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Alicorn Applejack and Other Amazin' Apple Stories2,261 stories ·653 members

Life Gone By

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An elderly Applejack hears hoofsteps outside. She gets up and investigates, causing her to reminisce about her deceased ancestors and family members.

Note: This started as a little warmup paragraph, ~200 words long, and turned into this. Edited by my lovley friends Diamond & Sunleap.

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Prane

Prane #1 · Jun 3rd, 2013 · · ·

Halfway through the text I though: "Hey, it would be nice to read about AJ walking around Ponyville and reliving her best memories.".
Then I read to the end.
Short, but enjoyable read - at least it wasn't Twilight outliving everypony else all over again. Now go and write some more stories!

EpicGuy

EpicGuy #2 · Jun 3rd, 2013 · 1 · ·

"Apple bloom, how are ya? What's it like bein' dead?"

...Strangely dark, yet meaningful at the same time. Overall this is a very nice read, but if anything I'd suggest that you break up your paragraphs a little more.