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Pinkie's still infected?
6477621 Something certainly seems amiss.
Up next: the void prince!
What the fuck
I like it more!
6477695 More than what? :D No one has commented on if it's written any better than other such scenes of mine.
hum this is interesting. is this a side effect from pinkie's little trip in the other story? Any thing is possible.
MLP FiM = My Little Porny Friendship is Mating. Brought to you by the letter D and S.
6478008 Heh, getting an opinion on the writing quality of this chapter is proving quite a challenge.
6477718 more like pinkie pie scenes
6478030 The quality qualifies for a quantity of questionable and quirky responses.
I felt it's fine and fairing fairly well with few and far between of faults and frustrations in all but simply waiting for more to come.
In the end I like it and see no lack of quality that makes it more than acceptable reading. I'm not a perfectionist and I think anything that was truly so would simply Ned Flanders it up.
Hello, all caught up now to the story. I liked it a lot, even if it had its ups and downs. (As all stories have.) Now one question rose in my mind. Is there a reason for the amount of clop in later parts of this story? I understand it is a story element but the change is quite drastic as opposed to some prequels of this story.
6480865 That dips into meta context rather rapidly. There may be a chapter or two you'll never see that touches on it, but there was a time, a few times, where this story almost got dropped entirely.
I think you should delete the word "pack" from this sentence. Unless you're trying to make something of a play on words here, it's rather confusing.
Their "slightly-manipulative" success.
6498129 Fixed!
6498142 Whoops, caught more:
He hadn't "known" there could be so many...
Apple Bloom's name is two words.
6498205 Fixed! Take 2.
6498142 Okay, wow...that came out of nowhere.
A sex scene with Pinkie Pie. I'll admit that's probably not something I ever would have wanted to see, but here it is. So how did this chapter fare? Much to my shock, what was here was good. Really, really good. Simply put, viewed purely in terms of narrative construction, this is probably the single best chapter this story has had to date. Here, for the first time in a very long time, if ever, the story is liberal with exposition alongside description of actions, and the chapter is far and away stronger for it. It doesn't go overboard, but instead balances it out with direct narration of what Silver is thinking/feeling, and in doing so becomes better for it.
Disappointingly, this tapers off immediately after the sex ends, and that's an incredible shame. This is the style that the story should keep all of the time.
Leaving that aside, the sex scene itself was very well done, which I can't believe I'm saying since it involved Pinkie Pie, who was dead last on my list of which of the Mane Six I'd want to see clop about. Everything about her pervasive mania just screams yandere to me, so I was quite happy to have her keep it in her proverbial pants. As such, it's beyond surprising that this was as enjoyable as it was (though there's a curious omission of the word "pussy" here, which I can only assume is to avoid an unfortunate alliteration with Pinkie Pie's name). Pinkie is the hardest character to write in-character (or at least I think so), and that's especially true when taking the characters to an area so far outside how we see them in the source material (e.g. having sex), but much to my amazement this entire chapter seemed extremely true to her. Everything she did, I could honestly say to myself "yeah, I can see Pinkie Pie doing that."
Of course, the single caveat there is her being so forceful with her affections (though even that was close, considering how she usually doesn't take no for an answer regarding friendships/parties), but that's clearly supposed to be abnormal for her anyway. As it was, she was at her most out-of-character right after she regained her senses. A sober line like "What have I done" or "I'll understand if you want me in jail forever" is more serious than Pinkie ever is, even at her most despairing. Even when horrified, I'd have expected her to express it in child-like terms (e.g. "Oh my gosh! I'm super sorry!" etc.).
I was initially very interested in what had made Pinkie act this way, but several other comments here clued me in to this being related to the crossover that Twilight alluded to a few chapters back, which is rather disappointing. There's a reason why most crossovers are isolated events, since those effectively punish audience members who are familiar with only one of the preexisting stories. I haven't read the story that this came from, and so I feel like I'm less able to effectively enjoy these chapters because of that.
Also, how in the heck did Silver (er, Wispy) not have alarms going off in his mind when Pinkie asked him about humans? Given that she shouldn't have any way of knowing about humans, that should have been a big red flag that something was seriously wrong.
6498256 I try pretty hard to stay in character, though Pinkie is manic depressive. She can crash, hard, and it has been shown.
That aside, doesn't know about humans? That... Dude, she knows about Silver! She also knows Jake. Her knowing about humans is not a left-field realization. It's more odd that she's asking about it to 'wispy', who, so far, has given no reason to know about them, but who knows, she could be referring to the two humans Silver knows she knows about. She was one of the ones chastising Twilight for being mean to the very-much-human that was Silver way back in the day. Her knowledge of humans was established a long time ago.
I'd apologize about my crossover going on, but I keep all those facts jumbling around in my head and push right forward. If you want to read, go ahead, and if you don't, you won't miss much, really. You were just as surprised as Silver was, and that's fine. More details will be revealed with time.
6498288
Hm, I confess that I forgot about Jake (which I hope is understandable, given his lack of screen-presence), but I thought Twilight and the gang hadn't met Silver until he'd become a pony.
Somehow, I bet that Pinkie drank that love poison...
Wow... I have a lot of chapters to read.
This was a good chapter anyway even though I don't really read clop anymore.
6699720 Welcome back! The clop factor dies down I feel as the chapters go on.
question mark
Another connection?
I didn’t know pinkie could dance like a human. Wow my heart is fluttering at this. 😍
Isn’t his coat blue?
My theory the crusaders did something to her.
8978373
She can stand up right just fine and dance too. As I could recall she did that right in the show. Don't remember when, thought. She also could be Pinkie from Canterlot High. They swap places every time and then. That were in one of EqG movies.