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DJ P0N-3 definitely needs to get in on this story. If not this one, then another; a sequel, perhaps. You write way too well to ever expect your fans will be satisfied once this wonderful fic is finished.
I'm not exactly sure what Rarity is going to say, but IT'S ABOUT FUCKING TIME!
Ooooh!
Cliffhanger!
Man, I figured this guy would get along with Gridiron.
Not as steamy as your other chapters but still good!
great chapter, even if it is a little slow but the endig leaves quite some room to speculate about the next chapter.. i'm compelled to read from chapter one again to pass the time until the next chapter.. well maybe just the flashbacks
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PRAISE HIM!! FOR ANOTHER CHAPTER IS APON US!!
"one of the many combs she keeps stashed around the house incase of hair emergency" something like pinkie
so much for our crazy hermit theory
i wanna see Sweetie Belle! sweetie take it away "OH COME ON!!"
Great chapter as always, but there's a few errors. I don't want to be "that guy" but I can't help noticing, no matter how insignificant something is. So:
"Madame Rarity is nothing if not surprisingly"
"Fridays seem to pass slow much slower than the other days"
"We can always 'fix the bed' to our to-do list afterward."
"I've managed to work work faint magical energies into the fabric itself"
Hope this isn't annoying, 3 years of classes with the grammar-naziest of grammar nazis doesn't fade away easily.
Amazing new chapter bud!
Thank god I can finally sleep, had to finish chapter. Can't wait for the next, aside from the fic xenophilia this is my fav
Great chapter. Can't wait to see how the story evolves from here.
On an unrelated note, Rarity's parents dialogue makes me want to see a pony version of the Coen Brothers film "Fargo."
This review's gonna be a bit shorter than normal.
I gotta say, the flashback scene ended up being heart warmingly sweet. Great job on that.
Rarity's parent's only got a single scene of screentime in the show, and yet you still managed to write them as organically as the rest of the cast. You also picked quite fitting names for 'em. Can't wait to see their reaction. They really seem so nice.
Not really that much more to say, since not that much more happened. I'm sorry that this review's so short.
Anyway, I can't think of anything clever to end this thing with, so I'm just gonna hope you'll enjoy batman.
Shits gonna hit the fan BIG TIME! I wonder how Raritys parents are gonna react about Cashmere? It will be interesting to say the least.
Screwing with the daughter of a Chicagoan ex-football player is akin to suicide-by-proxy.
Can't wait to see what Cashmere has planned, This is gonna be good.
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Oh man, can't believe I missed those. Thanks for pointing 'em out, they've been fixed with extreme prejudice!
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Short review for a short chapter, I see no issues here. It's mostly just a chapter for setting up future events. But hey, glad you liked it. And yes, I'm definitely enjoying Batman. It's a great game!
So, I just started a new cycle. On day four of Red Phase, I get about 15 minutes to myself, and what do I do? Read this. Well played, good sir.
Still holding out hope for a non-threesome-Fluttershy-Finds-Love ending, but hell, I'll stick with this regardless.
Then Fluttershy's parents shows up.
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Oooh, Red phase. Those poor privates. They won't know what's hit 'em. Heh heh.
Where are you a Drill at, Jake? If you don't mind me asking. If you say Fort Knox I'm gonna flip my lip, that's where I went to AIT/BCT.
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Me, too. Echo 2/81 AR October 2003. But no, I'm at Benning. Incidentally, The Armor School is here now, as well, but I'm on Sand Hill with the regular BCT. I wanted to go to the Armor School, but they said they can't assign me based on my secondary MOS.
And yes, my thoar hurts like hell. Now I see why my Drill Sergeants were so angry all the time, these kids are fking stupid, dude! I swear, if I get called Sir one more damn time, Imma have bits of Private on my boot.
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Also, I'm trying to find a way to work in ponies without being too obvious. Some may say being a brony degrades the intimidation factor, but I say it's even worse to imagine I could be singing "Smile Smile Smile" while I smoke the shine out of your boots.
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"DON'T YOU FUCKING CALL ME 'SIR', I WORK FOR A LIVING!"
I never did make that mistake. Probably thanks to the four years of JROTC I took in high school. I saw a lot of guys who did call a Drill 'sir', though. It did not end well for them. I always wondered what it would be like to wear the brown round, instead of being scared shitless by the sight of it. Being a Drill must be one hell of a demanding job, huh? Deepest respect for anyone who does it, yourself included. Having to train privates all day can't be easy.
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I don't know...if I was getting smoked until the point of muscle failure, I'd see a singing Drill as fucking TERRIFYING
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Oh, dear, sweet Luna it ain't. Still, it's a good gig. You DO get to have a lot of fun at their expense. Shakedowns after a live-fire range are always fun. We can't touch them any other time, but we HAVE to pat them down from brass and ammo. And hey, how can I help it if I don't know my own strength when I check his breast pocket and he falls over?
It's just like you thought, it's all a game. They currently think I'm crazy, knocking over weapons racks, shouting in their faces, running around at night wearing a plastic fox mask and knocking over wall lockers(it's a thing we do in my company. My battle buddy has a cat mask...) But in the end, it keeps them in line if they think at any moment I could literally snap.
Because I LOVE TO SEE YOU SWEAT SWEAT SWEAT!
Yes, I do!
Make you do PUSH-UPS SO YOU DON'T FORGET
Call me DRILL SERGEANT OR YOU'LL SWEAT SWEAT SWEAT
IN THE FRONT LEANING REST!
1065821 I love that gif...
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I could have sworn my drills were literally insane. Throwing trashcans down the hallway at two in the morning, repeatedly stepping in and out of the barracks just enough that we have to all yell "AT EASE!" before he heads right back in and does it two seconds later (that one's fun if you haven't tried it)...hell, we had this one Drill, we called him "The Tank", because he was the biggest man I'd ever seen, take off his gas mask in the gas chamber and start talking about it being "GOOD FOR THE SINUSES, PRIVATES!"
Good times, good times.
Oh, and getting smoked in the mud, then smoked in the sand, then smoked in the sawdust pit, then smoked in the barracks hallway, then made to jump up and down to get it everywhere. Then we had ten minutes to clean it. It didn't work.
1070392 yeah I was a cadet officer in JROTC of flag detail drill and a whole flight its not easy.
Also CURSE YOUR CLIFFHANGERS!!!!
Done ranting time to sleep.
Another great chapter. I must say that the "meat" of your side characters is always impressive. I would love to see a Derpy or Doctor Whooves cameo. By the by, any chance that new dress could end up being a bit steampunky? Bonus points galore if you can pull it off considering Rarity's normal fashion tendencies.
An interesting tidbit I have noticed is that there are surprisingly a LOT of fellow military bronies. Now that I have picked up some Tee's that I wear to social events with my unit I have had quite a few approach me. Seeing others on this site a lot more as well. Aircraft maintainer here on the ole dirty C-130!
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I did, in fact, have a Derpy cameo earlier on! It was in chapter 7, I believe. She showed up to take the poison joke package to Cashmere's place. You might not have realized it, though, because I used the name 'Ditzy Doo'
Here's the thing: As a fan name, I prefer Derpy. I love Derpy, and I think she's the most awesome thing to ever happen to the show. But let's be honest here: 'Derpy Hooves' doesn't really fit with the spirit of the names in the show, does it? Ditzy Doo is a name that feels more fitting, at least for the purposes of stories like this one. You can see Fallout: Equestria for a good example of of it.
I still call her Derpy everywhere else, though
And yeah, I noticed there's quite a few military bronies about. That's pretty awesome. I wish FiM had existed when I was in the Army, it certainly would have brought some happiness to the drab existence that was my deployment.
1070060 You, sir, deserve thanks for your service. No better position in the army than a Drill. Someone's gotta make sure these recruits don't shoot themselves in their own ass because, god knows, most of them would if you gave them the chance.
Shout out to all the other military bronies here, you guys are awesome. Thanks(I can't ever say this enough).
Well done chapter Dref.
I think I might have gotten away with that. >.> <.<
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When and where in the Sand Box? Sadir City from June '04 to June '05, and Mosul from November '07 to January '09.
Good times.
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And thank you, kind sir. It's not an easy job, but I do enjoy it. And no matter how much these Privates piss me off, at the end of the day, there's always ponies.
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I posted all my info in one of the blog posts where I answered reader questions. Stuff about my service history was in there, if you're interested.
I love this story, the characters are exceedingly well written and have a lot of depth. The storyline is engaging and well rounded, my hat is off to you buddy.
251391 Reading that comment, agreed with all your points, but..... You talk as if the story has ended and is done
When will the next chapter be coming out.
do you have major writers block
Why do the fics that I like the most always take really freaking long to update?
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Sorry guys, the story is on hiatus. This is the first time I've had access to a computer in two months. I put up a new blog post if you're looking for more info. At the moment, I have no means to do any writing
1333045 It's fine man, it was actually supposed to be a compliment cause this is in my top 5 fics, it'll get done when it gets done.
... blank update?
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I think it was to fix Chapter 3 somehow going missing.
Damn you FIMfiction! Got all excited that this updated...
And I got so excited for this thing too. Oh well, glad to see that you're well at least .
I was reading this fic for a while and I've got to say, it's the best I've read so far. I'm disappointed it's on hiatus but I did have a very good time reading it and I look forward to when it starts getting worked on again. Take your time and make it just as awesome as the other chapters, we can wait.
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It's listed as 'on hiatus', but I am, in fact, back. Huzzah! Work will resume as soon as I can. Glad you're enjoying it so much
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Hooray, I am ecstatic~ No seriously, I am. That's awesome, lookin' forward to a new chapter soon then.
I am absolutely in love with this story, darling .Very well written and I love the nice long chapters.. Was sad to see it in hiatus but then felt better when I scrolled threw the comments and saw that you were continuing the story.. Its definitely worth the wait and I cant wait for more! I know thats a double negative but its true.. I can wait but its soo hard.. Anyways, will be waiting.
"In fact, you occasionally remind Rarity that she should feel exceptionally lucky to have bother of her parents in her life, because you never did."
I realize this an old chapter but the mistake reaally bugs me. Amazing story by the way! i love it so much.
Stop making me Google things!!!
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Well, you know what's coming now.
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2609921 you're doing gods work, by looking up those images, lucky.
I don't want to be "that guy" but I'm about to,a polygamist relationship involves marrage, a polyamorus relationship is one that involves more than
one individual in a dateing relationship.
*sniff* ... it's... *sniff*... so beautiful...
I'm dying from the sweetness...
Oh please tell me the cheerleader outfit is an actual thing later on in the story....