Song can stir emotions and memories that one might have buried ,but they still remain. How does twilight deal with them when a singer at the Gala brings all these feeling of her friends and their passing out to the surface?
Twilight after hearing the song dreams of her friends the moments they first met and through out all of there adventures. Celestia worried of her opens parts of the Canterlots library that even she herself well not enter. Ancient tomes within she hope has the answers to helping her precious and now Fellow princess.
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This has much potential as a story, save for one problem. The spelling and grammar errors that abound make this difficult at best to read. My suggestion to you is to find an editor to go through your work before posting. I honestly like the idea of this story and would love to see where you plan to take it, but it is in desperate need of proofreading and editing.
Either way, good luck in your writings, you have the potential for a good story here.
2926543Thanks for the comment and pointers. I wanted to go ahead and post it. I didn't have access to anyone to proofread don't really know many editors. I'll try to find one new to the community xD sadly none of my friend would be able to edit this for me.
2926834 Yeah, I can understand that. If I ever did put anything I thought down in words, I wouldn't be able to show most of my friends either. Course, that's mostly because they're not really interested in AU pony stuff.
I would offer to help you, since you're new to the community and I'm relatively new as well, at least as far as a registered account goes, but I don't know if I trust my editing skills, especially beings how long its been since I wrote anything for myself. I hope your search goes well, and I wish you the best of luck.
And btw, I'm glad for the positive reaction to my comment. Every time I write something like that, I'm afraid of coming across crass or rude and ending up offending the person I aim to help.
2927059yeah most people are
over being given tips or criticism. mostly I enjoy hearing peoples thoughts like they say haters going to hate and lovers going to love. Atleast I know it has some kind of impact. I plan on updating this soon. this certain one is currently planned to go on for 5 to 7 more chapters. Is only the beginning of a long story.
Couldn't make it through the first three paragraphs. This needs intense editing done. I don't want to hate it due to the errors, so I'm putting it down until this has been refined.