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Derpy Tales

Derpy Hooves' life was pretty rough. She had a hard time fitting in, due to her derpy eyes, and her clumsy nature. One day, she got evicted from her apartment. She had recently lost her job, so she was at a loss of what to to. She stumbled upon a flyer about Ponyville, and read that they're a friendly bunch of people. Thus, she decided to try and start fresh there.

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Siswitch

Siswitch #1 · Mar 16th, 2012 · · ·

Beautifully written. I can honestly say I don't regret reading it and rereading it! The writing is superb, the emotions were so vivid it almost made me tear up and I am very impressed with the characterisation.
I am not sure what it was missing, maybe I just felt so sorry for Derpy and that sent a cloud over head as I believe no one (or nopony) Should have THAT much bad luck, I'm not sure.
I can't say I liked the ending but I can't say it ruined the whole experience. Although I must say characters that seem to carry disaster around with them wherever they go seems a little... Unfair.

Still. Great story, I'm giving it a like and hope I helped

Darklink401

Darklink401 #2 · Mar 16th, 2012 · · ·

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Thank you for the comment~

Honestly, I feel I could have done a LOT better with this (I DID write it in a day, tho I wasn't rushing)

Yeah, I felt Derpy was put through a lot, but most of what she was put through had some sort of logical explanation, I believe (wether it be her money being taken, this no rent, or her actual clumsiness, for the most part xD)

Regardless, I felt sorry for her while writing it,true...but I also felt I had made it TOO happy, in the middle O_O but this WAS a bit out of my comfort zone, writing-wise, so Im glad it came out at least pretty good ^^''

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