Celestia is gone. The Capitol remains as the leaders of Equestria. Equestria is now divided into 12 districts, and every year the Capitol takes one mare and one stallion from each district to be trained and then to be entered into the Pony Games.
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Been done before.
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So has HiE sotries, but that doesn;t eman they can't be done again. As long as the writer makes it unique its fine.
This has some pretty good potential! I can't wait to see it continued! It looks very well done so far.
Great job on making a good MLP version of one of my favorite books. 
I gotta admit this kept me interested! I loved The Hunger Games and I can't wait to see what you do with them being ponies! (That probably sounded bad)
You've earned a watch and fave!!
Hmmm... i might just take a look at the hunger games now....
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Actually, it's a fairly solid cross-over.
The exposition is coming way too thick, but it's not awful.
In my opinion its fine, but it uses to much from the book.
Wow I am surprised about how it came out. Very good job. Interesting ominous with a personal (to the characters) situation.
I noticed some problems, mostly things along the lines of
, which should be would have to live through, by the way. You need a proofreader pretty badly.
That being said, I can't imagine a capital allowing for one race to have that much of an advantage. They'd probably make it themed for a randomly selected race, disallowing any predictable advantages.
Remember the golden rule about crossovers. Do not paraphrase the subject, make a new storyline with new character ideas and personalities. You were on the right steps with a war and Celestia's death, but what about Luna, or Viceroy Cadance? And yes, that's what she technically is. Don't question me.
Overall, I would have to remain neutral on this right now. Too much tell and too little show. Too many plot-holes. Too many mistakes. I am refraining from downvoting because it's only the first chapter. I'll read the next few chapters to see if anything gets better, but if it doesn't then I'll downvote and stop reading. Nothing against you or the idea. It just lacked the 'ooomf' that stories need in their first chapter to catch a readers attention and set it apart from the rest. Ta Ta!
Just out of interest, did you take a paragraph from another Pony Games crossover and edit it?
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/15114/1/the-pony-games/chapter-1
The other author's version:
Your version:
Actually, on closer inspection, most of the chapter seems rather similar.
Hmmm, this is gonna be interesting. Crank these chapters out quickly please!
3039309 it's the same person with a new account.
I got mad when i saw it too, but she explained what was going on.
I really liked this. Hope you continue the good work. Indeed I liked it so much, I made a reading of it
Hope you don't mind 
Can you update please? This seems promising and i'd really like to see what happens!
I have a couple of questions honestly.
Like what happens to Spike after they took him away.
And what happened to Princess Luna?