In the year 1006 of the Celestial reign, Equestria was attack by the unprovoked Batarians, a species from beyond the stars. The inhabitants of Earth won the week long war by befriending the Turians. The Batarians were defeated and banished to the far reaches of the galaxy by the Council.
With the Batarians gone Ponies were offered the vacant seat in the Assembly. In a few short, but eventful years Ponies had shifted the course of the galaxy. They had stop wars, discovered new technologies and even brought peace between many species.
The ponies claimed these feats were done through the magi of friendship. But inhabitants of the galaxy call this great feat…
Mass Effect: Syndications!
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Good start so far. I like your novel approach to 'ponifying' the Mass Effect universe, and your OCs are well done from what you've posted.
I suggest you get a proofreader, as there's a number of spelling and grammar errors. Also, with regards to Fluttershy, if she only inspired thousands, why would she get a statue? Maybe inspired millions, or go into more details about how she inspired them. Still, good work.
188896 Thanks man. Yeah, I forgot I'm terrible at grammar. How would you suggest I find a proofreader?
255815
Well, on FIMFiction there's
http://www.fimfiction.net/index.php?view=group&group=27
You can also try ponychan.net or fim.413chan.net's fiction boards
Alternatively fanfiction.net has people willing to proofread or beta
read. http://www.fanfiction.net/betareaders/cartoon/My_Little_Pony/
A good editor helps a lot.
255815Or you can go to overextensive editors. All of them would be able to help you at he drop of a dime, all you have to do is a proper summary