A chance.

After the events that lead to her death. Lucy now finds herself in the void. Empty of everything but herself and this voice that keeps calling out to her. Why is it calling me? How does it know me? What does it want? and WHAT is it?

An Elfen Lied and MLP:FIM one-shot crossover.

Edit: Yes this will leave you wanting to continue it because it seriously looks like it should be ;33

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Berry Punch

Berry Punch #1 · Jan 1st, 2014 · 1 · ·

Honestly, I found the story quite disappointing. It is a story that should be continued, not really the type of story for a one-shot.

Although, that is just my opinion, it wasn't one of the worst stories I've read, but it certainly wasn't the best. Well, I'll give you an up vote, since it's your first story, and it wasn't horrible like many other first stories I have seen out there.

I suggest you get an editor to go over it though.

Maiah

Maiah #2 · Jan 1st, 2014 · 1 · ·

3715362 oooh the first disappointed pony. thank you for your input and for just overly disliking my story... I think I wrote it under an hour or so? Yes, I think I did.

I really like your suggestion of making the thing even longer because my true intention was really to make it as a gift and the other was to make people think that I should make it longer... Heck even I told myself that sometimes... glad to see it worked.

Thank you for the upvote and well. Yeah I don't really write often. Mostly not at all so yeah. My writing isn't that good. Also thank you for the editor part though. Will see about that.

Ksititan

Ksititan #3 · Jan 5th, 2014 · 2 · ·

Please write more of this. The ending is not setup for a one-shot and should be continued.

Maiah

Maiah #4 · Jan 5th, 2014 · · ·

3735501 Well IF I get an idea as to how exactly I am going to continue this. I actually have no idea what story I can put into this and if I have enough of a mood to actually write it. Plus I did just intend for this to be like a giant cliff-hanger and such. I'm an awful person.

Kickback

Kickback #5 · Feb 24th, 2014 · · ·

I can't believe how much I love this anime

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Chaos51268

Chaos51268 #7 · May 1st, 2014 · · ·

This story is amazing. It truly deserves to be more than a one-shot. I bet that if you keep up the good work, you could make this a much longer story, and it could be a beautiful work of art.

Maiah

Maiah #8 · May 2nd, 2014 · · ·

4323536 Thank you. I know it should be more than a one shot and making it look like that was actually the whole point, but I have thought about keeping at this. problem is... I don't know where to go with this if I continued it...

I am also very self doubting on my own writing skills