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Since time immemorial, there have been hellish creatures that secretly prey upon the living of Equestria, However, Darkness exists because Light exists, and Light exists because Darkness exists. To combat this threat, a group of warriors was formed - they gave their very lives so ponies can live without fear and look forward to a brighter future, yet their feats and sacrifices were untold, for like the enemies they hunt, they too, operate in secrecy. Yet, despite their efforts, they cannot fully eradicate their enemies; if anything, there seems to be more and more of those monsters as time passed...

Today, one of the most talented amongst the warriors is none other than Twilight Sparkle. But how did she get involved with such a fate? Can she keep her secret mission from her new friends? Most importantly, can she learn the magic of friendship, and fulfil her dark responsibility at the same?

Inspired mostly by the Japanese series Garo, and some ideas/elements taken from Samurai Sentai Shinkenger & Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha.

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Comments ( 8 )

MY INTREST! IT HAS BEEN PEAKED!
Looking forward to the next update.

This must meant that his rescuer is another unicorn

should be mean. And I don't think you can use must, since that's present and the story is in past tense.

He silenced

Maybe 'he fell silent'?

being pointed at

This is a really bad use of passive voice.

Only time will tell if this unexpected element is a blessing

This is pretty wonky, tense wise.

Despite all those (somewhat avoidable) mistakes, I like the story so far. It's actually a lot better than some you can find on fansites. It just tickles my inner editor, since it's both good enough to spend some time on and flawed enough to need that time.

Did you ran it through a spell-check? I'd guess so, form the type of mistakes.

3002928 Thank you very much for your comment. I'll edit & correct them soon, and will keep your advice in mind when I write the new chapters.

3002920 Thanks.

Wow, a nice part of Canterlot and then a dirty, nasty part of Canterlot, reminds me of Omaha, except that the nice downtown area is surrounded to both the north and south by slums. Great story, looking forward to the next chapter!

Looked up Garo in the search bar... :rainbowdetermined2:

See this story at the start of the results... :rainbowhuh:

Sees that it also has Shinkenger and Nanoha added in... :unsuresweetie:

Read the first chapter... :pinkiegasp:

Only one this to say...:pinkiehappy:

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.... This isn't complete. It's missing ONE thing and one thing only........ SAVIOR IN THE DARK.

Okay having fully read this..... YOU SIR GET ALL OF THE LIKES AND FAVS FROM ME. THIS.... THIS IS WHAT I'VE BEEN SEARCHING FOR! Now I hope to see some awesome fights with the Terrors and maybe a chance to see Zero soon! Maybe go a bit unique and have a Terror that wants to change and becomes an ally.

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