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"Silver Stars" I think
Should only be one she not she she knows.
Poker tournament yay but what is the ante to play.... typos?
6311421 Fixed!
'Patty' would get a chuckle out of this typo.
6312296 Fixed!
Certainly sheds new light on the phrase "make love, not war", eh?
Keep going! ;)
One day my boss is gonna walk up on me quietly enough to read over my shoulder at the exact wrong part of one of these stories. Ima get fired and I'll have no one to blame but myself. I'll still blame you, of course. This totally isn't specifically marked "not safe for work", so honestly how was I supposed to know that pony-type-sex-fantasies are inappropriate to read at work if it's not specifically marked "not safe for work". Clearly your the one being irresposible here.
6312607 I accept your scorn.
6312985 Fair warning, you will lose all repect points if you EVER mark this NSFW. And I truly hope the "scorn" thing is a joke on your part. Because I'll tell you a secret.., I save my scorn for the poor souls who deserve it. You? You good people. Possibly even good ponies. But what do I know? I'm crazy people.
{only slightlty edited in the morning, was pretty good post for drunk crazy peoples }
Soon we will be back with the herd and she the youngins soon.
Also, patty running poker sounds fun.
There's no error here, per se, but you may want to add that that mare left the room, otherwise she's watching all of the ensuing shenanigans.
There's a space between "that" and the comma.
If she's referring to multiple spirits (his and hers), then this should have the apostrophe after the last "s" in the word, not before it.
Shouldn't that be "she agreed with every move he made"?
6317903 Fixed, and no, every little move she made implied she wanted to get down and dirty.
6317938 I feel like this chapter is trying to propose that what Silver and Celestia have done is of great importance, but somehow I'm not seeing it. Indeed, the entire nature of what it means to take on that humanoid form honestly seems like it's being dressed up in various meanings that it doesn't necessarily have.
Nefertari seems to be of the opinion that, for those who have access to that form, it can only be called upon for "war," that is, that transforming requires intense negative emotions, and that such emotions are required to sustain it. Silver and Celestia are demonstrating that - at least insofar as sustaining it goes - that form can be kept while in a heightened state of other feelings, such as love (or arousal). Nefertari claims that this is "reforging" what it means to take that form in particular, and (by extension) what it means to be an Anubian in general.
Here's the thing, though; it seems to me that that form can be used/maintained simply via any particularly strong emotion. It's just that the Anubians convinced themselves that it had to be negative because that happened to fit the way that they lived. The entire idea of this being some sort of "reforging" isn't any sort of change with regard to the magic behind that transformation; rather, it's an alteration to the pseudo-religious mantra that they've come to accept about what that body means. Heck, I'd wager that even the intense bout of emotions required to maintain that form can be overcome, and that with sufficient practice and concentration, it would be possible to move back and forth from that body at will.
In a way, that's very appropriate, since it blurs the line between "magic" and "friendship." That said, I think the story should move this particular interpretation to the front more, instead of it simply being one possible explanation. As it is now, there's no obvious reason for why what Silver has done is significant; we're simply being told that it is important that the two of them can take that form and have sex in it. More explanation is required.
Beyond that, I was amused by the level of cattiness between Celestia and Nefertari. Celestia continues to be unusually jealous and possessive of Silver when Nefertari is around, and we see that again here. For her part, Nefertari seemed willing to back off only for the moment. While Celestia told her to get her own lover, Nefertari didn't seem like she was willing to give up on Silver at all. Also, I found it interesting how much Celestia kept denying that Nefertari could be pregnant...something I'm not convinced of. It'd be interesting if, by the time they got back to Equestria, the shamaness began to show.
In the meantime, I wonder if there'll be any more hijinks during their brief layover in Catro...
6328120 Welcome back! I'm not sure why a redefinition isn't a big deal. Even if nothing, objectively, changed, it's a huge mental change, that can put their people on a path to not being 'just' warmongers. That seems like a huge deal to me.
6328207 I'm not saying that it's not a big deal, I'm saying that the story doesn't seem to be clearly defining that what's going on is a change in their cultural interpretation of what it means to be an Anubian.
Silver is presenting this major change, in telling them that the "war form" need not be about "war," but we're not being told why this change is so major. The idea of "war form as a central aspect of being an Anubian" hasn't been properly established; it has, at most, been hinted at via the centralization of conflict as a cultural staple, but that's it.
6328250 Huh, I thought I had. I'll have to try harder.
Silver could join in on the card games, would that be 5 card STUD?
6942471 You should feel bad.
I don’t get it.
8975978
Horses have long faces.