The Lightless Night

by Matthias Ramsey

Epilogue

Sweetie Belle shot straight up up in bed with a scream, causing the dozing Rarity to jolt.
"My goodness, Sweetie Belle! You-"
Sweetie Belle grabbed her sister's foreleg, tears pouring from her eyes. "Rarity! We're dead! Me, Scoots, Applebloom...we all got killed by timberwolves!"
"My word, how many painkillers did I give you? Listen to you. Sweetie, if you're dead, how are you talking to me?"
"Then...I escaped somehow! But they got Scootaloo and Applebloom!"
"They're fine, Sweetie. They were here to check on you earlier."
"I don't believe you! I need to talk to Applejack and Rainbow Dash!"
"Sweetie, I-"
Sweetie Belle used her magic to grab Rarity' s phone. She quickly dialed Applejack's number.
"'Ello?"
"Applejack, I-"
"Oh, heya, Sweetie Belle! How're ya doin'? Hurtin' at all?"
"A-Applejack, Applebloom is...she's dead."
A pause, then, "That fever musta messed up yer head. Applebloom's right here with me."
"Let me talk to her!"
"Sure thing. Justa sec."
A pause, then, "Hi, Sweetie Belle! Ya feelin' better?"
"Y-you're not dead?"
"Naw, why? Should ah be?"
"What about Scoots?"
"Scoots is right here, so ah think she's fine. Ah think ya jus' had a bad dream."
"A dream?" The never-ending night made more sense now.
"Yeah. See, ya had...uh, some big fancy word. Uh-pen-duh-sie-tis or somethin'."
"Appendicitis?"
"Yeah, that. Anyway, you had ta get surgery. You had a bad fever for a while afterwards, but it went down 'bout an hour ago."
"So we didn't go into Everfree Forest on Lightless Night?"
"That was weeks ago, Sweets."
"And we didn't get killed by timberwolves?"
"Naw."
"What about Zecora? They got her first..."
"Saw her in town today. She's fine."
"I...I gotta go."
"Bye, then."
Sweetie Belle hung up. "I..."
Rarity hugged her little sister. "Shhh. Everything will be fine."
"This time...I believe you."

END.

Comments

[Spryzler]

Wow. Nicely written.
One would think the whole 'waking up from a bad dream' thing would be cliched, but I think it worked really well in this story!
Well done ;)

[Matthias Ramsey]

2571393 Thank you, sir and/or madam.

[Whiteout]

Downvoted for terrible story concept, poor execution, and quoting terrible Metallica song as a chapter title.

[Spryzler]

2571511
Sir, and, forget the haters ;)

[Matthias Ramsey]

2571624 I welcome all opinions and criticism. I don't always accept it, but i welcome it.
Also, this story concept wasn't mine. it was a request for someone.
One last thing: If you think "The Day That Never Comes" is a terrible Metallica song, you're most likely missing the message, and I feel sorry for you.

[Whiteout]

2571810

Missing the message? Not quite. I'm missing the sound of a band whose music hasn't been over-produced to the point of being nigh impossible to actually listen to.

That album's mastering stinks.

As for the fic, seriously, you do yourself no favors with five line 'chapters' that are mostly just dialogue. Narration and description are the meat of fiction, use them. This reads like an instant messenger RP in a lot of places.

[Matthias Ramsey]

2571829 To each their own.

[Tr0llz0r96]

I don't care what anyone says, this was great. You put time and effort into this and it really shows here. I give it a 10. Out of 5.

[Matthias Ramsey]

2589212 Thank you kindly, sir and/or madam.