Luna's Fall

This is the tale of a demigod following her millennial imprisonment. A tragedy; what are the effects of such solitude?

(Written for a ridiculous competition, ha.)

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Aeleos

Aeleos #1 · Mar 1st, 2012 · · ·

Whew, second fanfic. I think it's decent. Competitions are fun!
I tried to promulgate pathos for Luna, but she was pretty damn evil. Let me know if I failed to mitigate her actions enough.

Ducreux'ed

Ducreux'ed #2 · Mar 1st, 2012 · · ·

That was fucking brilliant. have all my Internets!!

Aeleos

Aeleos #3 · Mar 1st, 2012 · · ·

277616 Why thank you!

Ducreux'ed

Ducreux'ed #4 · Mar 3rd, 2012 · · ·

Why isn't this getting more attention?

Derplexity

Derplexity #5 · Apr 2nd, 2012 · · ·

Wow, awesome story this is! This deserves WAY more than just 182 views, 3 likes and just 4 comments! The 2 people that didn't like this probably went berserk and turned their computers upside down to like it again.

Aeleos

Aeleos #6 · Apr 16th, 2012 · · ·

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And two of the comments are mine
Thank you so much though. Glad you enjoyed it. I felt like it was a bit rushed, although I just revised it. My next story will have a lot more time and effort put into it.

Also, great profile pic

Joural

Joural #7 · Apr 17th, 2012 · · ·

This is a very good and well written story! it's unfortunate it's been languishing in the dark.

I liked the bit about "nightmares and nightstallions", made me laugh.

And the best thing? despite this being a grimdark story about Luna as a monster, Luna is... well, not relatable, but... pitiable? somewhere between the two, I think. The rage, the fear, the hate, the sadness... It makes her a genuinely complex character who I really enjoyed reading about.

Aeleos

Aeleos #8 · Apr 17th, 2012 · · ·

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Thanks for the feedback! I tried to incorporate wordplay and promote an understanding of Luna's psyche.

This makes me hopeful for what I can accomplish in the future: as this is by far not the best i can do. This was a bit disjointed and written rather hastily (2 weeks : I take my time on creation).