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You have no idea how much that cracked me up!
6171888 I live to serve.
Silver is facing a vary long life and it will bare much death as time passes.
The weight of the crown upon my head weigh's heavy upon my soul.
I am not sure of the story I read that quote in but celestia was talking to Twilight about living for ever and it was at that point Twilight understood she was going to watch everypony grow old and pass on with out her.
just stop and really think about this living for ever it would scar the road apples out of me.
Harts Fire
Lunar pegasus named Moon Dancer? HAving been caught once flat footed in the drinking of many beers tonight, (I totally thought that story was over, man. I tried ) I'm gona back off this now. Just sayin' one helluva coinky-dink. You know cause eppisode. Moon Dancer. (head cannon pre-Rarity Spike crush). Cause that really does make sense. He'd done got her a gift even though Twilight done skipped her party.... So I have to assume this is completely different Moon Dancer.
Nuuuuuuuuuu, don't be doing that kinda thinkin, dangly bits are best bits.
6172240 My mind is a reservoir with information with no tags.
6172272 I thought gold bits are best bits.
6172308 Ranks top to bottom Dangly, Platinum, Gold, Silver and Copper.
6172441 Well Silver certainly enjoys his.
That is an interesting line of questioning there Bottom. Very interesting.
Careful Bottom, if you decide to change there's a high chance your orientation flips as well, then where'd you be?
I imagine much SKREE! and KEE!! was heard that night.
To her "already-swollen" midsection.
"To" is there twice.
Thoughts of "mementos."
Don't capitalize "It" here.
(Also, I suspect you know this, but that particular name has been given to a pony in the show, now.)
6173834 Typos fixed!
6173850 This chapter felt largely interstitial, as plans were made and hints were dropped about future plans. Perhaps ironically, this chapter showcased how the tone of the story has altered from its original premise...or at least from its stated premise.
What I mean by that is that this story's goal - or at least, as I understood it - was to focus on sex and politics; we were going to see Silver's cavalcade of conquests in uncensored detail during his personal time, while we also got to see him try to navigate the intrigue that comes with international dealings as part of his work. And indeed, after a bit of ramping up, that was largely what we got.
However, a shift happened recently, largely in reaction to the death of Aila: the story became about Silver's feelings and relationships with the other characters. This isn't bad, per se, but rather is more of what Silver's previous stories were about. The specifics are all different now - and certainly no less interesting for that - but the tenor of the story has morphed back into what it used to be, losing its altered focus. This seemed at its most obvious when this chapter elected to skip over not just Bottom going down on Silver at the end of the last chapter, but also Silver's dalliance with Moon Dancer as well. It's no longer about politics (which is a shame, even if I have to admit that seemed like it was outside of the author's comfort zone), nor is it about sex; it's about Silver's relationships with a new cast of characters.
To put it another way, it's deja vu all over again. Again, this isn't necessarily a bad thing - Silver's previous stories were engaging, after all - but it's a deviation from where this fic initially wanted to go. If for no other reason than it was a nice way to try and keep things fresh (plus the fact that I personally enjoyed both the political intrigue and the naughty bits), I think that's a shame.
So with all of that said, what about the specific happenings in this chapter? Well, I'm quite nervous about Silver's "plan" for meeting Aila's parents, particularly since he said that it was a "ruse." This is extremely dicey territory he's dealing with. There is, quite simply, no good way to tell parents that their child has died. There's no good way to do it. Any sort of deception or trickery involved with telling them is almost guaranteed to blow up in his face, simply because this blow cannot be softened, and knowing that they've been tricked will only make them hate the messenger for interfering with such an important, yet awful, message. As such, I'm quite nervous that his idea is going to be just as bad as he thinks it is.
It was amusing seeing Bright Eyes being chastised, particularly since she seems to be stuffed full of foals, if she has a bulge where the other mares aren't even showing yet, mere days after conception. One can only imagine how many offspring are gestating there. That said, it was notable that she acquiesced so easily; I'm not sure why she's not straining harder at her bonds, but then again, I'm honestly not sure what she wants out of this entire arrangement - her entire character is still largely undefined, mostly because she keeps distancing herself from everyone, except Shei, as much as she can. It was funny how Shei ran away from her once they returned to the ship, though. One can only imagine how much involuntary lovin' she got from the ex-pirate captain.
Bottom's conversation with Shei was also very clear in what it foreshadowed: that Bottom is considering having a sex-change, to become a mare for Silver's sake...or rather, for his own sake, so that Silver will love him more (in every sense). That actually makes a great deal of sense, and it's nice to see that topic come up without it being someone's idea for how it would improve someone else. Instead, we have a character - one who is notably lacking in initiative - coming up with the idea on his own, in accordance with his own desires. Normally I'd bring up issues of gender identity, but given how feminine Bottom normally is, I'm not entirely certain that he wouldn't be able to make this transition easily. So yeah...fem-Bottom seems like a good idea, at least at first glance.
With all of that said, I suspect that we're going to see the confrontation with the Windsong family next. Here's hoping my fears about Silver's plan are unfounded.
6173986 I didn't go into detail because it didn't feel... important? Is that a good word for it? Sex for the sake of sex can get boring, so I try to keep it to new things, or important things. Going after Celestia, kinda important, we shouldn't gloss that. Silver's first awkard times with Bottom, also important, but that awkard is rapidly fading.
I hope I'm making some kind of a sense? Should I be going into more detail all the time?
6174066 No. You were correct that those scenes weren't important, and so it made sense for them not to be detailed. Rather, I was pointing out that the narrative has shifted in a direction that made those scenes less important to begin with.
something to be said for meeting exotic new people, and sowing wild oats.
What does that mean?
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I hope it isn't too hard.