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Your OC is walking through Ponyville and they see this


Trixie is on the ground all battered and bruised, outfit torn and stained and a large earth pony stallion towers over her, when she lifts her head he punches it with his hoof knocking her back down. He then kicks Trixie in the ribs making a crack and causing her to cough up a bit of blood.

What would your OC do when they saw this?

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Bandit, even though he doesn't like Trixie, is making sure that Stallion leaves with broken......everything.

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Before he can do another one to Trixie, Kyan grabs his body before ripping apart and then, he punch the stallion's face 100 times before it becomes beyond recognition… he put the corpse of the stallion in trash bin before he heals Trixie.

Trixie: Kyan? Why are you healing me? I thought you hate me for all the things I did to Twilight.

"I know but Twilight did same things to you when Starlight pick you as her friend… I guess that make it even-ish… not everyone's perfect, Trixie… we all make mistakes and that's good things cause we can learn from our mistakes and improves ourselves."

She smiles at him before she feeling all better.

Trixie: Thank you, Kyan.

She hugged him which he return the hug.

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Trixie laid badly injured on the ground watching in surprise, she wasn’t able to get up so she kinda hoped Bandit knew first aid and wouldn’t tell anyone about this



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Aww! That’s adorable! :heart:

Well, the healing part and after it...

Beat him with a fencepost until he stops twitching or his thoughts are smeared all over the ground, which ever happens first.

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Bandit uses a spell to help heal her wounds.

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My Sunset: * 'send' him to the hospital*

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Psycho would likely do as he does with everyone: Troll the stallion. Then he'd turn into Soldier from TF2 and slap Trixie, healing her instantly, because PAIN IS WEAKNESS LEAVING THE BODY!

7590299 Popcorn time?

My OC would arrest him

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I think he’s just using the vector as an example.

7590339 Because she never got punished for anything she did. She's even worse than Sprout Cloverleaf.

Also, supposedly Trixie managed to beat Ursa Major. If that's true, surely she can handle a single stallion.

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She didn’t beat an Ursa Major...


So... would Starlight and Spike being doing as shown in the vector?

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...there's a lot to say about those involved in this setup, both within and outside of the scenario.

Second Wind - This has a 'cry for a hero' cliché written all over it, pretty much what Second Wind fantasizes about answering.

Sol - Can make this stallion go stasis with his magic. What happens next... I don't know, but there's a good chance that the stallion will endure torturing to the point where it could make Trixie's beating look like she was beaten with feathers.

Truffles the Mushroom Mare - Might headbutt him with her cap, maybe even lie of the potential threat she could be.

Tricklebrook the Fairy - It won't take long for her to redirect his anger at herself.

7590352 Well, I guess you can add lying to the long list of Trixie's wrongdoing then. At least Sprout Cloverleaf wasn't a lier. He told people straight in the face that he's manipulating them.

All the ponies in Poniville would gather around Trixie and would try to influence the perpetrator with loud yelling:

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Poor Trixie

But why would they want to see a beaten up pony get... R**ed?

My OCs Shield Steedor, Leon Aquilous, and Dog Fries (if it was before she became friends with Starlight), won't go to help her unless Dusk convinced them to. If it was after she became friends with Starlight, those three would totally help her out.

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Don't listen to Bad Dragon, he practically is a Black and White morality madman with a judgement that I can't stomach.

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I'd have the OC drive back the stallion and save Trixie's life.

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First of all, wtf? :unsuresweetie:

And second, all three of my main OCs (because they're almost never far apart from one another) would definitely go and kick that stallion's ass, then make sure Trixie would be taken care of, and then bring the stallion before Twilight for punishment. My OCs in this case are three pretty normal Earth Pony guards who work under Twilight, known as the Triplets. They're idiotic goofballs and are pretty lazy most of the time, but they do their jobs and try their best to never let something like this happen on their watch.

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oh heck i read this as "what would you do if you saw your OC beating up trixie" and panicked

Be like a pony Troy: "CHOOT "IM 'LIZABET!"

Angry and disappointed of the actions of the large stallion, Ipsywitch walks up to him and taps him on the shoulder.
The stallion turns, only to meet a dark green hoof to the face, knocking him down and cuts him across the cheek.
Ipsywitch towers over the stallion, with a dark, murky aura about her, as her glowing eyes stare down at the stallion.
"Nopony bullies my friends and gets away with it..." Ipsywitch growled.

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I would push the stallion away from Trixie, saving her, while also calling the police (or guards, whatever) and the hospital.

Vaporize the attacker with dark magic however she'd do that to anyone in that position.

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Arcanum Folklore

Ponyville: 1:33 AM, right outside Berry Punch's Winery and Bar

I felt the kick that really did it, I was in too much pain to tell but I guessed that more than one rib had been broken, and I had difficulty breathing and my innards and right lung had all been punctured by my own broken bones.

My vision was becoming blurry, and I thought it, I thought I was going to die like that. Of all the ways to die, getting killed from a disgruntled member of my audience was something I did not consider, he yelled at me saying he lost his home during the Ursa Minor attack, and I simply told him the truth. I told him that it was an accident caused by children that believed without question my persona and my fictional stage play. He then threw me out the door like a ragdoll, galloped at full speed towards me and began beating on me; I couldn't use magic, I couldn't even move fast enough to dodge and find a way to gallop away. I wasn't actually that good or powerful of a magus, and also I was too drunk to defend myself with or without magic.

I was just in Berry's Bar for a drink and to talk with one of the few friends I had made in Ponyville over the years, which was Berry herself. Start a Fireworks Show the night after as a job that both me and Pinkie Pie had been hired to do, and then head on out to Manehattan for an audition for a Bridleway play. I was going to do that figuring that I was better at acting and fireworks anyway and that I should commit fully to tp them.

I had finally gotten something of a future. And yet there I was about to loose it all.

I was scared, part of me wondered if I deserved it, but I did not want to die. I did not want to see what the afterlife had waiting for me.

But then I heard the loud clinking of chains.

Though it was blurry I still saw a barbed black spearhead pierce my assailants chest, the blood spilling on my face alerting me to greater danger. I saw then as my assailant had been pulled away from my sight with great force as his agonizing screams drifted away from my presence. But alas, I was at that point too weak and injured to muster the will to get back on my hooves, so I drifted into the darkness of unconsciousness, awaiting the farrystallion Kharon to take across the river Stix...

"So much for the Great and Powerful Trixie..."
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Ponyville: 1:29 AM, right outside Berry Punch's Winery and Bar

I was in Ponyville drinking in me friend Berry's Winery and Bar. I was drinking the house wine, great flavor but for an experienced drinker like me it would have taken four bottles to have gotten me even mildly drunk. I had also came armed despite being told not to by Her Majesty Princes Luna with me Kurdish Dagger and me enchanted mechanical creation the Chain Spear, hidden way under me dusty black woolen overcoat.

Berry had been a gracious host, and introduced me to a mare named Trixie Lunamoon, she was egocentric, but not selfish in the least. In all she was theatrics ponyfied, and she told me she was going to perform fireworks show tomorrow night, followed by her going to an audition in me home city Manehattan. I would have loved to have accompanied her there, but I was in Ponyville to fetch Ms. Sparkle so she could help me get reacquainted with Archive Key Yearling (A. K. Yearling.). All so she could help the O.S.S. with a situation down in Kemet back in the Old World located in the area of North Zebrica. Yearling might have specialized Mesoequestrian Archeology, but she was an adventurer at heart, and in fact was well versed with many civilizations around the world. So much so that she told Ms. Sparkle of what she considered to be a 'disturbing link' between the Olmec and the Kemet despite both being an ocean away. But that was for the morning.

I was finishing a tale about a case with a wannabe warlock, that had sacrificed a foal to an idol of Moloch made from clay in his own house.

"We locked the door behind him, and I had already broken his horn ya see. So instead of shooting him knowing that other O.S.S. Troopers where outside the door we decided to drop our weapons, and yet he made a gallop for said door, and try as he might he couldn't get it open because I had already placed troopers outside with orders to not let him escape. So what did we do? We just galloped towards him, gathered around him, and then beat him near to death! HAHAHAHA!!" I laughed, maybe I was twisted, but I considered the way we ended that situation to be funny at least.

Trixie was seating in the stool next to me with a perplexed stare at to what she just heard.

But she regained her composure and gave me a genuine smile. She was still wearing her pointed hat and star-spangled wizards cloak indoors, despite I leaving me hat at the stand by the door like everypony else. Which I found oddly adorable despite her being a fully-grown mare. She might have been slightly unkept, but she was pretty. She was blue, with a light blue mane and pale blue streak running down it, along with her tail which she kept long, had a nice smelling perfume on strangely enough despite being a performer that was on the road often. After noting all of this in my mind I then heard her speak to me to excuse herself.

"Sorry handsome but I need the restroom for a bit. Now don't go anywhere."

I noticed in the corner of me eye a phantom of a mare, near the door to the storage area at the other side of the bar opposite to the bathrooms.

Trixie trotted away to do her busyness, but it seems I had me own to attend to.

"Berry, I'm taking the bottle with me, I'll pay you later. It seems someone is looking for me."

Berry answered with exasperation in her voice. "Fine, but be back here by the time she comes back. I prefer it if she wasn't alone. Some ponies are still angry with her still."

With that I left the bar stool, and headed to the storage areas door. The noise, and the swirling ether of all the patrons was making it difficult to notice anything happening behind me without me specifically focusing on it.

In front of said door was the phantom, an emaciated mare with a bell-pepper mark, her colors gone, as she was the color of gaseous white ectoplasm. Her mane was raged and her eyes empty and full of sadness. I decided to ask immediately what she wanted with me.

"What do ya want, and how bad is it?" I asked. I took the bottle of Berry's Wine that I kept floating next to me with telekinesis and began drinking straight from it to see if it would help me deal with whatever this pour soul was going to ask of me.

"My killer, is coming here. He going after that mare you where drinking with. He could be here right now for all we know!"

I spat me drink, the wine went right through her naturally so she didn't even flinch.

I turned around and galloped, used me telekinesis to push away all the patrons I could, the place was packed and I knew it.

I kicked open the door and there at the distance of around three of meters I saw Trixie, bloodied, her cloak and hat torn in places, battered and bruised, blood coming out of her mouth as she was being kicked by a grey, pink maned, large and muscular earthen stallion, his mark being that of a shovel.

I was angry, really angry, fire or me Kurdish Dagger where too good for him.

I took the bottle and broke it at the bars wall, turned around and rushed closer to them, I could hear somepony behind me but I wouldn't listen. Not then.

I then pulled me Chain Spear from under me sleeve and I magickly activated it, causing it to fire as he was about to smash her with his forehooves, and as he was standing with his back legs.

Before he did though the barbed spearhead went right under his chest, through his spine and through his torso. He screamed in agony, as I then telekinetically pulled the chain with perhaps twice the strength I needed to, and telekinetically maneuvered him in mid air to face me, and me broken wine bottle.

I stabbed through his neck as I stopped the momentum telekinetically. I then slashed across it slicing open his carotid artery, and half decapitating him, causing the broken wine bottle to shatter due to the amount of force that was used. Blood sprayed for a second and I then dropped him in front of me. His eyes still bulging, staring back at me with fear despite the fact that he was stone cold dead. I magically called back the chain of me Chain Spear and it retracted back again into my sleeve.

Then I heard Berry scream behind me. "By Celestia's arse!"

I looked back and stared back at Berry and demanded the following. "Call Ponyville Hospital, tell them that there is a mare beaten half to death and that she is being brought in. Ye can tell the Sheriff what ya want later."

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Ponyville: Ponyville Hospital, 10:31AM

I sat there next to her hospital bed, I still had some dried blood on me. I asked permission to use Taoist acupuncture, and for the doctors to use specific intravenous solutions to speed her recovery. The bone regen was used while she was sedated, and everything else will heal at an accelerated pace.

I threatened the dim Sheriff to back off, Berry vouched for me saying it was self-defense. Her Majesty Luna, and Her Highness Celestia would vouch for me, I was their first Knight in three centuries. And apparently from what I heard over the phone Ms. Lunamoon was a friend of Ms. Sparkle. So I did Twilight 'Wings Now' Sparkle a favor somewhat. Though I doubt she would appreciate it considering the use of deadly force.

Her abdomen which I had place seven acupuncture needles which I saturated with ether and half her face where covered in bandages, four of her teeth where missing as well, she was going to need implants there.

I thought all of that. Then I heard her wake up. Her eyes opened, and she said the following.

"Trixie... Is Trixie... Am I alive?"

I looked at her, tired.

"Yes Ms. Lunamoon, you are alive."

She looked at me direction, beginning to tear up. She then kept on speaking.

"I am sorry the night ended the way it did... I-. Oh Celestia the fireworks show, and my audition! I won't be able to recover in time to get to it! " She said that last sentence as she covered her eyes with her left foreleg.

I place me hoof on her right shoulder, trying to calm her down.

"I made a few phone calls, your friends will be here shortly. As for the the audition? I have an old friend back home in Manehattan, he runs a newspaper and as such knows more than a few ponies in Bridleway, he got them to give you another audition for another play as soon as you recover."

She removed her foreleg, and turned her head to look back at me.

"Why? I mean Trixie is more than thankful, but... Well, Trixie wouldn't have blamed you if you just left Trixie there."

Me eye twitched, I was getting angry again.

"Don't give me that crap. This is what I can do. If anything I should be apologizing to you still. If I hadn't left to talk a mare enquiring me about the stallion that murdered her, I would have been there waiting for ya and I could have stopped that son of a bitch without ye coming to any harm. The irony that the bastard that did this to ya and that ghost's murderer where one and the same does not escape me."

She looked at me, not knowing what to think.

"You can talk to the dead?"

I blinked wondering why that was her first concern. Though I will admit that me abilities are rare.

"Yes. Basically speaking."

She then asked something else.

"Did you stab the pony that was attacking me?"

I looked away. Couldn't face her with the answer. I wasn't exactly proud of being a trained murderer. Bastard might have deserved it, but had things gone differently he could have stood trial instead. Not that I have much respect for lawyers and courts, but as a soldier of Equestria it makes the princesses look bad if I go about killing all that cross me as if I was cleaning house.

"I did, he is in the morgue as we speak. Let's just say I lost me temper."

And with that I got up and started to leave. But she called to me.

"Hey! You better comeback here when I recover and escort me to Manehattan you hear? Guarantee my safety. It can get lonely on the road you know?"

I snorted at that. Part of me couldn't help but wonder why she was crazy enough to want to spend anytime with me anymore.

And I told her back. "Me number is on the card on the table. Also, don't worry. You'll be out of here in a week, and fully recovered in a month."

I then trotted off. I had a very angry new Alicorn to talk to.

I know I made this thread but whatever


Gumdrop would freeze in shock and fear while crying


Stardust would possibly end up transforming to her true dragon form but not harm the stallion, she would sent a blast to the ground near him as a warning and rush Trixie to the hospital.

“No one messes with Trixie! Except for me, but I’d do nothing like that to her!” She would shout at the Stallion.

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I apologize for dramatizing the entire scenario and turning it into a short story.

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Why are you apologising? I liked yours, I didn’t see anything wrong with it, you were just saying what your OC would do in that situation

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I might have occupied too much space. 🤣

And demonstrated what amounts to is a mix between a Doom glory kill and a Mortal Kombat fatality.

Mine Brian Dragnov even as a pegasus would attack the stallion and take Trixie to the hospital before having the near-crippled stallion arrested.
His legs might be broken but he's still breathing

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FANCY SEEING YOU HERE, POTATOBREAK.

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I'M NOT A POTATO. TRIXIE IS SUFFERING. WHAT ARE YOU GOING TO DO ABOUT IT!?

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Look higher in the comments. The earlier ones.

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Your avatar really fitted your comment

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Delger would walk up & sternly ask why the stallion is beating this mare; he doesn’t fight not out of perfection or principle, but because he’s the type of guy to forget that’s an option. Then he’d help Trixie up.

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