The Tale of Haikus

by Stasiarose

Idle

Idle opened her eyes to the cruel harsh world she was suddenly born into. She knew she had a quest, a quest to look for something, or somepony, but she didn't know who. She looked up now, at the beautiful full moon. She tried to ask it a question, being shushed by the wind. The moon instantly answered her question with a thought, a thought that made her want to cry. This was why she was here, but before she began her journey, she'd need a name. She once more looked at the moon. Idle. The wind whispered. She smiled.

She began walking.

Idle started walking along in the cold night. She didn't know what was so bad about this, Earth. It seemed fine to her. But then she thought about something. She thought about how much pain one had to ordeal in order to find no love, or compassion, like she'd learned from the moon. She remembered the way the pony made himself sound in his head, how little he must think he was.

She began feeling smaller.

The more she thought of Haikus and how he felt, the smaller she started to feel. Toward the end of the night she had ten time less vigor in her step then before. Now she, trudged. She began feeling desperate for warmth, looking every now and then at her hooves as they began turning blue. Her forelegs began to grow stiff, hard to move. She needed to sleep.

So that's what she did.

She waltzed to the side and simply fell over, not caring for warmth or shelter. She began to feel her new life fade way. She wondered why, but in truth she knew. She hadn't gotten to Haikus in time... In... Time... She lay, her mission failed. She slowly faded away, floating back into the light of the moon.

She saw a vision.

This vision made her want to cry. The vision of friendless, loveless, and now lifeless, tiny body of eight year old Haikus, slumped on the road. She knew she would be punish, for this wish was ment to be made, but knowing now that poor little Haikus died without a friend or love was punish enough.

Now Idle knew how cruel Earth could be. She found herself starting to smile, and cry. Sad that Haikus died without a friend in sight, but happy that she knew he was in a better place.

That was Idle's last thought before, light a ghost, she vanished, whisked into the moon to await he punishment.

Comments

[Pen Brush]

2631810
why are you sad?

[Stasiarose]

2637466
I don't know what ya mean.

[Spirit 0f Chaos]

I truly did not see that ending coming. I like being surprised, even such a disheartening one. My rambling aside, this was a good story! I'm not one for nitpicking grammar/spelling unless its REALLY bad, and this was not! I focus more on the concept/story, and they were good! Altogether: great job!
EDIT: Just read chapter two. I had to re-read it before I understood what was happening, but once I did it made the story that much better, much more so than if you had left it at Haiku's death. Cool stuff!