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I am happy to see that you have continued this story. I do hope to see a lot more of it be for you are dun with it.
Dragonfox
love this story.
So the saga continues. May whatever celestial beings you believe in bless you 'cause this is an awesome story. Keep up the excellent writing!
Just going to track this, so when i finish the last one, i know where to go.
I am surprised to see the story continued this quickly. It is a vary nice surprise as I was having Silver withdraw.
I am seeing something here that is also surprising if my memory is right at some point in the past Celestia told I thing it was Silver she was going to allow Luna the first try at a alicorn foal, but with this trip and her heat coming close will she partake with Silver?
and a even bigger question if she does will silver be able to quicken her and will he survive it?
a normal mare / pony loses her self to the craving of heat.
now before I get a pm from our author about Celestia having total control of her heat for the most part he is right she can block the drive but if she gives in to it with silver it will be 7 to 10 days of heat driven lust and I am guessing her body will demand to be quickened when she loses control to that lust.
I am guessing that if it happens it will be several chapters away.
I am really liking how the new Silver Stars story it going more intrigue bigger plots sorry Celestia but I like that sun but.
Harts Fire
This isn't an error per se, but it feels like it should be "What kind of mare am I?"
"Solar" shouldn't be capitalized there.
The carpet of "brightly-colored" felines.
She was built with long legs and "a" defined body.
They followed her to a "plain-looking" edifice.
Capitalize "Saddle Arabian."
The one leading "them" pointed to the counter.
Celestia had a "polite-sounding" conversation.
With his "likely-ignorant" sounding questions.
Do they get charged extra for the typos in their room?
6047389 And the looks, oh the looks...
The sea voyage comes to an end, and the characters eventually arrive in Anugypt, bring a close to what I consider to be this story's prologue. From here on out, it moves into the actual meat of the tale, which is the political machinations that Silver and Celestia experience while abroad.
I had mixed - but mostly positive - feelings with how this chapter brought the sea voyage to an end. I say "mixed" here only because I quite enjoy that this story is taking its time with the actual plot progression, and to that end I honestly didn't mind that several chapters were being spent at sea, to the point where I found myself wondering if the sailing portion of the story needed to be brought to a close.
In this regard, however, I suspect that I'm fooling myself. That's because I quite liked that the previous chapter - with its sudden horrific turn of events - was treated as an isolated incident with no larger impact. Not every metaphorical dragon needs to be slain; sometimes it's enough just to survive a run-in with them. As such, it feels hypocritical of me to be glad that particular episode wasn't followed up on while at the same time wondering if we could have spent more time with Silver and Celestia sailing...simply put, what else would there be for them to do? As such, I'm fairly positive overall that they've finally reached Anugypt proper.
Unfortunately, I can't say the same for the interaction that Silver and Celestia had at the start of this chapter. The back-and-forth conversation that they had here felt like it was, to put it bluntly, all over the place; the tenor of their conversation was wildly careening from romantic ("I've never felt more love for you") to teasing ("I'm no longer a great and terrifying mare?") to sensuous ("I am the time of passion, when people turn their thoughts to those who captured their heart and express it physically") to rebuking ("That would destroy your sister, utterly and completely. I will not abandon her like that, and you shouldn't ask me to") to outright lustful with an air of dominance ("You would never see my sun again unless I cared to show you off"). The changes are going on so fast that it's almost impossible to keep up, and it makes the entire conversation have a surreal feeling about it.
It's clear that the story is trying to lay down a plausible reason why this would happen, since Silver was unable to quell his anxiety unless Celestia was embracing him. That's clearly an exceptionally intimate idea, especially when it's something that goes on for days, or maybe even weeks. The problem is that the presentation doesn't give this idea the time or the gravity it needs before ushering us towards the consequences of that, which is their very charged conversation. There should have been some scenes of Silver and Celestia "snuggling" (for lack of a better word) where we get to see that intimacy developing. When I go on about a lack of exposition, what I'm referring to is direct presentation of the characters' thoughts, emotions, and overall state of mind...however, I suspect that this sort of scene is what people think of when they hear the term "exposition" - being told about something happening, without it being shown.
The weakness of the presentation aside, we did get quite a bit of insight with regard to Celestia, here. Most notable was the hint that, when she becomes aroused, she becomes aggressive and dominant. That's not at all unbelievable, since how people react to sexually-charged situations can vary wildly from how they present themselves in polite company. Being a (largely) benevolent ruler, Celestia understands that she needs to put her best face forward, both for her subjects and to other nations. However, both within the context of this fic in particular - and for somepony with that much raw power and great authority in general - it makes a certain degree of sense that she'd have a much more dominant side. Celestia has the ability and the authority to take what she wants...so I can see her indulging herself when she lets her passions rule her.
Rather ironically - and yet entirely appropriately - this makes her the polar opposite of Luna, who is austere, and even severe, in her public persona, but is not only gentle and romantic when she's with a trusted lover, but appears to become almost submissive in her desire to be taken by a "true warrior."
In that regard, I think that Silver was wrong to chide Celestia for her statement about keeping him as a sex toy. That struck me as her paying him a compliment rather than an honest statement of how she wanted to treat him; it was her way of saying "you turn me on so much that I'd ride you ceaselessly," - essentially saying that he made her desire him greatly - rather than saying that she saw him as an object for her enjoyment. On the other hoof, Silver was right to chastise her for asking if he would change back to being a solar pony...he even let that statement go the first time (which was notable enough, since Celestia's statements about how he "wasn't sneaky" and was "forthright" seemed rather racist against lunar ponies), only slapping that idea down when she brought it up a second time.
As it was, I was glad to see him flatly refuse, since he was right about what that would do to Luna. What he didn't seem to notice, but I remain convinced that Celestia did, was that his giving up being a lunar pony would mean that he'd no longer be studding...at least without the same social impetus, since he wouldn't be the progenitor of lunar unicorns any longer. Of course, that'd leave more of him for Celestia, which I doubt she was unaware of.
Moving on, the situation in Anugypt is already layered with political intrigue, and they're barely off the boat yet, much to my delight. Celestia is right that the pharaoh's absence, and the instruction that they wait, is rather insulting. I suspect that this is not an accident, but rather is a power-play (albeit a bit of a petty one) to show them just who is in charge here. By contrast, Celestia was quite insightful in pointing out that they can't be rude to their host by staying on the boat. I really hope we see more of this in future chapters, since this is exactly the sort of grandstanding and symbolism that high-level diplomacy is supposed to have.
I feel like I should comment on the Anugyptians, but there's very little for me to mention so far. Twinstreak, unlike some of the other characters we've met so far, didn't really stand out from the crowd. Indeed, Silver's asking him for his name felt very much like it was operating at a meta-level; I half-expected Twinstreak to say "My name? But sir, I'm just a background character!" We did also get some interesting insight with the addition of a winged cat (to use the old D&D lingo, a "tressym"), but so far the cat-people of Anugypt remain firmly in the background with Doublebrush exiting the stage.
Ironically enough, the Saddle Arabian pony that they met had much more screen presence, despite her not having a name (yet). Her interaction with Silver revealed quite a bit about not only her kind, but her herself, since she was amusingly embarrassed over treating Silver like he was just Celestia's consort. Did she not see that he was a male alicorn, something that was heretofore believed to be a myth?
More interesting, however, was how she rubbed against him...despite his saying that he and Celestia were herd-mates (that is, married). She did that practically with Celestia there, and without knowing anything about him (such as how he's the "Stud of the Land"). That means that she either knew more than she was letting on (unlikely, but not impossible in this intrigue-charged situation), that the gesture meant nothing at all (possible, but I hope unlikely due to being boring), or that she was flirting with him. Since she was just bowing and scraping to Princess Celestia herself, this would be highly improper...but I have to wonder if there's something we're unaware of, here.
When Silver was a mare, she was almost intoxicated by the scent of stallions. Even when she was already pregnant - and so not in her season - she was swooning over Flash Sentry and Big Mac, without them doing anything. Indeed, since stallions don't have a season, unlike mares, this suggests that stallions are almost always presenting a favorable scent to nearby mares, who simply have to learn how to deal with it as they mature. If that's the case, then what sort of scent is Silver - a never-before-seen male alicorn - putting out? Is he unknowingly seducing mares (and possibly females of other species?) simply by being around them? Could that be why not only this mare was so forward with him, but why Celestia was suddenly being so aggressive?
It's an interesting idea, and one that Silver won't be able to help much (unless he drowns himself in cologne). It'd certainly make Luna's remark about Celestia not being used to the scent of a stallion much more pointed. It'd also explain why he's getting so much action lately (though that was true before he became a male alicorn)...and a lot of what might happen going forward.
6047353 Typos thrown out into the desert to bake.
6047551 Apologies for not going into greater detail in the snuggles. I didn't think too much of them beyond what I wrote (they happened and Silver enjoyed them and minds were calmed down) and pushed right to the Anugypt portion of the chapter.
The conversation with Celestia felt all over the place? Well, yes, it was all over the place. Celestia and Silver are both feeling where the other stands, and that poking and prodding sent their conversation all over the map. They came out of it a little more understanding than they went in.
Silver, perhaps for a moment, considered Celestia's proposal, but he is satisfied with his image, and he knows it would be devastating to Luna, who he cares for a lot. Turning the conversation to romantic poetry probably sealed his fate with Celestia, and he should expect a rough time of things ahead, though likely not an unpleasant one.
Twinstreak was a background character, ICly. He's handles red tape, and that's what he does. He is paid to be in the background.
The Saddle Arabians, on the other hand, are not, and made their presence known. Is that Saddle Arabian hoping to get some royal action despite their bond? Well, who knows what the specific rules and traditions of the Saddle Arabians are, to say nothing of this specific individual. Would Luna be upset if a bit of lunar unicorn was added to the Saddle Arabian population?
Random query to end, what do you think of the pic?
6047591 Given that Luna's mandate seems to be for lunar unicorns to exist in notable numbers, I can't see her being too upset if Silver studs them wherever, whenever he has the chance. Remember, Night Watch predicted that if Silver didn't set limits, Luna would be bringing a constant stream of mares for him to breed. As such, I doubt she'd be upset if they were of other ethnicities...though I admit that I'm presuming that all ponies that aren't lunar are solar by default, and that might not be true. Crystal ponies, after all, seem outside of that distinction (and now I want Silver to stud some crystal ponies; imagine the dusky jeweled colors that would create), so maybe Saddle Arabian ponies are too.
That's not even getting into possible (or not) cat-pony hybrids. What would those even look like?
With regards to the picture, I like it well enough (I can't draw at all, so talent like Sita's always leaves me impressed), but there are a few things that I didn't care for. The presentation of Silver's body and expression are notable - he looks impressive, even intimidating, with his wild mane, fangs, and near-glowing eyes. However, his crown seems to be lopsided, since we can see most of it, whereas his face and his horn are in profile.
Likewise, she did a good job with the red interior on his cape (is that a cape?) and...is that jewel on his chest glowing? That looks impressive! However, his remaining clothes leave something to be desired. While the ruffles/frills on his cloak and at the end of his sleeves surely took technical skill to draw, I feel that they detract from his appearance, making him look a bit too much like a dandy. His body type, mane, and face all lend themselves to a very "badass" look (even if that's not how he acts), and trying to soften it with the frills clashes with that. In fact, those "sleeves" on his legs aren't even attached to anything...they're separate, which makes them look like hosiery.
Overall, the picture paints a somewhat mixed bag for me. Silver, with his natural black and silver-white body colors, should have similarly stark colors presented against him. The red works, but the purple is only barely accentuating his natural presentation, and the frills aren't helping at all. I feel like she was trying to play up a "pony Dracula" image, but it's not working.
6047614 fc05.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2013/329/c/7/pussy_the_killer_cat_pony__vector__by_destinyshirshuxd-d6vn1od.png
6047626
Wow...I have no idea what to say to that, other than it wasn't at all what I was expecting a pony-cat hybrid to be.
6047674 Heh, as for the crystal glowing, I'm surprise you didn't recognize the heart crystal Silver's had since back when he was David, glowing with its Twilight resonance.
6047684 D'oh!
It's so easy to forget about that thing, since so many chapters can go by without it being relevant, or even mentioned at all.
6047691 Image edited, better?
6047759 Wow is that a major difference!
Seriously, now Silver looks freaking scary! Anyone who saw him decked out like that would be likely to gasp in fear and reach for weapons, he looks so fearsome!
6047360 It is for me.
But that might just be because I have a slightly old-fashioned view.
6047815 The FAQ of the site says teen/sex is enough for allusions, and mature/sex is for actual descriptions of the act. I wasn't trying to make judgment calls, just follow the rules.
Seems like this installment of the Chronicles of Silver is more for the purpose of re-introducing Celestia and showing that her attitude has improved towards Silver. Totally excited about that!
And at least Night won't get too lonely with Luna still there to make her still feel wanted and loved.
6049341 Welcome to the party!
possibly
6849155 I should have checked myself ...
the Pharaoh (three times)
Ever since you opened the tomb.
Pretty sure this question is the first one..
Because the next paragraoh also says second..
11711373
They're both seconds. The first second is the second half of what he was saying. The second second was the second question.