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i saw a typo... but then it hid from me
I found two of them. Paragraph 10, line 3; By should be "my." Also paragraph 19, line 2 "ha" needs an "s" to be "has."
6307759 they do that all the time
Presuming that this is referring to the circumstances that human-Celestia was in when she made her wish, this last half of the sentence needs to be tweaked, to "though she had been in a much more dire place than himself."
With "magically-wielded" brushes.
This needs to be either "you've been" or "you're being" visited by the Text all this time, not both.
Except that's not quite what happened; she knew she had to have faith in Discord (faith which was betrayed).
He "has" a 'why.'
You should end that sentence with "of you."
Shei "twisted" an ear back.
6311247 Typos thrown overboard.
But won't the Anubians get discovered when their ship is "routinely inspected" (by Silver's suggestion nonetheless!)?
Danger danger!
Keep going! ;)
6311388 This was a rather sweet chapter. While the scenes between Silver and Celestia felt rather sappy (as Silver noted) they did seem heartfelt. It really seems like the two of them have come to share something special due to their finding out that they have similar origins. My personal take on this is that the two of them needed to have some sort of special connection, since they had no notable bond on which to strengthen their relationship. Silver's relationship with Luna, for example, had myriad ups and downs - they shared a romance that felt real because of how much turmoil went along with it, trying and failing more than once before they got it right.
His romance with Celestia, by contrast, has always felt rather...subdued, perhaps is the word. There's never been any sense that he's connected to her in a deeply emotional manner, simply because they've never hit any of the flashpoints that necessarily come with trying to connect to someone that way. He and Celestia haven't had anything on the level of his painful breakup and reconnection with Luna, the similar problem he had with Fast Change, the slow and fearful courtship he had with Twilight, or the "how do we make this work" issues he's discussed with Night Watch. Instead, his relationship with Celestia felt..."formal," for lack of a better word, or perhaps I should say "professional." It just seemed like there was never any skin in the game.
Now it feels...slightly more honest, in that regard. This still doesn't seem to have navigated the emotional rocks that I perceive as being intrinsic to a deeper romance, but this is as least some sort of shared experience that they can bond over.
I'm a bit surprised by Celestia's teasing Silver via that "stallion bits" spell. Leaving aside the social reasons why she had that declared illegal (and the impression that it gives for her to use contraband magic, even in private), I was under the impression that she simply didn't care for it. That is, I thought she viewed that magic as a bit too transgressive for her tastes. It was likewise a bit surprising that Silver acquiesced to her unspoken offer so readily. Is that his natural submissive tendency, or is he slowly growing more open-minded? If nothing else, he can put his practice with the Anubians to good use.
So they're stopping at Anugypt for supplies, something that makes sense given how many extra mouths are on the ship. Is that something mentioned incidentally, or will this see any sort of continuation/resolution of how they left things there?
6314739 I always try to write what feels natural for the characters to do at the time. Celestia is a tease, a huge damn tease. With her feelings for Silver touching on the libidinous, she didn't feel awkward teasing him with something awfully improper, and her read was right, since Silver wasn't disgusted or hurt by the offer, instead he rose to the bait and opened the doorway to incredibly inappropriate play later on. If he had reacted poorly, it wouldn't have been that hard to brush off as a jest. As for use of the spell at all, it would be far from the first forbidden spell she kept on tap but didn't feel good sharing with her precious little ponies.
6314791
Hm, good point.