The Nightmare in pink

by THE MIGHTY PINKIE

Chapter 6: Five minutes later

Five minutes had passed since the princess and trixie had gone into the dream and Twilight had already gotten worried

"don't sweat sugarcube" said Applejack "i'm sure the're doing just fine"

"FINE" shouted Twilight "The're inside Pinkie pie's head, who know's whats going on in there"

Suddenly pinkie pie's body began to shake, the whole town watched her to see if something would happen. Then a Poof of Dark smoke rushed out of pinkie pie's ear covering her whole body, the smoke cleared to find Trixie, Princess Luna and Princess Celestia standing behind them

"PRINCESS!" shouted Twilight

Everypony then bowed to the princesses. twilight ran straight up to them and hugged each one including Trixie.

"i'm so glad your all back" said Twilight

"did you manage to save Pinkie pie" rainbow dash said swooping in to speak

Rairty, Applejack, Fluttershy and Spike walked up aswell to greet them. Princess Celestia and trixe put their head down in shame.

"unfortunately we were unable to save pinkie pie from what had become of her, as we were sent away by the evil that was inside" said Princess Luna

Twilight and the others became sad, sad that one of their best friends had been taken away from them.

"i want you to know that your friend was very brave in the end, she laughed in the face of adversity.

"yeah" said Twilight with a frog in her throat " that's pinkie for you"

Twilight and Princess Luna hug but suddenly they are broken out of it by pinkie pie bursting through shouting

"HEY YOU KNOW WHAT THIS CALLS FOR, A WELCOME BACK PARTY!!!"

Comments

[Dorvarious]

OKAY!!!!!!!! so i have read the story and loved it, but i feel it was a bit too fast. for instance, where trixie was forgiven, i feel it should take awhile for her to be trusted by Luna and Twilight, i mean hello she did teleport the main Princess. I am not trying to be mean but i am being blunt, but i do not want to hurt your feelings either, becuase i do not like that. anyways, I feel there should be more chapters in Pinkie's mind, i mean Its Pinkie Pie, theres bound to be an interesting adventure in there with really weird disturbing things, that will probably scar Luna and Trixie, mostly Trixie. However you did catch Trixie personality and Twilight reaction when Celetia was teleported, even Luna. You Even got Pinkie's personality as well I would recconmend doing more chapters in Pinkie's mind, because it would be entertaining and seeing the reactions of Celestia and Trixie, i think luna can already expierence it cause she is the princess of dreams. But overall You did very very very well and i like it i also reccomend reading the-wheel-and-the-butterfly-a-dan-x-pinkie-pie-saga its really good and you can get ideas on pinkies personality as well. Stay being Awesome

[THE MIGHTY PINKIE]

3761627 well thanks very much i always like someone eleses opinion so il try to change it to make it better when i can thanks again

[Dorvarious]

3761644 No problem and if you need an editor you can either ask me or my friends they will be happy to help

[THE MIGHTY PINKIE]

3761708 thanks i'l keep that in mind