• Member Since 7th Sep, 2013
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The Critical Wizard


Any comments, questions, complaints, or ideas for new story's are welcome. In case your wondering my user name did use to be 1307954628. It was a temporary name.

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Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon said that they could stay in an abandon mansion longer then Appleblom, Sweetie Belle, and I. I don't really want to go in there but I just can't stand their smug attitudes. So we agreed, and my friends made a plan to sneak out and meet up with the two of them at the front gate. I have a really bad feeling about this, but I don't want to bail on my friends, so I'll put aside my fear and go into the mansion to prove Diamond Tiara wrong and show we are braver. I mean after all it's only one night right? How bad could it really be...

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Although there are quite a few spelling errors, this was a interesting story :twilightsmile:

i think this could use some dialog and more description when it comes to the noises and feeling but over all this seems pretty good

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