Fluttershy wanted to just have a nice relaxing day with her friends, but her day is completely ruined by a gauntlet of negative events. In the end she runs back to her cottage in tears. With a little counseling from her good friend Rainbow Dash, she recovers from the horrible experience that she went through in the past day.
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Simple but nice. Certainly not the best fanfic I've ever read by any means, but certainly a nice enough start for a beginning writer. Keep up the good work General Flutterguy!
2685285Thank you so much! Your comments and criticism mean a lot more to me than you think!
2685285Also, I was going to warn everybody that this was going to be nowhere near the quality of... Asylum, but I had to make a real description in order for it to be published.
Everyone! Thank you SO much for 125 views and the 10 thumbs ups! Not to mention all the people who added my story to their favourites! I don't understand what it is about this simple, mediocre story that everyone loves... but I guess it's really true that something is only as good as an individual's opinion.
Ugh... Not that good, the writing style was pretty rubbish, the characters seemed an little out of it
<< Rainbow would never go into detail abut this
You missed ", and . Out a couple of times, I would suggest getting an editor to look over it.
And why do you put a space before every new line you write? It makes it look sloppy...
2692995Dude, I only put a new space in a break in paragraph. That means time has passed. But thanks for the criticism. I appreciate it more than you think. Don't ever hesitate to give me constructive feedback. Bad criticism is just as valid as good criticism.
2692995Also, I know about a lot of the flaws in the story, if you look back further in the comments. I know the story isn't the greatest thing ever. In fact, I think with how good my rating is, I think it's incredibly overrated. I feel like the people who know the faults are the ones who know what they're talking about. But that doesn't mean I don't appreciate the people who liked it. I don't usually like to change my stories, I usually just try to improve in the next one. Thanks a lot for your criticism. I assure you that your thumbs down will be taken into account.
(People, this is the right way to dislike a story; you press the thumbs down button and give your reason in the comments. Not just press the thumbs down. And do NOT just say "Oh, this is bad!" I hate that even more.).
I thought this was good. It is simple, it's a tad bit different, not bad for a beginner. Though I suggest an editor or a proofreader, they do come in handy. All in all, i like it. keep up the good work!
2737641Thanks! It was a pleasure meeting you on the forums!
2737652 As was you.