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Felixdragoon


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Revakheyvkaal is one of the last of dragonkind. The Dovahkiin has been hunting dragons to near-extinction.

There was a Thu'um he was once taught, however; A shout that could tear through space and time itself, opening a portal to unknown, distant lands. He knew that the Dragonborn was hot on his trail, and as the dragon's numbers continued to drop, he knew that he had no choice if he wished to survive.

But, in his haste to leave, he fails to realize the true danger of travelling to someplace previously unknown...


A Skyrim/MLP crossover.
Disclaimer: Skyrim belongs to Bethesda studios and MLP:FiM belongs to Hasbro.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 76 )

HUUUUAAAANNNNGHHH Awesome.

this....I like:twilightsmile: give us some moar!!!

Fus Ro Da! I love this! I'm both a brony and a skyim-a-holic, so this is just too good. :pinkiehappy:

Felixdeadeye, on account for those who don't know who dovahkiin or the dovah are, you should've provided some more background on Skyrim. Otherwise those who don't know or know little would be slightly confused with the story. Of course, you've probably already thought about that before the writing the story.... oh yeah and I think you should put the thumes in bold, looks better that way, trust me:twilightsmile: other than that this story seems good so far, and I hope my feedback helped

You have captured my attention. Now, onto the hard part: Keeping me sated.
Liked and faved, waiting to see where this goes.

Not bad. Just work a little harder on the pacing and you're golden.

Bold the Shouts and when he's talking in the Dovah pleaseeee ^_^

Also, this is the first fiction of this kind I've seen so far. Good on you!


P.S. - Maybe pace it a little bit slower, it seems to be moving a little too fast.

2040755 You my friend are missing out. There is a good one here called Alduin Unbound.

Also, I would recommend adding more dragon language. It just sounds odd. Every time we hear a dragon talk in Skyrim it's always a few words for mortals while rest of it is dragon language. If you want, I can also suggest Thuum.org. They are making a veritable dictionary for the dragon language. Always working on it and updating what is already there. Again, add in more dragon language where it should be, otherwise it's just a regular dragon that doesn't know his own kinds tongue.

Hmmm, a tale involving a Dragon from Skyrim in Equestria? Most interesting, though I wonder if he will encounter Spike?

If he does, will he teach him? And are Dragons in Equestria capable of even learning Thu'um? All these and more have me bursting at the seems!:pinkiehappy:

Keep up the good work, I look forward to more!

well, that was surely nice. i just hope he wouldn't actually kill ponies. at least, good ones. he could eat Sombra for all i care. not Chryssy, though, she's hot.

MOAR this is wonderfull i hope you can keep this one up

Really liking this! Seems like it's been the only chapter for a while, hope there's more! =D

NEED UPDATE! :flutterrage:
Drun laas back to this story! :flutterrage:

THIS. IS. GLORIOUS!

3235465 When I decide to stop playing skyrim and write about it, probably.

A horrible case of A.D.D and a lack of inspiration tends to destroy any chance of me writing, so I'm hunting for inspiration.

That, and I'm planning with a friend (Who's not a brony (He doesn't suspect a thing...)) how to get dragon priests involved in the story, without destroying the story plot.

I apologize, fellow dragon lover.

3253857 it's cool dova. I can wait. Also, there's this one fan fix whose name I can't remember. 7 humans(all bronies Or peagasisters) are transported into Equestria by Chaos, a version of Discord who plays for keeps. In that version, Celestia and Luna are wives, not sisters. You know it?

First the blades, and then the dragonborn, had left me with a bitter resentment of all mortal kind.

I have no sympathy. You brought it upon yourself. I think the dragon that teaches the Greybeards openly acknowledges that and has no sympathy for his species's possible extinction for that very reason.

3503318 And yet the Blades still want you to kill Paarthurnax, even though he, With Kynareth, first taught mortal kind the power of the thu'um.

After all you do for them, too, it's just not enough.

But not all dragon kind is bad; Paarthurnax is a good guy. Odahviing and Duhrneviir are just loyal to you because you bested them and freed them in some way.

Dragons came before mortals, remember: the mortals were just enslaved, so they killed all the dragons.

'Cept Alduin, of course. And Paarthurnax.

But, this begs the question:

If Paarthurnax repented and reformed into a good guy, then how many other Dovah, with good intentions, fell to the Dragonborn's blade?

If Paarthurnax repented and reformed into a good guy, then how many other Dovah, with good intentions, fell to the Dragonborn's blade?

I'm guessing none. After all, the dragonborn generally knows where the dragons he hunts are because they, y'know, attacked a town or city.

Although, that technically comes from rumors by NPCs, so it could be exaggerations when the dragon didn't actually bother them at all... meh, it'd make my head hurt.

Good point!

Dii mal malkey, zu'u nuft wah tovok fos fahdonein vust kos, erei hi pah ofuun niil luh voth zey.Saak undoro, thon do moor, brit zahreik, faithful ahrk mul, sharing kindness niil vahk stig, ahrk luh imzik nii pah geblaan.Dii mal malkey, zeyda wah mindok hi los dii rinik pruzaan fahdon.
The my little pony theme song in dovahzul (dragon language)

No translation for sharing or kindness:applecry:

3690438 It's because the Dovah don't share and have no use for kindness.

Which is probably the reason that we kill the dragons so vehemently...

I wonder if the Dovah have a word for 'Rude'?

It was 54 weeks ago that he was sitting in his hole looking at fimfiction.net tell me it aint sooooo... that he hasn't updated at all...
Based off of a string of lyrics from the song "15 Beers Ago"

3928574 The thing about my inspiration is that it encourages me to write more stories rather than more of a story.

It's bad, man... But, I'm looking at Skyrim again, and I'm feeling it... But, I'm not promising anything other than that this story will never be cancelled.

Also, I've been thinking about events that will happen in this story, and I'll only say that Odahviing the Betrayer will be making an appearance.

3930528 *Runs Around In Circles Yelling w00t*

no word for rude either

I take it this is the ending where the Dragonborn killed Paarthurnax.

4629569 I'm trying to keep it as vague as possible- stormcloak or imperial, dawnguard or vampire, any class or race... the dragonborn will be mentioned to but not specified, sort of like a 'many years later' of the reader's character.

It'll focus on the dragons, primarily, and I probably won't have any 'back to Skyrim' scenes, seeing as how a few decisions are quite... damaging, to Nirn.

4631663 still, I don't like the "betray the Greybeards to the Blades" ending that's obviously happening here. Is that the ending you choose?

4634670 A pitifully small amount of dragons exist, I'm planning on having Odahviing make an appearance at some point or another.

I'm personally more fond of the greybeards, but I know not everybody is.

4635047 I don't see why people are against them. They're awesome. BTWW, speaking of the number of dragons, there is no way Paarthurnax was the only dragon who rebelled and joined the mortals. What happened to the others? I very much doubt Paar was the only survivor.

4639488 The three dragons who assist you in-game do so because you need their help-

Paarthurnax guides you to the elder scroll, and assists you in defeating Alduin.

Odahviing flies you to Alduin's stronghold.

Duhrneviir let you leave the soul cairn, even though he could have fought you for an eternity, because he was impressed by your strength and wanted freedom from the soul cairn.

I'm planning on having two factions of dragons:

Those loyal to the dragonborn, led by Odahviing, and the stray dragons still wandering.

Revakheyvkaal is one of the last of the stray dragons, and he will have a showdown with the loyal at some point or another. I'm planning on flinging in new, mismatched shouts to mix things up a little.

4644537 ah. Makes sense. By the way, don't you think there should be a shapeshifting shout? So a dragon could pretend to be mortal?

4646361 Dragons are too proud, they'd never stoop so low as to pretend to be mortal. Besides, they're the children of Akatosh, built in his image, and thus divine.

However, escaping a threat to fight another day would be an acceptable loss.

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Gosh you know what would be swell? If this story updated.
That would be great.
Fantastic even.

It would be really great if this story UPDATED, because - NO OFFENSE - I am getting REALLY FUCKING TIRED OF WAITING FOR THIS AMAZING STORY TO UPDATE.

I MEAN, IT HAS BEEN SUCH A LONG TIME, THAT I THOUGHT "OH HEY, ITS BEEN A REALLY LOOOOOONG TIME SINCE THAT REALLY SUPER COOL STORY SHOWED UP, MAYBE I COULD EXPECT AN UPDATE SOON", AND THAT WOULD BE A PERFECTLY LOGICAL THING TO THINK, BUT NOPE. NOTHING.

NOTHING.

But you know, on the other hand maybe its all okay! Maybe you've been writing this whole time and you'll have a nice big bunch of chapters for us all to read and enjoy once you update! Right? Right!? YES! YES THAT'S IT!

YOU'RE JUST MAKING TONS OF PROGRESS AND I BET YOU ALREADY HAVE ALL THE CHAPTERS WRITTEN AND EVERYTHING IS NICE AND ORDERED UP AND YOU'RE JUST MAKING US WAIT AND WORRY THAT THE STORY HAS BEEN ABANDONED AND YOU'RE JUST PLAYING SOME SICK JOKE AND OH MY GOD PLEASE DON'T LEAVE US WE NEED YOU AND YOUR GLORIOUS WORDS WHAT CAN WE DO TO APPEASE YOU

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But yeah, I just thought I'd come by and check on you, y'know, to see how you're doing.
Love the story by the way! Keep it up!

4808506 I've gotten the next five-ish chapters written, I'm just trying to repair the massive hole in the plot before I post them.

4809913
Wait... How many words?

I dunno if five one-thousand word chapters would satisfy me, if the first chapter is any indication.

4827515 I've gotten back into skyrim, and if inspiration's anything to go by is say 2-4 might be about 2500 words, each.

Possibly more, probably less, after it goes through the sucide run of editing.

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