Jasper smiled in satisfaction as the dust billowed into the air. He checked the gauntlet and raised an eyebrow, mild amounts of magical steam were rising from his hand which he made a note of for later. He glanced at the mixture of shock and anger plastered on all of the ponies faces. The royal guards immediately surged in force toward the human who merely laughed with mirth and sent out a red wave from his hand which effectively grounded the pegasi and petrified the unicorns. The ponies of Ponyville backed away at the display as his smile grew.
Without turning to face them he coldly stated, “Don’t even think about it.”
Twilight magical grip on the Elements bag did not waver, “Girls, formation.”
Jasper whipped around and faced them, “Yes that’s right blast me, turn me to stone, maybe incinerate me. But answer me this,” his smile turned to a knowing smirk, “how fast can the elements fire before I do something?”
Twilight was frightened by the comment but quickly regained herself, “That won’t happen, what makes you so sure you’ll win?”
Jasper pointed with his thumb behind him at the fountain, “I’ve beaten your princesses and bested Sombra, though he wasn’t much of a threat to begin with. So now all I have to do is start dealing with another annoying threat,” his gaze turned cold as ice, “by destroying you.”
“No, you won’t.”
“So,” Jasper chuckled, “enjoy your flight princess sun butt?”
Celestia narrowed her eyes as did Luna when Jasper turned to face them, “You know the part I think that burns you up the most? It’s that a mere mortal, me, deceived an all knowing goddess so easily.”
Celestia’s tone was decisive and blunt, “Be that as it may, I brought you here and it’s time I send you back to where you came from.”
As Celestia charged her horn Jasper inhaled then proclaimed powerfully, “I INVOKE THE PLATINUM GAMBIT!”
The silence that followed was so instant and final that one could hear a pin drop. Celestia inhaled sharply through her teeth as did Luna, Twilight on the other hoof gasped in shock.
Applejack glanced at Twilight, “What the hay does that mean?”
Twilight stared somberly as the princesses approached the human, “The Platinum Gambit is one of the oldest laws in Equestrian history that’s still in practice. During the time of Princess Platinum’s rule, there were some disputes over her methods and laws she used. So having enough, she decided to implement the Platinum Gambit.”
Rarity was slightly confused, “But why did such a law stop the Princess?”
Twilight sighed, “Not only is it a law, it’s also a declaration for a duel. See, Princess Platinum though reformed and more caring was still prideful. The law dictates that anypony can declare it to contest the Equestrian throne.”
Rainbow’s eyes widened, “So you’re saying.”
“Yes,” Twilight gazed at the annoyed expressions of the current royals, “Once it’s been declared the present rulers can either accept or decline. The loser is banished from Equestria whereas the winner remains the present ruler,” she then shivered, “or the challenger takes all royal status and power onto themselves and is crowned the new ruler. Worst of all is the fact that only one gambit can be claimed every one thousand years, the last being when Celestia banished Nightmare Moon.”
Fluttershy looked to her friend, “Why has no pony declared it up until now?”
Twilight glanced at Fluttershy, “Would YOU want to fight the princesses two on one?”
Fluttershy nodded slowly, “Point taken.”
Rainbow Dash snorted, “PRINCESS! YOU DON’T HAVE TO FIGHT HIM! LET US TAKE CARE OF HIM!”
Jasper nodded, “She’s right. You don’t HAVE to.”
Luna narrowed her eyes, “What are you saying?”
Jasper shrugged, “Nothing, nothing at all. Say for the sake of argument you DO decline, true you banish me back to Earth. But your missing one small detail,” he raised his arm, “THIS won’t come off unless I am the one who removes it willingly remember? Think of all the damage I could do on Earth with this small stone and no regrets.”
Celestia shut her eyes in thought causing Luna to stare at her sister in shock, “Sister, surely you are not considering this!?”
“I’m afraid he has our hooves in a bind dear sister,” Celestia glared into the smug humans stare, “Very well, I Princess Celestia of Equestria accept your gambit Jasper Montgomery under the condition upon your loss you shall relinquish your gauntlet.”
Luna stood beside her sister, “I accept your gambit as well.”
Jasper nodded, “Very well. Let the game begin.”
Jasper then slammed his gauntlet upon the ground as a wall of solidified red air sprung up around them. The top then bubbled and effectively turned it into a dome.
Jasper smiled, “I knew your emotions and overall personality would not allow you to let me leave Equestria with the gauntlet and the Gem of Ages, accepting the gambit was inevitable.”
Luna snarled at the human, “So you think you can out think us? Gem of Ages or no, we both have eons of magical prowess under our proverbial belt! Do you think raw power will defeat us?”
“Oh I won’t use force,” Jasper cracked his knuckles, “in fact I’ll count to ten and then I’ll win.”
Celestia and Luna fired two blasts at the pompous human. Jasper was consumed by the magic as the sisters did not let up. But both sisters visibly shook when they heard a voice in the smoke which was steadily rising.
“One, Two, Three, Four.”
Luna and Celestia gasped as twin red beams surged down their magic beams and smashed into their horns.
Jasper slowly approached speaking in a monotone voice, “Five.”
Luna rose up and was engulfed in a massive glow which moved into her horn. Jasper slowed his pace as the princess of the night’s eyes turned entirely white and glowed with arcane fury. Luna then discharged a blast which could only be described as the night sky herself being brought down to Earth. Jasper raised an eyebrow as the red gem flashed; time around him seemed to slow to a crawl whereas the princesses perceived him moving faster than possible. He zoomed over to Luna and touched the tip of her horn with the gauntlet.
“Six, Seven, Eight,” he was in front of Celestia as he grabbed her by her horn, “nine.”
The dome lifted as Jasper backed away from the princesses who began to scream. Red glowing cracks began to seep over them originating from where Jasper had touched them. Soon, one final yell was heard as both monarchs erupted into red fire which spread fast around their bodies.
Jasper then uttered one word as the smoke cleared from the flames, “Ten.”
Both Princesses now stood with permanent looks of horror on their faces, frozen in black stone. Jasper glanced at the princesses then at the looks of anguish upon everypony’s faces. He then broke out into a fit of maniacal laughter. Twilight ran past the human who paid her no mind. The alicorn hugged the petrified leg of her once beloved teacher and wept. All the other ponies wept with her as Jasper briskly walked to the statues and stared down at the alicorn with a stoic expression.
Twilight looked up into the eyes of the one she had once called friend, “W-Why….,” she then yelled out in anguish, “WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS?!”
Jasper regarded her with absolutely no pity in his eyes, “A lesson must be learned here Twilight. A lesson that the six of you will all learn, now, bow to me.”
Twilight’s look then became venomous, “We will never bow to you. You…MONSTER!!”
Jasper stood and addressed Ponyville, “Citizens of Ponyville. Bow to your new king.”
All the ponies looked to each other than reluctantly followed suit all except for the elements of harmony who remained defiant which Jasper look at with mild annoyance, “I shall enjoy breaking you all. When that is done, you WILL kneel before me.”
Jasper then raised his hood and then casually stated, “Now if you’ll excuse me I have some royal duties to preform,” the gem glowed bright and King Jasper vanished in a flash of red.
Twilight stared at the ground in defeat but then became stoic, “Girls, find Spike and meet me at the library. We have some planning to do.”
*Eye twitch*
"Too... AWESOME!"
*Faint*
Magnificent
Sexcellent.
Fantastic!
I like this take on the HiE idea. Very much so, indeed. I don't know why no one though of making the human the villain before. This is great, regardless.
Do not, I repeat, do not make him reform. He has to stay evil
Nice.
DAMN! THAT.WAS.EPIC!
King Jasper...
Needs a suffix.
Maybe Jasper the Golden?
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There are some "human are villain stories". Like the story Human.
Silly Luna, we all know well that you can't out think Light Yaga- I mean Jasper.
Well.
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I like
3222422 Could you link to it? I can't find it using search since the word human is used so much.
What about Discord? Surely he's not just gonna let Jasper wander around like he owns the place.
Also all they had to do was cut his arm off and they win, but noooo they have to be the good guys. Dumbasses.
But was is this "lesson" he speaks of?
3222519 That an average human properly motivated can defeat gods?
That the greatest acts of good can come from those seen as evil?
Learning from the mistakes of others will lead to success?
3222414Does anti-hero count?
That battle was short, brutal and efficient. There is only one word to describe such a remarkable battle:
I'm not sure what Jasper plans to do now, but I hope he doesn't regret taking his eyes off of the Elements of Harmony for long. There's a damn good chance they'll start up a rebellion, and with neighboring countries, and powerful adversaries like Discord, Princess Cadance and Queen Chrysalis still around, Jasper will have to plan cautiously.
I would also love a quick story on the Gem Of Ages. Something so powerful feels like there should be a drawback to its use.
3222539 Humans, we can troll jarder than discord drunk off his behind on a saturday night on april fools day!!
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Gem of Ages will be explained. In the next chapter no less, that was my plan
Also the reason i'm not showing Jasper's inmost thought process is simple, it would ruin the suprise.
3222519 Nothing is true, everything is permitted?
Thank you, Assassin's Creed.
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Here
Also, there is a group called the good HiE list which is about listing ones they deem good. My be worth a look.
Dont let Jasper go soft or nice again he must stay awsomeley evil
Well, I'll admit it. I was wrong. Instead of playing a key role in defeating Sombra and eventually learning the meaning of friendship, he played a key role in defeating Sombra and became the most over powered characters to walk the fimfiction site and not be an alicorn. But there are several steps you're missing that would easily result in Jasper's defeat.
Step 1: Obtain a blunt and sharp instrument.
Step 2: Use either a teleporting Unicorn, a Pegasus that can move at impossibly fast speeds, or a reality defying Earth Pony (preferably a pink one) and apply force using blunt object to back of human's head.
Step 3: Use sharp object to detach limb currently using gauntlet so that it cannot be used.
Step 4: Either use sharp or blunt object on human until he is no longer breathing.
Step 5: Wonder how human managed to construct an elaborate piece of equipment in under a day using metal that shouldn't be allowed to public, and obtain a jewel that just so happens holds the power to defeat both Princesses and why no one else has gone for it.
I'm going to take a lot of flak for this, but I'm fine with that. This is getting ridiculous.
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I agree with this man
Honestly this went downhill fast
nice job using that old law lol.
and now the princesses are in stone, ha!
this is the only story where i love this!
i'm being reminded of Code Geass for some reason. I think it's because while Lelouche was seen as the greatest villain in his world it was all to work towards a much greater plan for peace. I don't think Jasper has that exact concept in mind but there is definitely something much MUCH bigger going on than "Oh Imma be da cool evil guy!" I have to say I'm very much looking forward to more of this. Now.....*reclines in chair, adjusting monocle, smoking a pipe, and wearing a red and black silk robe*.....proceed.
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Really, it wouldn't be in the spirit of the show and do you really think any of want to be murderers?
Anyways, they're probably terrified to attack him after this.
I have only one reaction to this.
Now to see the reign of terror.
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None of them aside from the princesses or Twilight knew what the Gem of Ages was.
Full frontal assault against a weapon you don't know is a surefire way to wind up dead.
Also, no one went for it because, like Nightmare Moon and the Elements of Harmony, it was just a legend. No one aside from Twilight gives legends any mind.
3222739 Au contraire. Remember Nightmare Moon? Blown to bits. Discord? Turned to stone, a fate worse than death. The Changelings? You can't believe that all of them survived the trip, not including the ones who were indoors when hit with the spell. Sombra? Same as Nightmare Moon. Noticing a pattern here? Anyways, I included step 4 for my reasons. It is optional, highly encouraged, but not mandatory.
3222760 Strange that a being, who has never even been to Equestria before, would believe in the legends then. And did if you refer to my post from earlier, you'll notice the key words 'teleport, fast, and reality defying' in there. Get behind him, and then smack him upside the head.
I also find it funny you should mention legends seeing as how they had been constantly assaulted by beings from legends. The phrase for the day would be 'Fool me once, shame on you. Fool me twice, shame on me.' While not the brightest bunch around, being assaulted so many times would convey a message across. So tell me, why would a human believe in their legends while they would not?
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He would believe in their legends because he watched the show in the first chapter.
It would be genre blindness to not look at the legends.
Also, Jasper knows what the ponies can do, having watched the show. The ponies don't know what Jasper can do.
For all they know, he can shoot lasers out of his back at a moment's notice.
I hope he gets what's coming to him
3222785 So, you're saying because he watched the show it would stand that he would hold greater belief in pony legend than the ponies themselves even though they're their own legends and have had situations that proved those legends were real? Right, that makes perfect sense.
And considering Celestia and Luna apparently have the power to view into alternate realities, do you honestly expect them to bring a being with super powers to their realm? They brought him because he didn't have powers, only a very angst mind set and a desire to be a douche by wrecking their world. The only reason why he was able to get the upper hand was because they underestimated because he had no powers. Well, excluding his ability to craft a three week gauntlet with intricate detail in a single day but apparently they all posses that power otherwise they would have questioned on how he was able to make it so quickly.
All you're doing is grasping at straws, trying your hardest to defend an over powered OC which is confusing the hell out of me. People normally hate that with a passion, so how is this story gaining so many likes? Usually when someone makes a HiE story with the human being an angst no friend loser who is brought to Equestria to be taught the 'Magic of Friendship' people are mashing the dislike button.
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Ah, but Discord was already insane and Nightmare Moon was basically an over haul of emotions.
The Changelings had wings and could probably fly so we might see them in the Fanfic one day.
Sombra...well...he obviously wasn't dead until now. He was probably like a lich in the show.
You need to give him a way to avoid sharp objects and to shield against blunt force.
To quote another villain: "In the end you will always kneel."
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As you said yourself, legends have been popping up like crazy. He's seen the show, so he knows this. More importantly, there's less passage of time between each legend popping up for him than it is for the others, e.g. a few hours versus a few months.
It would be complete and utter idiocy to not think at least some could be true. Now, who is going to look up legends, and more importantly, look for them?
The Elements of Harmony, who already have artifacts of great power,
The ponies who have been relying on the Elements to save them,
or Jasper, the chaotic evil asshat?
Regarding jumping in on him since they all know him.
Celestia and Luna know what he can do. They're, however, immortal.
As people get older, they get more stuck in their ways, at least for humans. They're unlikely to come up with something sneaky like you're suggesting.
So the people who know what he can do can't jump him, and the people who don't, therefore won't.
Also, there has been passage of time. He's been there for an indefinite amount of time, as there was a camping trip between chapters 3 and 4.
His 'power' is the Gem of Ages, which we're going to find out about in a chapter. He likely won with surprise on his side. If it turns out that the Gem of Ages is just a ridiculously powerful artifact with no drawbacks, I'll withdraw my argument.
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Because it was clear from the beginning that Jasper was not here to make friends. It was clear that he was going to use genre savyness to out maneuver the ponies. Add to the fact that jasper isn't a loser (Intelligent, resourceful, and self- sufficient), he's not particularly angsty (just bored to tears), he isn't misanthropic, and he isn't friendless by choice (his friends don't accept him for who he is).
The story, in it's title, description, and first chapter set up who Jasper was and what this story was about. Then delivered. That's why it's getting likes.
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While I have no doubt that the steam is indicative of some draw back I still have to ask: What is the drawback of using Marvel's Infinity gauntlet?
I ask this because I don't see the current obsession with "drawbacks". Drawbacks just for the hell of weakening a character is a pointless story addendum. If the drawback is going to be a source of conflict and a relevant piece of story then yeah go for it, otherwise it's pointless. Really think, "drawbacks" to powers are something fimfiction writers preach because they are afraid of creating God Mode characters.
How many characters have actual drawbacks to their powers, like real drawbacks that matter?
Superman? Nope.
Green Lantern? Eh... not really, but it's debatable.
Blue Beetle?
Spawn? Not really.
Spider-man?
Doctor Strange?
Wolverine?
Iceman?
Storm?
Thanos?
Darkseid?
I can't think of anyone who wasn't annoyed when Spider- man said "OH NO, MY WEB SHOOTERS ARE EMPTY!" His web shooter limitation not only held no real story weight but everytime it happened the story had to be sidelined for the epic quest for web fluid.
There's a right and a wrong way to do a weakness (I guess that's what I'm saying). It's rarely done right. Nearly every super heroes weakness is dumb/ only comes up at plot convenience making it less of a weakness and more like a target specific gun. Cole MacGrath (Infamous) and Vergil Hawking (Static Shock) had the best examples of a real weaknesses. How do you deal with being weak against water in Detroit? on an Island? Vergil was always one busted fire hydrant from loss and rubber was just flatout F- you. Cole will straight up die if he gets soaked and can't touch cars or fire arms. Those weakness were directly related to the way the character developed (A readily abundant force of nature is hard to avoid).
If Jasper has a "weakness" it needs to be something that matters, and in the end make him stronger for learning to counteract it.
Anyway, on the topic of the Story.
He didn't play with them and was deadly efficient. He's proven that he has not problems with killing and that he means business. Jasper is shaping up into a no non- sense villain. I can't wait to see the chronicles of his reign and how they plan on stopping him.
some the best evil laugh for Jasper
3222841 There were some Changelings that didn't have wings.
For some reason, I see him making something similar to Professor Genki's Super Ethical Reality Climax, or Genki-bowl or something.
I also see him going al Zinyak on them and forcing them to re-live their worst fears and nightmares over and over in an endlass cycle.
3222901 The keyword in your statement being 'some'. What would the odds be the one he decides to believe in is about a gem that grants him the power to completely ignore Celestia's and Luna's power like it's nothing? And as for who would look up legends, who else but the one who looked up Nightmare Moon's legend in the first place? Twilight Sparkle? Besides, the Elements only work when the bearers are in unison and are all present. I didn't see them doing much good when Trixie made her encore appearance with the Amulet.
And that's a bit much to assume on Celestia and Luna, well, more on Luna than Celestia considering Luna was incapacitated for a thousand years. She comes from a rougher time and will not have fully adjusted yet.
Considering the Gem: it killed Sombra, altered time, and smacked both Celestia and Luna around like toys before turning them into stone. Unless there is some kind of major drawback to using the stone, it can't get any more broken than that.
3222923 If he was 'intelligent, resourceful, and self-reliant' he would have never lost his friends in the first place. Smart people can achieve great things, the smartest people know they can't achieve the greatest things by themselves. He is angsty because of his 'my friends are traitors attitude, I don't need anyone' attitude. And if you look closely, he is friendless by choice. He had those friends for years, one since childhood. It wasn't his friends accepting him for who he was, it was him refusing to be more proactive with his friends. All he's doing is having a pity party for himself. His friends tried everything to get him to be more active but he just curled up into his corner and said no and complain about how boring life is. That attitude of not being able to get up and do something, to not hang out with friends, to just lie there, is a state of depression. And his actions are that of a man who is ready to give up. The thought process going through his head right now is 'I don't care what happens to me anymore so might as well screw everything to hell before I go'. I know, I was there once. Of course the author is going to see my comment, deny all of this, and then go make changes to his story to help prove me wrong so I'm pretty much just wasting my time here.
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I'm guessing he just went for the Gem of Ages first because it's the one closest to him geographically. I mean, unless there's another artifact hidden in Ponyville, there won't be a closer one.
So, we've got Twilight looking up the legend. Why would she go looking for the gem? Why would she want it?
Chapter 5 established that she did know about it.
If everyone gasped, it would be because Ooo, shiny .
Just those 3 gasped, so it's somewhat safe to say they knew what it was.
If there's a significant drawback to using it, she wouldn't go after it.
Regarding the gem's (potential) drawback, I'm going to wait until the next chapter, where things will actually be explained, before rendering judgement.
My theory, fitting in with your "screw everything to hell before I go" idea, is that the gem's power is Cast from Lifespan. (Warning, TVTropes link)
3223023 I don't think there would be any others, unless of course there is some ruins hiding out in the Ever Free besides the old castle that only Jasper could find. I mean, he managed to find an all powerful jewel with a bare rumor to go on so it wouldn't surprise me.
As to why Twilight would look for it, well a few reasons really. One being the archeological value, considering it's an ancient artifact. Two being its power. After the Alicorn Amulet incident, I'm sure Twilight would find it prudent to make sure there weren't any other artifacts out there that could fall into the wrong hands/hooves/paws/etc. and be used for nefarious purposes. It's not the drawback of using it, it's what it would be used for. Sometimes legends have a habit of not mentioning side effects.
And it's best to cast judgment now because the author will see all of this and go about changing the chapters accordingly as to not lose his audience. It can't be life force considering he just took down a Unicorn that could rival Celestia and Luna, and both Princesses. The power to do so would have to be astronomical, and (if it required life energy) would severely reduce his life, from a standard human life span of eighty to a hundred to about, say thirty to forty years. If, no, WHEN Discord decides to show up then it's game over for him. To take on Discord would mean his death, or his defeat if Discord is feeling generous. I mean, if it could defeat Discord then why wasn't it used on him? Or for that matter Sombra as he clearly seemed to recognize it?
The lesson he wants them to learn is clearly simple: The world is not all sunshine and rainbows, and friendship can't fix everything.
I'm willing to bet Jasper has a weakness that is actually very easy to obtain and implement, but that will require serious personal compromises from the 6 necessitating a paradigm shift in how they view the world. It's basically a giant Xanatos Gambit that Jasper is running.
Either he wrecks the 6 and ruins their unwavering faith in the power of friendship, or he gets to be king. No matter the outcome, he wins.
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Well...the main six probably didn't know about them.
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Jasper has the time, and more importantly the motivation, to go through several books of legends to find something to be chaotic evil with. That motivation may be stupid, but it's certainly there.
As for Twilight getting it to stop others from getting it, would she really think her library is safer than a sealed basement? We only know Jasper went down there, I'd at least hope there were some defenses other than a code that was written in a book. The archaeological value reason would be discarded when she realizes that the public library is not the most secure of places to keep a powerful MacGuffin.
As for casting judgement, I prefer to go by what I can observe, rather than assumptions. If the author does change the plan to try to keep his audience, unless it was close to what he already had planned, it'll be glaringly obvious.
Why they didn't use it on Discord or Sombra? Well, there better be a damn huge drawback.