I kinda get what you mean by the rushed feeling. But still damn great. I think it probly has something to do with all the action and running and such. And damn you for stopping it right there..... I wait with bated breath for the next part.
I think it feels rushed mostly because it's a fast read, it's fast pace, and that fact that it's a very thrilling chapter only increases that. If I were to really nitpick though, I would say describe a bit more. Rather than telling what happens when Twilight saves Spike from falling off the cliff, describe the actions.
It was a quick read. That's not really a bad thing, and I don't think it felt rushed, so much as resolved quickly. You could have elaborated on the search for Spike, or the fire he caused to fill out the narrative and build a bit more tension.
Other than a few typos it didn't seem too rushed. A few spots seemed kind of redundant/predictable, such as when Twilight kept helping Spike, but the chapter was overall a very good one. You're doing great with this story, please continue it soon.
Also: This chapter is what got the thumb-up from me, if that means anything after having read the first 5.
It felt somewhat rushed, only near the end of the chapter. A few of the scenes could have been elaborated a bit I think. Still, it was a great read. Thanks for writing it!
The only part that felt rushed was the chase scene and that's about it. Other than that, I absolutely love where this is going, Spike finally realizing Twilight's feelings. I can't wait for more!
I had a strange feeling while reading it. I wouldn't describe it as rushed, though. We had the first part with Pinkie finding Twilight, and the ponies starting their search for Spike. Next, we had the 'hunt', which was the biggest part — at least it felt that way. And, we had the revelation at the end, also a small part. So, even though this chapter has a short, romantic/dramatic climax, it's mostly centered arround action, which just feels fast. I think this sums it up... If I could interpretate that much in school my marks in German would be a lot better...
The resolutions in this chapter indeed came rather quickly, though not bad by any means, it would have made much more of an impact if you'd made spike come to the conclusion over the course of this, and maybe next chapter, rather than filling the end of this chapter with it.
You had a lot happening, but the pace did seem rushed. I recognize you can see the home stretch, but don't sprint, we'll keep pace with you while you jog.
That........was.........BEAUTIFUL!! When he scratched Twilight, I almost wanted to go in the story and SLAP THE EVER LOVING CRAP OUT OF HIM! BRAVO, GOOD SIR, BRAVO!
It didn't feel rushed, it felt like it was going at an urgent pace, which caused for much action, suspense, and drama. Loved it. There weren't THAT many typo's either...
i sayed it alot of times against others ''better a day to late than a hour to early'' take your time and think things over... nopony can tell you otherwise
kinda disappointed, not at the story though. With all the chasing I was hoping to have one repeat moment where he ran and she kept teleporting him back to her lol.
Now that you point it out, it probably seems rushed, because of how many obstacles you put into the chase. But it was still a badass chapter like the rest. Really looking forward to Twilight and Spike... Well you get it.
Felt very very rushed also I think you need to make a point to mention that spikes head is pointed and stuck in a way that he can't burn the webs just saying with out that huge hole in the story.
About god damn time for an update.
And It was good.
Just don't take so long for the next one, please.
SPIDERSES!
Awesome chapter as always.
I kinda get what you mean by the rushed feeling. But still damn great. I think it probly has something to do with all the action and running and such. And damn you for stopping it right there..... I wait with bated breath for the next part.
Yaaaaaay. :3
I did get the tinyest feeling that it was rushed, but it was still well done and a thrill to read, can't wait till inspiration strikes again
I think it feels rushed mostly because it's a fast read, it's fast pace, and that fact that it's a very thrilling chapter only increases that. If I were to really nitpick though, I would say describe a bit more. Rather than telling what happens when Twilight saves Spike from falling off the cliff, describe the actions.
Only thing that sucks about this is how much I now want more.
Well, it felt rushed for me because I noticed a lot of typos. Otherwise, good stuff. The next chapter is gunna be hawt
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Now now, you should know me better than that. I always throw in some unexpected twist somewhere...
It was a quick read. That's not really a bad thing, and I don't think it felt rushed, so much as resolved quickly. You could have elaborated on the search for Spike, or the fire he caused to fill out the narrative and build a bit more tension.
But that's just my two bits.
Other than a few typos it didn't seem too rushed. A few spots seemed kind of redundant/predictable, such as when Twilight kept helping Spike, but the chapter was overall a very good one. You're doing great with this story, please continue it soon.
Also: This chapter is what got the thumb-up from me, if that means anything after having read the first 5.
It felt somewhat rushed, only near the end of the chapter. A few of the scenes could have been elaborated a bit I think. Still, it was a great read. Thanks for writing it!
Huzzah! the love has been realized.
A bit rushed yes, enough content for maybe a chapter and a half.
The only part that felt rushed was the chase scene and that's about it. Other than that, I absolutely love where this is going, Spike finally realizing Twilight's feelings. I can't wait for more!
433766 I look forward to the craziness.
I had a strange feeling while reading it. I wouldn't describe it as rushed, though. We had the first part with Pinkie finding Twilight, and the ponies starting their search for Spike. Next, we had the 'hunt', which was the biggest part — at least it felt that way. And, we had the revelation at the end, also a small part. So, even though this chapter has a short, romantic/dramatic climax, it's mostly centered arround action, which just feels fast. I think this sums it up... If I could interpretate that much in school my marks in German would be a lot better...
Anyway, great story
(I hope that they'll end up in bed :P)
in the words of the pegasus some call snowflake "YEEEEEEAAAAH"
Can't wait for the next chapter!
...Why didn't Spike burn the web? Is he stupid?
when it got to the spider cave part, i immeidiatly thought of minecraft.
Finally!
I love this.
The resolutions in this chapter indeed came rather quickly, though not bad by any means, it would have made much more of an impact if you'd made spike come to the conclusion over the course of this, and maybe next chapter, rather than filling the end of this chapter with it.
Looking forward to the next one.
You had a lot happening, but the pace did seem rushed. I recognize you can see the home stretch, but don't sprint, we'll keep pace with you while you jog.
That........was.........BEAUTIFUL!!
When he scratched Twilight, I almost wanted to go in the story and SLAP THE EVER LOVING CRAP OUT OF HIM!
BRAVO, GOOD SIR, BRAVO!
"He then turned his mind to only a few moments ago when he persecuted her of using him as a slave..."
uh
Spike... LOL
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no but srsly, when he realised WHAT kind of mistake he made, it made me
there was an update...........and it was good
hey that was pretty good.
don't i recognize you from some-...
oh crap, you're princess molestia aren't you?
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lolyup
CLIFFHANGERS
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
Another brilliant chapter!
Aw c6 is sad
It didn't feel rushed, it felt like it was going at an urgent pace, which caused for much action, suspense, and drama. Loved it. There weren't THAT many typo's either...
it wasn't rushed at all man. DAMN STREAK IS THERE ANYTHING YOU WONT SAY?!?!?! WHOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!
And then, Spike became a man.
Swag.
i sayed it alot of times against others ''better a day to late than a hour to early'' take your time and think things over... nopony can tell you otherwise
Ron Weasly hates spiders.
I hate spiders too.
We all hate spiders.
ugh...
kinda disappointed, not at the story though. With all the chasing I was hoping to have one repeat moment where he ran and she kept teleporting him back to her lol.
Oh god. Cliffhanger! It kills me! Must read next part (robot mode activated) crush. Kill. Destroy. Swag.
Not rushed on the least he could be anger an running away more but it was perfect!
Now that you point it out, it probably seems rushed, because of how many obstacles you put into the chase. But it was still a badass chapter like the rest. Really looking forward to Twilight and Spike... Well you get it.
cooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool
i would think she'd drop the bags after getting into the chase
2852433 there was a book in those bags, Twilight dropping a book just isn't going to happen :P
Felt very very rushed also I think you need to make a point to mention that spikes head is pointed and stuck in a way that he can't burn the webs just saying with out that huge hole in the story.
Spike doesn't deserve to "get the girl" in this one, not after drawing blood on Twilight twice.
I guess you can say spike and twilight nowith have
(Sunglasses)
Bad blood
Yeeeeeeaaaaaahhhhh
Ehh, an episodes 20 minutes what are you gonna do?
He drew in a quick breath, and blew his fire on the tip, careful not to ignite it and send it off to the princess.
I like that little detail, describing how his fire works.