm..........ssssssooooooooooonnnnnnnn.
>takes off shades after last part< Mother of Celestia.....I should of seen that ship sooner.....