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Ace Combat: Gryphon Assault

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Landon

Landon #1 · Feb 23rd, 2012 · · · Skirmish at Sea ·

The wording seems rushed and the flow is missing in dialog. I'd suggest opening the vocabulary a bit and letting the characters conversation flow. It just feels, odd.

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