Twilight's Dark Past

by DatPonyGurl

The Beginning to the End

-authors note- So I'm gonna try to have this story uploaded as much as possible:D And please leave feedback :3 i would reeeeaaaaalllllyyyy love it:3 thank you for your time to read my story!!!x3

Sparkie(Twilight)'s P.oV

Sweat possibly makeup and tears raced down my face. I wasn't about to be late again. I did not need my teacher asking why I was late. I got to class looking like i had just got done running 8+ miles. i walked over to where Rainbow Dash was sitting and took my seat next to her.

I heard her say, "at least the teacher's late along with you this time," she winked and laughed at her silly joke. Rainbow Dash is the captain of the wrestling team, baseball team, and airball team. She's the perfect woman stallions and filly's have ever dreamed of.

I'm not Miss. Equestria though. I'm only the magic teams leader. I don't see what a big shot like Rainbow Dash sees in a small magical pony like me.

I mean She's perfect right?? Me, I'm just a.."hope I'm not interrupting anything too important Sparkie, but uuuh here comes Pregosarus..." I saw her point towards the door, low and behold, there was Derpy...Derpy is Dash's crazy ex-filly. After they broke up, she tried to say that Dash paid someone to rape her and knock her up.

In actuality she just paid a guy. Crazy bucker she is..."Heyyy Rainbow Dash! oh hey uuuh Sophie..." she emphasized the "y's" in the hey and I started getting pissed off. I came back and told her "Hey Pregosarus, how's number three? oh wait too soon?" She had had 2 abortions since her first "period". The look in her eye told me everything I needed to know, she was useless and had no comebacks.

Her voice was fierce like a rabid dog, "look I'm not here looking for a fight...I actually need your help Sophie.."

I looked at her and said "one, it's Sparkie and two why the buck do you need my help?" She looked away and sighed. When she turned around she said" look i'll explain everything if you'll meet me in the bathroom no one ever goes into. After school work?"

I sat there and stared at her then Dashie. "Ok look I'll do it." Right as Derpy was gonna reply, the teacher walked in and told her to sit.

Rainbow Dash's P.o.V

After the incident with Derpy, Sparkie was silent the rest of the day. What was weird though, was Derpy didn't try any of her antics, she ACTUALLY needed help...From Sparkie!

"Sparkie are you actually going to help her?" It was after school and I was worried about her. "You know me...I can't stand not helping anypony friend or enemy." she smiled and turned towards me. She looked into my eyes and I could swear that her eyes turned a blood red, but before I could confront her, she had already headed off to the bathroom.

'Oh well, I'll just see her at home I guess...' I thought to myself as I walked home. Sparkie and I are both in college and live together in a small cabin out in the middle of nowhere, where we have no pony to bother us for flour or other comity.

I walked through a small forest, to get to our home. I walked in and started playing on my game system Sparkie got me for my 20th birthday.

2-3 hours later, I heard the door slam open then slam shut. i got up to go see if it was Sparkie, but instead I heard a dog-like growl. I walked out of the living room and noticed only Sparkie standing there. "What the buck Sparkie?!"

Sparkie(Twilight's) P.o.V

What could Derpy really want with me? Besides the fact the fact that I took her boyfriend for my own little pleasure..."Sparkie, are you really going to help her?"

I hadn't noticed Rainbow Dash standing by my locker. "Oh you know me...I can't stand not helping anypony friend or enemy."

I smiled and turned towards Dashie. I noticed her expression start to go towards confused and that's when I realized my eyes were turning their naturally bright red. I darted off towards the bathroom. As I got to the bathroom door, I sighed and opened the door. I walked into the bathroom only to notice that Derpy and I weren't alone.

In the bathroom with her was a mare I haven't thought of in thousands of years! I screamed out her name "AppleJack!"

Derpy gasped out loud and yelled " you know each other?!" I saw AppleJack's arm swing back as if to hit her but it just went back to her side and she said "yes..now shut the buck up..." She then turned towards me and I asked "what do you think you're doing here?!"

She looked at me and laughed. "I was in town and this mare here, told me about you. when I realized that you were who I've been looking for, I just had to see you!" I scowled at her and stepped back. But before I could go anywhere she closed the door.

"Listen Twi, I have a wee bit of a problem back home." She grinned.

"What makes you think that's my home?" I glared at her.

She laughed and said, "well because you were born there...Now enough of this..I need you to come back with me Twi."

"Why?" I growled.

"Well, the dragons, Alicorns and my earth ponies are revolting...You're the only one who can stop them Twi!" She laughed

"Look whatever game you're playing? It's not working..." I screamed at her.

"Look Twi don't think I don't know why you've been hiding with the Surface ponies this entire time!" Her voice started to sound like she was getting annoyed.

"I have no clue what you're talking about A.J.." She started laughing like crazy and then said, "Look you hid here to 'recover' from when I almost killed you. But when you were fully recovered, you met a nice young mare. You then fell in love with the mare and well here we are now!" She smiled.

"WHAT?! I WOULD NEVER FALL IN LOVE WITH A SURFACE PONY LET ALONE A MORTAL PONY!!" I screamed at the top of my lungs.

"Twi, I'm your twin remember? I can feel everything you feel and also read your thoughts!" Her laugh this time sounded more evil then before.

I had to think of a way to get away. I couldn't attack AppleJack right off the bat, not in a mortal pony form. Then it came to me! I'd hit Derpy and run! "That doesn't prove anything A.J..." I lowered my head, and grinned. I slapped Derpy in the face so that she fell to the ground. I turned around and ran away from the scene while hearing AppleJack scream at me. I kept running and running till I got home.

When I got home I opened the door and growled. I thought Dahsie wouldn't be home for another 2 hours, but I was wrong. I saw Dashie come out in her under garments. "What the buck Sparkie!?"

*AUTHORS NOTE!* so yes Derpy is prego but with Sorian and AppleJacks child, if AppleJack carried the child, it would die basically because she "Rough Houses" too much. sorry for the confusion!!! D: I hope you liked my story though! Feedback is much appreciated!!:D thanks!!!

Comments

[lunadashscratch]

FIRST!!! nad intresting gonna track and see wher this goes

[DatPonyGurl]

299227lol thx! I'll be sure to update as much as possible!

[Gwenio]

Their are some errors need to be corrected, such as calling Dash Derpy's boyfriend.

Are you sure it would not be better to use an OC for the role you are putting Applejack in? As it seems you are completely redoing her character, in which case there is no point in using her.

I will be tracking for now to see if things get better as the premise of Twilight being an alicorn in exile sounds interesting, but the execution could use a lot of work (I may send some more thoughts on how to improve it in a private message later).

[DatPonyGurl]

299264you're right, but I forgot to mention the the mane 6 and spike are based on the 7 deadly sins. And also I know I have a bit of typing errors so I'm gonna go through it and double-quadruple check to make sure I got everything down! thx!

[lunadashscratch]

299305Hey if y0ou ever felt the want to redo it withou AJ being evil i could supply some OC's for the main antagonist position if you wanted them that is

[Gwenio]

299305
299344

Or you could look at the latest information leak on Equestria Daily, as it seems Twilight will be getting a sibling in an upcoming episode.

[lunadashscratch]

299359already saw that

[DatPonyGurl]

299344 i may idk but like i said in and earlier comment, the mane 6 and spike are based on the 7 deadly sins so i'll see how ppl like this version of the mane 6 and spike but thx!! i'll be sure to go to you if i need any!!:D

[DatPonyGurl]

299359 i saw that that on G+ the other night!:O very shocking!

[lunadashscratch]

299390meh I've been wating for somethinlg like that I was excepecting some type of marrige thing would come up and thae fact that it's Twilight's brother to boot just combines it with something else I've been excpecting

[DatPonyGurl]

299481 well i'm still in the process of getting it all typed up and ready for public view, i've written up to the point where Twi goes looking for her sword (pretty far from the end but pretty far in) so i'll see what people want, A.J changing to twi's actual brother or staying the same

[PonyofTacos]

Too bad your in 1st person pov, 3rd person limited is much easier to transition from character to character.

[DatPonyGurl]

299520 well i write my stories as if i'm actually the person talking and thinking...3rd person is really hard for me

[Gwenio]

299528

Are you sure about it being hard? The wording is not that different. Here is a sample of the first paragraph redone to third person:

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Sweat possibly makeup and tears raced down Sparkie's face. I'm not about to be late again. I do not need my teacher asking why I am late. She got to class looking like i had just got done running 8+ miles. She walked over to where Rainbow Dash was sitting and sat next to her.

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Mostly you just change pronouns and some times the verb tense for thoughts. I use italics to show thoughts here.

[DatPonyGurl]

299694 yea xD I just like writing in first person, keeps the gears in my brain working

[Gwenio]

300551

By the way, let me know when you have done any clean up you plan on doing to the first chapter (and maybe the second as well), and I will then add it to the relavent groups. It should be at its best when submitted so that people will like it.