Chapter 20: Heavy Metal
One Week after the Element’s Banishment
One week. One week had passed the ponies of Equestria by when their saviors, and friends, had been sent away. Ponyville seemed faded in color, no smiles adorned the faces of anypony, and all was somber. Discords golden statue hadn’t helped in lifting anypony’s spirits at all. Many stared at the empty residences that the ponies they had all grown to love once lived, empty and bordered up. Only ghosts lingered within, the buildings akin to the tombs that they so aptly haunted. During this week however, many ponies who have thought of joining the rebellion, did just that. They were not the only ones, many others who have either been wronged by Jasper one way or another joined the rebellion or made their own cells to attack him. The griffin Princess supposedly did attack him, after planning for many, many days and nights. But many dismissed it as rumors.
However one thing did reach the ears of the public, Chrysalis was with foal. Nopony dare make a move against the queen lest they incur the wrath of her swarm or worse, her husband. The days had not been kind to the human though, his paranoia escalated and his temper threshold was much thinner. Many guards as well as the servants of the castle feared his wrath more than any enemy that could ever surface. Currently though, the human king was in negotiations with two ponies, twins to be precise.
“So, will you be able to build them? Money and supplies will not be a factor I assure you.”
Flim tapped his chin as Flam glanced over the plans once more, “Of course your highness, my brother and I are quite honored that you came to us first, isn’t that correct my dear brother?”
Flam nodded, “Indeed.”
Jasper shook his head, “Do you have an estimate of when they might be ready?”
Flam checked his hoof for dirt, “The first two hundred can be ready in four days.”
Jasper smirked, “Excellent, I’ll expect a full battalion within a fortnight.”
Flim smiled sneakily to his brother, “Well we could get a battalion done for you post haste, but we will need more money for an assemb-“
“Name your price,” he crossed his arms, “But you had best deliver, for your sakes.”
The Flim Flam brothers began to sweat under his gaze.
When Jasper left the two twins, Ignatius found him. He was carrying a scroll which he took without a word.
“What’s this?”
Ignatius cleared his throat, “It concerns the recent guerrilla style attacks on the supply lines and trade routes. Captain Sentry has narrowed it down to where they are most likely operating from.”
Jasper narrowed his eyes when he read the scroll, he ripped it to shreds in anger as he walked to the door, “Ready my carriage, bring the guards.”
*
Soon the guards were mobilized, and in a mere few hours, positioned outside a two floor forest cottage home to one Willowsong & Oak Heart. They were medicine ponies, and mother and father to one Fluttershy. Jasper was busy searching the interior of the home as the two frightened pegasai watched on. Jasper went into the cellar and produced a map of Equestria with marks on them.
“What is this?” his temper flared, “conspiring against me with those cretins?!”
Willowsong bowed in apology looking more like her daughter, “Please, we take in anypony from the cold and give them room and board, we were unaware of our daughter’s allegiance,” she grasped his boot, “have mercy my lord.”
Jasper gazed down at her with an even face, “Very well, but until such time your innocence is proven you shall both be under house arrest.”
Jasper left the home and shut the door behind him. He then grabbed a stick from a nearby wood pile and passed it to a confused Flash Sentry. Jasper then melted the knob and mechanism within as he then lit the log on fire.
He turned to Flash, “Burn it.”
Flash looked at the makeshift torch, “What?!”
“They are traitors to the kingdom and must be made examples of,” he pointed to the home, “burn it until its smolders.”
Flash looked at his king in disgust, “I was trained to protect ponies and Equestria, not kill them indiscriminately.”
Jasper looked at him with even rage, “But you were trained to follow ORDERS.”
Flash looked at Jasper then the home, with a look of defiance; he threw the log into a rain barrel. Jasper snorted at the display and raised the gauntlet; a stream of fire erupted through the windows and exploded throughout the top floor. Flash pushed past the mad king and pushed through the door. Discovering Willowsong and her husband, he quickly helped them out of the burning building. Flash smiled…only to be met with a hard kick to the muzzled. Blood flew wide as he dropped coughing to the ground, the red substance oozing from his nose. Jasper loomed over him with a glare of cold fury.
“If I ever see insubordination like that again,” his glare intensified, “I will have you hanged in the courtyard, you spineless coward.”
Jasper and the guards departed. Soon they all arrived back at the castle, Jasper retreating to the throne room. Flash and the guards went back to the barracks, the guards later congratulating him on his courage.
*
Two days past by before Flash appeared before the King…but he was out of uniform. Flash stood before the king as Ignatius looked on in interest.
“Jasper, the guards and I have been talking and we’ve got something to say to you.”
Jasper raised an eyebrow, “Really now?”
Flash opened his mouth to speak but Jasper cut him off, “You all quit. Is that it?”
Flash became shocked as Jasper leaned back with a smirk, “You know, for quite some time now I’ve been aware of a very interesting factor. The day the statues and Sunset escaped me, I took notice the guards were not where they were supposed to be. So, doing some extensive research I found that you and your troops literally let her not only escape with my prize, but a Babel Crystal.”
Flash backed up but then he smacked into something hard behind him which exhaled akin to a steam kettle. He turned and backed up in fear. A pony stood behind him, only difference was that the pony was made entirely of bronze metal with gold intricate lines adorning its surface. Its eyes were empty, excepted for a pair of burning red orbs of light. The wings of the pony spread with the sound of an unsheathing blades, each feather like a miniature sword.
“Like it? These are your replacements, I call them the Brazen Ponies,” he walked to it as the Brazen Pegasus followed it’s masters stride, “it thinks and is self-sufficient like anypony in this land, only difference is that its loyalty to me is undying. Best part, they don’t talk back.”
Flash gazed in horror, “They’re…monsters…”
“Fitting don’t you think?” he spoke the words with spite, “After all that’s what you all call me behind my back. Brazen #65,” the machine glanced at its master, “escort Flash Sentry and the Ex-Royal guard from the castle grounds, and inform your brothers and sisters.”
#65 nodded slowly and pushed Flash along his way as Jasper sat down with a smile.
*
The days that followed were recorded to date the bloodiest. Jasper’s new royal guard systematically hunted down any rebels that were found by the swarm’s intelligence network and cut them down. Streets, floors, and even roads ran red as the ponies of Equestria were not organized enough or skilled enough to fight against this new foe that seemed to come from nowhere. Equestria was then put under martial law, every town and city was watched by the automatons that neither slept nor ate. A curfew was in effect everywhere and any signs of rebellion were treated with hostile counter measures; Equestria was no longer a light happy place. It was now under a dark sky that was ruled by an even darker tyrant of a king.
Somewhere outside of Equestria.
Sunset glanced at her sleeping partners and the princesses as she gazed at the gold knife she was sharpening. Her eyes narrowed as a ruined Brazen Pony chassis laid upon a table in front of her.
“Twilight might not be able to do it,” she gazed out the window, “but as the old saying goes. To kill a monster, send a monster.”
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This story is an inspiration.
I can't help but thank you for writing it, and believe me, I don't thank a lot of people for anything.
Gold knife.......Welp,I can see how THAT will fail
wow.... im loving this more.
and its a bloody wasteland to i bet.
You're the best at this.
Simply fantastic can't wait for more.
Wait, GOLD knife? That won't help Twilight at all
So, Sunset is gonna be Iron Man?
Jasper is best human...
I don't know who to cheer for anymore.
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Kinda hard now eh?
Thing about using monsters to fight other monsters, you still have to deal with the beast you created. Jasper has done what every human is made to do, alter the landscape.
...I'm drawing parallels with Hunchback of Notre Dame...
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Your the first one to catch that reference you WIN!
wow. Jasper nice making automatons but why not human versions? or those guys from the golden army? might be a little much tho.
Wow, that is all I can say. Wow, just. Wow.
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Yay!
Also, Jasper is a
terriblebad villain. He's losing his sanity, intelligence first. Every good villain loses that last, if ever.Indeed, the curtain call does approach.
And I'm sure that I'm not the only one waiting for the final showdown, now am I?
yay, huncheback of notre dam reference!
3703807 Actually that is just something that a lot of writers do to make the super villain easier to beat. When a villain that is way stronger than the heroes at the start retains all of his intelligence near the end it will be way harder to beat him.
Have you never noticed that a lot of villains who make almost no mistakes at the start of a story suddenly become so naive and stupid that you wonder if they're the same? Best example is Discord, at the start he uses his intelligence to separate the mane 6 and uses their deepest fears against them so they will not be able to use the only weapon that can stop him. Yet at the end he suddenly doesn't even see the signs that they have become normal again.
3703658 *Ironmare lol
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Oh I'm well aware of the trope. I've also read the Evil Overlord list.
As for Discord, he's not exactly a villain in the same sense. From what we're shown in the show, he's chaotic.
If he were given a bit of room to get some momentum going—he could have, as far as we know—went full tyrant and terrorized ponies.
Now, there's no doubt that he's not cunning, but he's also not got much of an attention span. It could be explained away that he'd been plotting the whole time he was sealed in stone, but didn't exactly get that far because Luna and Celestia weren't the bearers of the Elements anymore. In fact, it could have been something of an ad-hoc fix, and after he lost his temper with Fluttershy out-nicing him, he had them flagged as harmless, thinking he could easily reverse whatever they could do to him. After all, they're nowhere near as strong as Celestia and Luna were.
Hubris was probably a large part of it (as he's got something of a narcissistic personality) but there was a feeling of "I've won, you can't do anything!" in his actions at the end of the episode when he was sealed away. Not to mention, the elements had already failed once before when they were... 'discorded' so... well, he should have known better, to be blunt.
tl;dr, Discord was a good antagonist, not exactly a good villain.
edit: Oh, and another thing about Super Villains. The rule is that, in the end, the Hero always wins.
3703928 Well there were some very obvious points as the mane 6 turned gray when they were discorded and yes others could see that as Spike even asks why they look so gray. So not only can he actually see that they are no longer 'discorded', but he doesn't even do anything about it. As you said he just forced it upon Fluttershy, but he doesn't even try to do anything here and that is my main problem. In the end the villain/antagonist never really tries to win that much anymore. They make obvious mistakes they would've never made at the start.
And that right there is often the biggest problem. Almost all stories have the thought that the person you have been following all along (the hero) must win. I have read a scant few stories where the main character actually dies at the end, losing to the forces of evil.
This is one of the main reasons I like reading stories here for the simple reason that this ironclad rule isn't forced here. I have read a lot of stories here that have actually hit me more than any other books did for the prime reason that they didn't go the way I predicted the would go at the start.
Though I guess I'm nitpicking a bit right now. I really don't know whether our villain or the heroes will win and what will happen after that. I'm eagerly waiting to read it.
Jeez, when the bronze pony first appeared I thought Jasper was gonna put Flash in it and fry him alive kinda like one of those bronze bull thingies from somewhere and somewhen.
...
*Faints*
...
*Wakes up*
Too... AWESOME!
*Faints again*
Ooh, could Sunset Satan be returning!?
Shit is getting awesome! Stupid Sunset Shimmer, I never did like you.
ok i see one BIG idea here that though out this chapter it is so much like devil my cye with the wife and the baby stuff and anger management problems
soo yea i love this fic so far cant wait for more keep up the good work man
I can't wait to see just how magnificently this story shall end. Jasper may win, or may lose, depending on the next few chapters. *giddy school girl squeal*
lol a gold knive wont do shit against the gold everything Jasper probably has. He probably has gold toilet paper by now
And the King will win.
I like the Disney reference in the chapter. Very appropriate. But still... I wonder what the end game will be. I'm hoping for something along the lines of this:
More the "seal your victory" part.
You just...
WHY IS THIS SO GOOD?
Shitngonna go doooooown!!!!!
If Sunset fails, then there is only one pony left that can save Equestria from this nightmare. So, anypony see a big blue box anywhere?
I caught the reference in the chapter. Very well written.
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The rule isn't the hero always wins, it's the villain always looses.
But you need to remember everyone is a villain to someone else.
random question, who you think maybe humans(even Lauren Faust) might see all of this and try to stop jasper and or killed him?
Jasper is now know as Frolo, DO NOT QUESTION IT!.....plz...don't.
This fic is too awesome for words...
At first I thought Jasper would win, but more and more I start to believe I was wrong
A new race of supernatural beings will now arrive into Equestria huh, that pseudo changeling high breed of human and changeling will be quite interesting wouldn't it?
Just imagine it, a new face of evil with all the cunning ways of humans and the ability to change ones appearance at will of a changeling plus the Gem of Ages.
If that new race of Human changelings could have the ability to replicate ones entire body using the body of someone else.
After all, all cells in a body have the same info but for one reason or another they can't have the versatility of a mother cell; an yet many single-cell organisms are able to reproduce using any kind and type of cell of the host they are hijacking.
Now if we speed that process a little and add some imagination to it, we will be able to replicate an entire being using another's body; even if its just a single drop of blood or some piece of living skin that made contact with another being, that will be more than enough to make the being that the blood or skin belongs to.
Sadly that kills the being who's being hijacked
Jasper must win!
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Considering the fact she shouldn't be able to hold it..... I'm pretty sure that this will be quite hilarious
THIS FIC IS AMAZING!!! That is, unless Shimmer kills Jasper.
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I believe (once again) Code Geass said this: "Say there was an evil that good couldn't vanquish... Would you continue on with good and eventually fall to that evil or would you become the evil to defeat the greater evil..." If Sunset Shimmer takes the roll of... Oh my god... Did that... Holy crap... You suck Cryptic... You suck... I know where you're going with this and I'm not going to spoil it... That would make perfect sense...
okay seriously we need to figure out who would in a fight- darth Vulcan- jasper- malideus- or Damien seriously these are the four most powerful humans I have seen one of which- (Damien has turned goody two shoes instead of killing the ponies) - has turned good- but the others all have been successful and powerful villans. I don't know about Vulcan since I guess in present date he's in a prison cell being chewed out by the only royalty figure I now hate more then blueblood; celestia- youd be surprised by how much bad stuff celestia has done but more to the point, while at least three of these humans don't have the throne each has an army of some sort and really strong magic, powers, or melee combat. I really want to know who would win in between these four with or without their armies, I don't care- and another thought, what if they all worked together- the round table of darkness right there- jeesh nothing could beat those four if they worked together but, jasper I don't know if he would be sane enough for a joined partnership with other dark king like figures
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Sounds like a potential fic idea for anypony who could take it up. But that's just me.
3709580 Jasper would win but my favorite is Malidues
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