(Present Day- Earth)
Tony sat in his room staring at the ceiling in silence; many weeks had passed since Jasper’s disappearance. No one knew how it had happened or where he had gone, it’s like he just…poofed. His cellphone, which Tony had tried to call many times after his departure, was on Jasper’s bedside table untouched when he dropped by to see if he was alright. Tony feared the worst and called the authorities in an effort to search for his childhood friend, they did as much as they could but recently informed him that as of now they was no guarantee he was alive or in the same city anymore. Tony was still saddened that he had not tried harder and blamed himself for the days that followed to and after the mall meeting. He hadn’t seen Sid either, though he was extremely pissed and the burns he sustained would probably stick with him for a while. Sid refused to speak to him or the others due to the gong show that was the mall. Sid, like Jasper, fell away from the group. This didn’t help Tony’s mood at all, he glanced at a photo of Jasper and him screwing around at an archery camp. Jasper was mock strangling him with the bow whereas Tony was mock stabbing with the arrow.
“Dude, where are you?”
His cellphone went off which he answered quickly, “Hello?”
“Hey Tone,” Freda’s voice calmed his nerves slightly, “You alright? Tanner told me the news that the five-oh gave you, I’m sure he’s alright.”
Tony sighed sadly, “We should have tried harder. I should have tried harder.”
Freda huffed, “No, don’t think that! I admit it, we were horrible friends. You stuck by him and we all abandoned him. If Sid was here he would agree.”
“I doubt that,” Tony glanced out his window, “He wasn’t Jasper’s BIGGEST fan. If anything he would still blame him.”
Freda was visibly silent but then said warmly, “You want us to come over and hang out? You shouldn’t be alone in this man.”
Tony thought on it for a moment and nodded to himself and spoke a quiet, “Sure.”
*
When the twins arrived, they both hugged him in supportively and smiled. They all soon sat on Tony’s couch and gazed at the TV as it was flipped on; all of them watched The Matrix in silence. Tony as well as the twins had no idea what to say, granted they should talk, but no words arrived. Tony slowly spaced out and thought back to his and Jasper’s childhood, specifically when they had first met. Tony had been on the beach with his grandma and went off to play in a cove, that’s where he found Jasper. His hair was wild and unruly looking and he had constructed a small fort with rocks for a pair of hermit crabs. Jasper had glanced up at Tony and welcomed him with a smile, both boys soon were on the shore making a massive castle that had working canals due to current and angles working with them. Tony smiled at the memory and recalled how happy Jasper had been when he had first met him; he even remembered the same smiles on Jasper’s parent’s faces.
“Tony?”
The man glanced at them, “Yeah?”
Tanner smiled, “You alright?”
Tony nodded and stood up, “Yeah…gotta use the bathroom. Excuse me.”
As the man left, Freda and Tanner turned to glance at the TV which was starting to descend into static. Tony entered the bathroom and splashed his face with cold water; his face stared back at him. The face had worry evident in its eyes, small dark bags under his eyelids proved he had missed some sleep over Jasper’s disappearance. He punched the mirror in sad anger at being useless, why couldn’t he talk to him? A pair of twin screams followed by a low bang alerted Tony to something in the living room. Tony entered the living room ready to fight and froze, then fell to his knees. Princess Celestia glanced at him and smiled warmly.
“It’s alright, I mean neither of you any harm,” Celestia offered Tony her hoof, “please stand, we must speak.”
Tony took her hoof shakily, “Holy shit…you’re real.”
The twins were hugging each other with bug eyes, “She IS?!”
Celestia glanced at the twins and blew at them causing them to cringe slightly, “Indeed I am.”
Tony bowed in respect, “Your majesty, it’s so great to meet you.”
“Like wise Tony Eckhart,” she smiled at his surprise, “yes I know who you are,” he gaze fell on the twins, “Lyme sisters.”
The twins shivered, “Tony, why aren’t you scared!”
“Because she’s friendly,” he coughed slightly, “can I ask something Princess? Before we talk?”
Celestia was slightly puzzled but nodded.
“C-can I….hug you?”
Celestia gave a look that could melt the coldest heart, “Of course you can.”
Tony wrapped his arms slowly around her neck and smiled at the warmth she exuded. Celestia hugged him back with her wings. Tony then nodded at her being real and seated himself, Celestia on the other hand glanced at the twins and sighed.
“I am aware of your worry Tony. That’s why I have come before you now,” she chose her words carefully, “I…know where Jasper is.”
Tony smiled, “You do? That’s great! Where is he?”
Celestia bit her lip and looked away, “He’s…in Equestria. That’s why I’ve come here, we need your help. HE needs your help.”
Tony stood up quickly ready for action, “What’s happened?!”
Celestia didn’t dare meet his eyes, “I’ll explain when we arrive.”
Tony widened his eyes, “We’re going to…wow.”
“Make sure you ready yourself and watch your step,” her horn began to glow as she gave the twins another smile, “farewell,” she smiled slightly in a joking manner, “nopony will believe you.”
Both human and alicorn vanished in a flash of gold.
*
A flash of gold alerted the six ponies and Luna to Celestia’s return the group entered the room and gazed in amazement at the new arrival. Tony waved his hand in a nervous welcoming gesture.
Twilight gave her best smile, “Tony, it’s nice to finally meet you,” she sighed sadly, “we…have something’s to tell you about Jasper.”
“What is it? Is he alright?”
All the ponies became saddened as Tony’s face fell, “What?”
well that was..... fairly expected actually but I hope Jasper's evil side wins out over this
I swear if Tony somehow beat Jasper, I'm gonna so PISSED!
Tony better not somehow defeat, or "reform", Jasper or I'm gonna slap a hoe
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He has a part to play. All of you preemptively calm yourselves
3718955 I kinda want that, but then a bigger part wants redemption. I always like a good redemption arc.
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Shit, meet Fan.
Fan, meet Shit.
...
It's only a matter of time now.
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DUDE tony HAS TO join jasper in his evil crimes!!!!! HAS TOOOOOO!!!!!!!
So tired...
Must.
Keep.
READING!
U HAVE BETTER NOT USE THIS TOOL AGAINST JASPER
I don't know what those other people are talking about. I love redemption, but it should be a bit of a strung out thing, not a *BOOM* all better like "Keep Calm and Flutter On" did.
3718980 GET THE PIMP HAND READY JUST IN CASE IT DOES HAPPEN!
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I'm sensing a double negative here. Shit's gonna get canceled out one way or another.
3719021 But he can't though, he loves the show so much that he would be willing to fight Jasper to return it to the rightful balance of the world...*cough* *cough* But uh yeah, I do hope the two don't end up hurting each other.
Fuck Jasper. Seriously, why do you guys love him so much? Have I fallen through the rabbit hole into a world full of sadists?
Oh Celsetia, you clever thing you I agree with the previous statements though, this was something that was expected, but not highly expected to happened, and if a "reformation" occurs, this is gonna tank. And I do actually hope for a bittersweet ending, perhaps jasper dying in the end, but not without remarking about what they overcame to do so and revealing that that's what the end game truly was, sort of like Living the Good Life and perhaps some sort of peace involving Chrysalis and Ignatius. or something along those lines, its just what I think
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Are you all forgetting, this is the first one
son of a bitch this chapter made me break my jaw because of how hard it hit the floor you know in a sense I should have seen this coming but ii was expecting it earlier on now that it actually happened im amazed I really don't think jaspers friends will change the situation especially with his sanity and perhaps his humanity being drained that and the fact that he wanted this even before he was crazy now if you excuse me I should go snap my jaw back into place
I honestly did not see this coming.
Well everyone it seems it is time to stare at our feeds and wait for the next update.
YES!!!!!!!
Ehem Sorry about that... Became a little excited for a second there.
I feel like that question is unnecessary regarding to current situation.
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because not every one loves to see the hero win all the time?
Alright, I think this would be about a good time to drop in my two cents. Reading all 22 chapters thus far, I have to say that I have some reservations about continuing reading the story, mostly because it's deviated so much in direction and quality that I just don't really feel interested in carrying on.
Admittedly, it has less to do with the villain protagonist and more with the general feel of the writing, but both do play a role in my decision to drop this one. When I started reading, Jasper was... relatable. He was competent and snarky and had an interestingly clever plan, even if it was a bit cliche. He was an interesting antagonist that felt human and reasonable. But as the story went on, he became more and more... not campy, but very contrived. Every challenge was overcome with contemptible ease, every opponent bested with no effort whatsoever, and everyone else? Either turned into a patsy or had an idiot ball glued to their skull. Jasper stopped succeeding because he was clever, and instead started succeeding because he had impenetrable plot armor and the power of handwaving. Take the whole Accord thing he did with the other races. "Oh yeah, come sign this treaty that says we're all equal, except for me cuz I wrote it, and on the small, off chance that you all die, I might inherit your countries and peoples. But really, what's the chance of that happening right?" And then that's exactly what happened. Everyone nodded and smiled and with nary a dark thought gleefully signed away their everything. It wasn't because it was clever, or because he beat them at their own game or outwitted them. He won because they were intentionally made stupid enough to buy into it.
That's not good writing. That's having Villain Sue powers, and that's just what Jasper became. He had no real flaws, and don't say the insanity thing was one, because he still, despite or because of it, managed to continually succeed in every aspect of everything. I mean, royal guard quits? "Haha fuck you I knew already, and built an army of robot superguards in my spare time on an aside in an earlier chapter/series or paragraphs. They're just like you but better because they're robots and unflappably loyal to me." I mean, no buildup, no basis, no logic. It was just "Hay, Jasper needs guards that are Nazis so lets build robots because fuck you that's why."
That's what it felt like to me. He came in and took over and it worked out so well just because. I mean, there's no rhyme or reason for it. He just could not fail. Not at all. He couldn't be beat, because he was just "better" and to hell with anything else. It got old, then it got boring, and now, after that, I have no wont or need to carry on with this one.
Is this harsh criticism? Yes. It's meant to be. This story started out okay and then just fell apart. Jasper turned into a textbook villain sue without any of the campy hilarity that follows. The writing fell flat, the plot flimsy, and the details ridiculous. The characters became weak and unlikable, both the antagonist and the protagonists, and everyone else existed as cardboard cutouts with speakers in their mouths designed to tout how helpless and weak they all were in the face of Jasper. It was ridiculous, and I'm sorry, but it ruined the story for me.
~Finch
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Opinion noted, thank you. In truth, i did not realize this. I hope i don't repeat this mistake when i make the second/final installment.
I know that this might not be a popular opinion, but I hope that jasper sees through his evildoings because his friend Tony got through to him but let it have conflict, tragedy and all that awesome rising action crap
If this turns into a redemption fic, I may cry in impotent rage. You have been warned.
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Dude, threats are not going for me right now alright? I'm trying to do this to the best of my abilities here and the more of the whole "This had not better rabble rabble rabble" it starting to get on my nerves. The storyline is planned out to MY design. Therefore i will respect ALL OF YOU more if you respect my choices in the matter.
3719656 Look at it logically, bud. Unless it was somehow a hoax, jasper not only blew up a village full of ponies, but he also bloodily quelled the rebellion with an army of kill-bots. Now, I don't often believe in 'an eye for an eye' but this? ...Yeah, there's no redemption, and if there is, it's landing a lunar vacay for a few thousand years.
Urge to stab celestia rising... dick move.
3719131 Because happy endings are cliched.
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Called it. I guessed this would happen back in chapter 3 or so. Lets see how much of it I got right though.
...Dude holy shit
That wasn't a plot twist, that was a plot smoothie; prepared on liquefy with some sweet fuck-all and some anticipation for flavour, served with all of my yes.
Unfortunately, I have to wait to enjoy.
Oh well.
Write well, write hard, and let's hope that Lord Jasper's brain doesn't explode. Celestia's playing dirty.
Jasper, you better have already ripped your heart out, because shit's about to get real.
Sorry, but havent Jasper cut off one of her wings? I know you can always heal her up and say it was alicorn magic, but if you dont mind, I'd like to see Celestia bearing this injury.
An one-winged angel.
4741367 I think it got repaired a few chapters back right after her and Luna fought Jasper
Okay so I stop around the middle of the chapter to sat this it would be incredibly stupid if everything that happens in equestria was seen threw their show on earth and they see all of the mess up shit Jasper has done, again stupid but
I also find it exciting
5491492 oh thank god hahaha I was kinda hope that wasn'the the case oh and Jasper I hope your luggage is pact cuse your going on a guilt trip
that bitch is cheating!